I like how it rhymes, and the idea that two words can kill so easily. *shivers* Not that killing is a good thing, but you really captured its essence here. Good job!
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Note: I actually did something like that in one of my fics! I think it went:
A simple thing, only two words
Fell on your ears, wrought death,
Said with the voice of death itself.
Weird how we both had that idea...great job on this fic!
Beautiful poem, I really love the tone.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. :) I very much appreciate it.