*Sniff*
You need a warning in the summary - we need a box of tissues!
Charlie:0
Author's Response: haha lol! Glad you liked it!
so...CUTE! :-D!!!!! that was so adorable and exactly like sirius. i ♥ sirius. not as much as i love the twins, but sirius is definitely one of my fave char., and it's so sad that he's dead...or is he? :-? Rave♥
Author's Response: I love Sirius too! Thanks!
*looks up at the number 1 next to reviews at the top of the screen, whips out wand, and blasts it into oblivion*
There. That takes care of that. *Smiles smugly*
Okay, my last (hopefully) say on this poem: short and sweet. Wonderful. The perfection of short and sweet.
Watch out! Perfection has arrived!
I love this poem....oh...my...god...I have to go check something....must see if I've favorited you...I think it did...I must've...*rips hair out*
Yeah, i said before that I had a favorite part, but that was just my ultra-ultra-favorite, because this entire poem is awesome. I love it.
*thisisnotspam. Ithasapoint*
Yes, this does have a point. To praise you! :-)
Wonderful job!
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
*looks up again at the top of the screen before submitting - the number 1 is back!*
What the-? I thought I killed you! (Meaning the number 1)
Well, prepare to change into a two!
Submit
Author's Response: Thanks! *huggles*
Hi! I love all your poetry, I hope you know! (Of course I had to review - how could you have zero reviews?!)
Nice job - good rhythm, and I like how you switched up the last stanza a bit to change it from the rest of the poem. It was dramatic in an un-dramatic way.
I agree with everything you said about Sirius. *sniff* He was sort of a heartbreaker...okay, more than sort of... :-)
Hmm....my favorite line/stanza/part? It is this one:
A past unknown,
A heart untouched,
A face so tortured,
A smile so sweet, but…
Nice repetition here, with every line starting with the letter 'a'. It made it rhythmic and powerful. (To me. I guess some don't think poems about Sirius are powerful....*glares at the 0 next to the word 'reviews' at the top of the page*)
Great job punctuating this, too. See, that may not sound like much coming from me *glances back warily at poems needing to be proofread...shivers* :-), but you did a wonderful job.
I only had a small problem with the rhythm in this part: Kidding! Ha ha...I really amuse myself. But really, you had:
a)strong rhythm
b)strong structure
c)and a lot of power behind this poem, so...
Write more!
Reviewingly yours-
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Author's Response: Thanks you so much! Seeing a review made my day, so thanks again! *huggles*
