Reviews For Wondering Why
Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 04/18/07 19:56
Chapter: Why?

I liked reading this. I like how there are so many words that rhyme with "why." It adds a little something to the poem- makes it more enjoyable. Good job!



Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/31/07 18:11
Chapter: Why?

Yes! I figured out why the line, I'd fly for you, is my favorite line!

Everything else Ginny offers to do for Harry is possible - yet she is willing to do the impossible for him, because she loves him.

That's why I like it.

Great job! Fabulous poem, too - write more!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates


Author's Response: Thanks! I like that line too!

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/21/07 13:53
Chapter: Why?

I still love this poem. It is so great and it flows well.

I think you should put this excerpt in the summary: I would kill for you,
Iíd die,
I do everything for you,
You never try,
And thatís why I find myself wondering why.


I think this conveys the meaning of this poem the best - Ginny would do anything at all for Harry, but doesn't know it he will for her.

Good luck!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates


Author's Response: Thanks! *huggles* ehem. I'm feeling a little emotional.

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/18/07 14:13
Chapter: Why?

Oh - another suggestion. I think you should put an excerpt of the poem in your summary - more people read it, that way! (And who wouldn't want to read this?)

I still love this poem.

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: Thanks! Do you have a good idea of which part to put in the summary, because i don't know!

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/17/07 17:58
Chapter: Why?

Wow. Touching and incredible. Yeah, no matter how big a fan I am of Harry/Ginny, I know that if Harry keeps pushing her away, she'll leave... :-(

Just one suggestion. The last two lines of the last stanza read: But at least I'd know why, / Know why. I think you should change the comma there to the three periods (...) that show a pause. I think it would make it more emotional, more personal than the comma.

I know its weird, but my favorite line is: I would fly for you. Don't know why I like it so much - it just touched me somewhere, for some reason. Good job!

I am such a devoted poetry reader here that my mom is trying to kick me off MNFF...never! Ha ha ha....I will finish my review for your spectacular poem.

I love the emotion portrayed here. You really got Ginny's frustration across, her pain, her anger with Harry making her wait - and her love. (That's why I like that line so much - it shows her love. :-)) What a great piece.

One more thought - in the second to last stanza, a line reads: That's why I'm going to leave you behind. It fits really well with the flow of the poem, because above it, in other stanzas, there are lines that read almost the same way: And thatís why I find myself wondering why.

Repetition (sp?) is good in poetry, and you made it great here. :-)

Write more poetry!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: Wow thank you SO much (again!) It's really nice to hear such positive feedback!

Reviewer: Lily of the US
Date: 01/17/07 16:48
Chapter: Why?

oohh, that's sad. beautifully written, though. i really like it. ~megan~

Author's Response: Thanks. I didn't want it to be too pining, as Ginny isn't that kind of person. Anyway, thanks so much!

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