One of the Best stories I ever read.
whoa, great story, awesome plot. 10/10
wow! I'm glad I waited until I was finished with my own entry to read yours- it was so good, I probably would have taken some of the ideas without realizing it! I really enjoyed how you characterized Maisie- you have a gift with words! The prophecy was extraordinarily haunting- I could picture the battle in my head. One thing- at the end, it says, "Does mother and father know about this?" and I believe it should say "Do mother and father know about this?" Other than that, excellent job!
Yay! I'm so glad that it got accepted! I absolutely love this story, you know. Very creative, and then the way that you wrote it? Marvelous, darling! *giggles* Great work. I hope you win! ~Lindsey :)
What a great story! I loved the way you set the time frame by using Cassandra Trelawney. I also enjoyed the idea of the spooky woods being the Deathly Hallows. Normally I'd leave a concrit, but my brain is fried from my own challenge entry tonight and I'd forget to tell you about your wonderful story if I waited so, good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This is my first fic that I've written that mentions Cassandra Trelawney. I hope your brain gets unfried.
Very well done. I enjoyed this story quite a bit. Your writing style is simply marvelous. Your descriptions are chilling and the story was very believable and well thought out. I would like to know more about these Deathly Hallows. It almost makes me wish it was a chaptered fic.
One thing that I did notice throughout the story is a few dialogue errors. For example:
“I promise.” she said casually, not taking an eye off her sister sitting across from her.
“I promise,” she said casually, not taking an eye off her sister sitting across from her.
“That’s better. Come in.” her sister said promptly, ushering her in.
“That’s better. Come in,” her sister said promptly, ushering her in.
“No,!” yelled Cassandra.
“No!” yelled Cassandra.
Other than that, it really was a marvelous story. It had me intrigued and eager to keep reading. You did a splendid job!
Author's Response: *blushes* I'm really flattered. The idea for the Deathly Hallows came while I was watching this Johnny Depp movie called Sleepy Hollow. I thought of something really dark and scary and I came up with the idea for a forest.