Oh! What a brilliant fic!!
The way you describe Lily's feelings seems just right! And James IS a prat around Lily! good work!
And you write very well, it's easy to read and get to the 'inside' of the story ... (I'm not good at formulate my thoughts and feelings...sorry...)
Keep up the good work, and share the next chapter with us soon!
Author's Response: omg thank you soo much! =) (and I'm sure your just fine at formulating your thoughts and feelings) lol i'm re-editing the next chapter and i'll try and get it up soon!
Really good! This isn't ur first is it? B/c It's great. I write Fanfic but I haven't posted anything yet. Anyway ur great!
Author's Response: omgg thank you so much!! it is my first actually =). thank you soo much for your review, and hopefully the 2nd chapter will be up soon!! i'm working on it =D
Joanne Grant shrieked her black eyes wide. “He took them off, he took them off!” She put her head down, covering her face with her hands, her long, waist length silky black hair falling around her face like a curtain. “Oooh that’s gross! I’m scarred for life!”
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LOL! That reminded me of Phoebe from Friends, when she saw Monica and Chandler kissing.
'They're doing it! Ahh, my eyes! My eyes!'
I love Pheebs. Anyway, great fanfic. Hope you'll continue. And Amos sucks.
Just thought I'l say that, LOL.
Author's Response: LOL your review made me laugh!! i am working on this story, but my email is acting really stupid (bleh) lol but i'll try and get the 2nd chapter up soon! thanks for your review!! =)
Hey! I'm the first reviewer to your story! Yay!
Well, I just wanted to say that this is a very good start, a little short, but good.
I loved the last line: Alex looked over a James. Oh Merlin, they were both so clueless.
I just realized that that's actually two lines . . . =D
Well, congratulations of getting your story posted, I know I always feel thrilled when mine go up. Good luck with submitting chapter two! I'll keep an eye out.
Author's Response: thank you soooo much! =) lol, i'm working in editing the 2nd chapter (ive actually got a lot written, i was just never expecting to put it up here--i did though, lol now ive got to deal with monster editing) but yeah, i'm working on it! thanks again for ur review, im soo glad u like it so far!
