One of the Best stories I ever read.
whoa, great story, awesome plot. 10/10
wow! I'm glad I waited until I was finished with my own entry to read yours- it was so good, I probably would have taken some of the ideas without realizing it! I really enjoyed how you characterized Maisie- you have a gift with words! The prophecy was extraordinarily haunting- I could picture the battle in my head. One thing- at the end, it says, "Does mother and father know about this?" and I believe it should say "Do mother and father know about this?" Other than that, excellent job!
Yay! I'm so glad that it got accepted! I absolutely love this story, you know. Very creative, and then the way that you wrote it? Marvelous, darling! *giggles* Great work. I hope you win! ~Lindsey :)
What a great story! I loved the way you set the time frame by using Cassandra Trelawney. I also enjoyed the idea of the spooky woods being the Deathly Hallows. Normally I'd leave a concrit, but my brain is fried from my own challenge entry tonight and I'd forget to tell you about your wonderful story if I waited so, good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This is my first fic that I've written that mentions Cassandra Trelawney. I hope your brain gets unfried.
Very well done. I enjoyed this story quite a bit. Your writing style is simply marvelous. Your descriptions are chilling and the story was very believable and well thought out. I would like to know more about these Deathly Hallows. It almost makes me wish it was a chaptered fic.
One thing that I did notice throughout the story is a few dialogue errors. For example:
“I promise.” she said casually, not taking an eye off her sister sitting across from her.
should be:
“I promise,” she said casually, not taking an eye off her sister sitting across from her.
“That’s better. Come in.” her sister said promptly, ushering her in.
should be:
“That’s better. Come in,” her sister said promptly, ushering her in.
and
“No,!” yelled Cassandra.
Should be:
“No!” yelled Cassandra.
Other than that, it really was a marvelous story. It had me intrigued and eager to keep reading. You did a splendid job!
Author's Response: *blushes* I'm really flattered. The idea for the Deathly Hallows came while I was watching this Johnny Depp movie called Sleepy Hollow. I thought of something really dark and scary and I came up with the idea for a forest.
