Reviews For Goodbye Forever
Reviewer: tatjanablack
Date: 07/31/07 12:11
Chapter: Goodbye Forever

So Sly, now I am back from my trip, so now I come agian and I would like to review your story. And I like this story a lot. As I have said many times before I just love your story - (maybe I should say something new - your story is bad . Nah I just kidding :P). I like you use Bella sister - her point of view I mean. You have a great way of writing. The thing I like most is the dialouge. It is so real and I just see it... Anyway another very good story :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for another kind review!

Reviewer: VeniaTaint
Date: 01/09/07 10:24
Chapter: Goodbye Forever

*tumultous applause* that was really beautiful and truly explains alot about the sisters. I think this same story in Bella PoV would be great, just to give her more than a blank face obsessed with power.
~The Tainted One

Author's Response: Normally I write in Bella's POV, but somehow it seemed that this story needed to be in Andromeda's POV. Although, I assure Bella was thinking about a lot more than power. ;)

Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/08/07 19:33
Chapter: Goodbye Forever

Hi there! Nice piece, you do such a good job with these characters, I really feel like you've made them your own. I don't know how exactly, but you have! :)
I have a question about the middle of this piece: did you consciously decide to use only dialogue and no narrative, or did it just turn out that way? On one hand, the dialogue is great and absolutely conveys the action that is happening; on the other, I wonder how the piece would change and flow if the dialogue were interspersed with narrative describing the sisters - their voices, their faces, their actions as they speak, etc. An interesting little experiment, perhaps. ;) I was just wondering how you approached that middle section as it was well done and unique.
Nice job and good luck with your continuing stories of the Black family (since I sense they are your faves and I'm sure you will continue to write about them!) ~Gina :)
PS. We are side by side on the tens list today. *high five* :D

Author's Response: Hi Gina! Thanks so much for the compliments. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

As for the middle with all dialogue, I tend to do that during intense conversations. It's just a personal style thing. When I read intense conversations I tend to skip the narrative and read only the dialogue, I find that it's enough.

*giggles* And you guessed my deep "secret" love of the Blacks. Whatever gave me away? And yes, you can expect more stories from me about them. They seem to spend a lot of time in my brain. All their fighting gives me a headache. ;)

And yay for the tens list! I was so exicited when I first made it on there. Congrats to you, too.

Thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: Draco_is_hot
Date: 01/08/07 18:59
Chapter: Goodbye Forever

that did NOT sound lyk bella @ all.

Author's Response: That sounds like my Bella, but thanks for the feedback, none the less.

Reviewer: radcliffe4eva
Date: 01/08/07 17:14
Chapter: Goodbye Forever

I adore all your stories, and I love how you portrayed the relationship beween Bella and Andromeda. You made Bella seem human and you explained (in an excellent way) Andromeda's decision to essentially leave the Black family...It was really good! :-)

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: beautifulromantic
Date: 01/08/07 17:03
Chapter: Goodbye Forever

I like these types of stories that show the more sensitive side of Bellatrix. This is really nice, the way that you incorporated her pureblood belifs into her sister side.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it.

I didn't have a problem writing about Bella's pureblood beliefs along with her sisterly side. They are both a part of who she is.

Thanks again for the review. :D

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