I can’t tell you how hard it was to find a story that didn’t already have multiple spewly reviews on it. But this lovely story was absent of a spew review, and even if it isn’t your newest piece, I still enjoyed it.
I LOVE missing moment pieces. And this was a nice interpretation of how Sirius passed his time in Hogsmeade while Harry needed him close. Nice job sharing this snippet. :D I can also see how it would be perfectly suited for a Christmas story for Anna. You very appropriately created a dog lover in Hogsmeade, yet you also brought in a character we’re familiar with (Hagrid) and connected us to the new character “Mopsy” beautifully by her association with a character we know well. Nice job with that.
I noticed that you use a lot of commas in this story. And that’s okay, it works in the context. But I felt, as a reader, that the commas broke up the flow of the story so much, and not all of the commas you used were necessary. Some comma uses aren’t even consistent from one paragraph to the next. So… yes, the commas were a bit distracting.
However, I loved the ending. What an endearing character you’ve created with Mopsy. She’s crazy but helps a character we all love and care for. It’s lovely to think someone in Hogsmeade was taking care of Sirius during that trying period of his life.
Anyway, great story, light read, lovely moment in Sirius’ life. This was just a fun piece of your writing. :) Nice job!
I love Mopsy, she's such an original and unusual character. I love missing moments and this one just works in so perfectly becasue Sirius mentions a dog lady in GoF. I really liked the little details like her Patronus and the neighbor who disregards her because she's the town ewuivalent of the crazy cat lady. It all jsut seems to pull the picture together. I also don't usually like narrator's speaking in the story, but you pulled it off with the narrator at the start and finish. One question though, why did you opt to have her name him Stanley, I always thought that it was the lady that named him Snuffles? Really, great job though.
Author's Response: Stanley really just did seem like a comical name at the time :D. hee, you pretty much picked up on the point of the whole story! Manufique!
This is such a sweet little story; it made me smile and feel cosy inside. Mospy's characterisation is excellent; she actually reminded me a bit about Mrs. Figg.
Thanks for a lovely read in the dead of the night :)
Author's Response: Thank you for such a sweet review on such a long day :)
omg this is hilarious!!!!
poor Mopsy, batty people are to much fun not to tease, especially in fanfiction =D
Author's Response: Aww, I ♥ Mopsy :D I think I should poke your dog next :D
A very light and entertaining read;your story gives me an idea of how Sirius may have passed his life in the form of a dog. I especially liked the part on Mopsy's Patronus. Good work on that one!
Author's Response: Thank you! I like writing deleted scenes, seeing as I love reading them so much :)
Aww very nice, well written and i don't think i noticed any typo's.
Well Done but i don't think you can touch a patronus
Author's Response: >.> Looking back I don't remember harry being able ot touch his, either *sighs* But thank you for that, I'll go in and edit it when I find the time with homework >.>.
I hope this isn't first review because I hate leaving first review. Wow, I loved Mopsy! She's friends with Hagrid too! It was just so perfect. I wonder what would happen if she met Mrs. Figg.
I didn't know dogs could be attacked by dementors, I suppose he couldn't have any chocolate in Stanley form. Wow, this was great. I... wow.
Author's Response: Aww, well I thought it was that whole "dogs can sense" stuff. And what's wrong with the first review? You just made my day!