Reviews For Broken
Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/14/07 9:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

I love how simple this is. Not that that is a bad thing - in fact, here its a good thing. Because it is simple it is also very powerful. Wow!

I only have a problem with one line: Now his mentor and grandfather figure gone, too. I'm not so sure you need the words 'grandfather figure' here - mentor covers it.

I like the last stanza the best - it conveys Harry's suffering (sort of - more like his desperation) and how he feels about the Last Battle, what he feels about what his part in it will ultimately be.

Great job!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
(In response to your author's response to my other review, when you said you liked Blake's poetry, I just wanted to say that, I do too! Obviously. :-) )

Author's Response: Thanks again for the review! 8)

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/13/07 21:34
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wonderful! I loved it!

(Sorry this is so short. It's 10:35, and I'm supposed to go to bed...I'll get another true review for you tomorrow, when I wake up and can think straight again...)

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked my poem! BTW, Blake is one of my favorite poets! Tyger was first poem of his I read. It is really good!

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 01/07/07 22:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

Cwiddy, I have a been a fan of your poetry for years! I love that you have started to write some about Harry and the Potterverse. I really lots of feelings from this poem. I feel his loss, but towards the end I start to feel his determination. I also feel his uncertainty. Great job! :) Cyns

Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback Sis! Glad I was good at portraying Harry's emotions here. That is what I use poetry for most of the time!

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