Wonderful Fanfic... geniously written... Thanks a lot for sharing with us ur skills
I love the promotion of House Unity in this… I mean, OH MY SALAZAR she’s with Salazar, but he’s suggesting she dance with Godric, so everything’s okay, for the meantime. I loved his line about his clothes. So, I’m grudgingly admitting that perhaps I like this Salazar. I was so ready to say Snape just then, because he reminds me so much of Salazar.
“Something slow that you would be able to keep up with, perhaps”
Again, it’s a tiny nit pick. A missing period isn’t really worth crying over. Unless it’s a milky full stop. In which case, cry your pretty little eyes out honey :). And I love the instant superiority Rowena takes as soon as she finds something she can relate to on her level.
As much as I hate to admit this, I do actually like Salazar in this. I really do think he’s the sort of bloke I would myself talk to, were I not so intimidated by his looks and his attire >.> but just the way he speaks of Godric and Helga is in such a sharp contrast to the way Malfoy and other Slytherins talk of their fellow class mates. It’s a little sad to see how far a remark can go to corrupt the generations to come. And, we know who built the castle now, and why his chamber was so well hidden. Yay for details!
I love the way Rowena’s natural talent comes into it. The Celtic mythology inclusion is wonderful. I love the mead, and the accents and the customs and most certainly, the names. They’re beautiful names.
She made a good pupil and learned at a rapid rate. Rapa Oroglio ;-). She’s a mighty fine turnip. I love this particular attribute; it fits in well with canon. We love our bread, we love our butter, but most of all… I love the way she goes from being a little girl n the forest to THE Rowena Ravenclaw. I particularly liked those last few paragraphs about the horses and Rowena’s first sighting of Hogwarts. So, thank you for taking me on this lovely tale.
So, everything I assumed in the previous chapter was wrong. WRONG. How unkind you are to do this to me! But at least we’re rid of Angus here. He’s like a bad smell that just won’t go away. And her brother is one I’d like to strangle. It’s a pity Rowena lived in the time she did, back when women weren’t anything more than homemakers. I like how you’ve touched upon this in previous chapters, but it really stood out for me in this one because of the position with her father. Then again, her father would have (?) known that Rowena wasn’t his, so the farm would have gone to the brother anyway, but I’m still angry at the injustice of it all on Rowena’s part :).
That’s the man who brought you here. He’s such a great one; we’re all a little in love with him, for sure, it’s hard to ignore such a fine face. And the stories of his battle deeds, well they’d be enough to make any girl fall at his feet.
Back to my being wrong, here I was, starting to ship RR/GG with that description that reminded me of flames, and egad, I was wrong! SO cruel! And you probably even anticipated people’s reactions, too. You’re ebil Jan, ebil.
“My lady, it is a great pleasure to meet you and on such an occasion. I am Godric Gryffindor of York and you may consider me at your service.”
You totally just made it up to me with this. And then you go and create a love triangle! EBIL!
I love the way you’ve included the Founders in this mythological tale of age. I just adore it, the sidhes and the faeries and all the magic! It all packs quite a powerful punch.
He squeezed between her and the fire, letting his fingers pinch at the flesh on her bottom as he did so. Sorry for the pun, but he’s an ass. And you gave him a Scottish accent – squee!
“See that you’re not,” he called back. “My toenails need to be filed for I’ve bleeding feet.” Oh, EW. And now I totally ship SS/RR/GG. Urgh. File your own toenails you nasty x.x.
“Then why did they not choose them,” Eh. Technically it’s a question, but a rhetorical one at that. Come on Rowena, don’t let them get a word in! Shoot down the silly stepmother! (I love how she knows that she’s second best to a human. Heh.) I love this Rowena. She’s sharp and smart and got all the workings of the heroine of our House! I love how you’ve developed her from that young girl to the mistreated young woman churning butter and clipping toenails.
In this bright light his hair was curious; at the roots it was deep and dark, yet it gradually grew to red and finally, gloriously, burst into gold, so that he had the look of a man whose head had been dipped into molten metal. I’m about to burst with excitement. I have all these ideas flying around! Guh, I love your mystery in your writing. It’s so fingernail biting!
“I do not ken your face and I see you are wearing better clothes than we have seen these past years.” YAY SCOTTISH! I noticed ‘wee’ too. *squishes* If you wanted to include an accent, instead of ‘do not’ I’d recommend ‘dinnae’ which, from experience, works well :).
“Of course you can. I do not have Fedelm’s trick with the future. Did she tell you anything of substance; I know she can be a conundrum when the mood takes her to be so.” *frowns* You’ve got me confused. The ‘Did she tell you anything of substance’ warrants a question mark, but they you continue the sentence with a semicolon. Might I suggest two separate sentences? I think I’d be less confused and less inclined to pick that way ;-)
So, I like the jump from the child to the young woman. And I feel for Midhir, but mostly I feel for the man she’s betrothed to, because he’s sure going to have his work cut out for him as far as impressing her goes. One wonders what he had to do to convince her to marry him. And yes, I will diligently go and read the next three chapters! I’m greedy for more :).
The moon had glossed the lake with a sheen that reflected the heavens back on themselves. A beautiful start to the story :).
I heart Rowena. She’s everything we stand for >.> born under the pale full moon of a November night to a mother who had made much use of the Rowan’s bark to alleviate her sickness during pregnancy That would have to be my favourite detail of Rowena. You’ve managed to incorporate some sort of reason for her oddity of a name >.> and it’s a good detail. I bet a few mothers out there wish they’d had some rowan’s bark during their pregnancies.
Still on Rowena, I think this line - she might have dug up the pelt, brushed the Scottish mud from it, and returned it to its pitiful owner. - betrays what sort of person she is. Also, the way in which she describes the selkie isn’t mean. Usually with the description of ‘pitiful’ you’d think that someone it talking down to them, but Rowena literally pities her which makes me think she’s a good soul. I was going to say “good egg” but that would have been ridiculous.
“You can see it at the back of your eyes; defiance.” She reminds me of Tiffany Aching here. Yay for comparisons of the mind. I can’t wait to see whether or not she stays like this in my mind. Not that the voiceless briskness of the voice reminds me of Weatherwax or anything >.> And now, having read the description of the person @.@ WOWEE! I like the pretty faerie! Or is it fairy? I think it’s faerie, but whatever :). But I love the imprint she leaves on Rowena. The encounter could sit by itself roughly, but I’m SO looking forward to reading more.
Wow. This was brilliant. The intricate description of the Sidhe's appearance was lovely. It scares me a bit that she has three irises - I can't quite imagine the sight.
You've really revealed an intriguing plot. I could see Rowena as having a non-human parent. It could account for her intteligence - and I assume that she may someday be a prophetess like this Sidhe who has come for her?
Anyway, the bit about marrying a Selkie made me cringe in admiration. (Awkward gesture, I know, but a good thing, I promise.) You've really blended into the era seamlessly.
One line in particularly shows this: I’m just a wean from the village and nothing to you.
Others would have used child or other more modern diction. But you blended in historically.
Perfect. Beautiful. I love it. Thank you very much for this. :)
That was just wonderful! I loved it. =)
I loved all the small ties and connections you made to mythology; I don't know as much as you, but I recognized them all none-the-less. I loved your characterization of the founders, and of Rowena and Salazar in particular. I loved the wonderfully original plotline. I loved the description of the fairy world, and your lovely dialogue - old fashioned, but not stilted. I loved some of the foreshadowing I picked up on in this chapter, such as Rowena's dream and a possible relationship between her and Salazar. I loved it all.=)
I enjoyed reading this tremendously. You are so talented! Does this connect to your other founders fics? It was such a beautiful and magical story to read - fantastic job!!
That was wonderful! I love how you introduced Helga, Salazar, and Godric. In one quick scene you established their solid characters. I was obviously wrong about Cuchulain being Godric. I recognize that bit of mythology though, lovely job weaving it into the story! So if Midhir is Rowena's father, is Etain her mother? I had to look him up, I haven't read his story before. For some reason Godric reminded me of James Potter, do you think there is a connection? I can't wait to see how this plays out for Rowena, with all these lovely men volunteering to escort her around. Plus she has a castle to build and a school to run of course. Just fascinating! Great job! ~Gina :)
Jan, this is just amazing, I love it! I had no idea Midhir would turn out to be Rowena's father. Now I wonder who the first visitor was, and if she has any significance. I also wonder about this third man who finally brought Rowena to the Sidhe. . . . Godric, perhaps? I assume part of her grand destiny is the founding of Hogwarts, and I can't wait to see how she meets the others.
I really like how well-rounded this story is. The description is lovely, the dialogue well done. Rowena is a plucky character but obviously has her faults. There are good characters like Medhir and darker characters like the mean Fuamhnach. And the research is still amazing.
Wonderful job, good luck as you continue! *clicks to favorites for the update*
This is just awesome! I've always like mythology and the way you have woven it into the Potterverse is brilliant! Even though he only made the briefest appearance here, I really liked Midhir. Rowena was well written as an adult. I can't wait to see how this all relates to Hogwarts! Wonderful job! ~Gina :)
Jan! That was amazing! I loved it - it was absolutely gorgeous. What a wonderful beginning. I loved how you immediately set such a mysterious,magical tone - your imagery is beautiful! I also love Rowena's character, she was wonderfully done. The Sidhe and her visit was fascinating - I don't know much about British mythology, but you must have done some good research for this piece. It really lends the story depth. Fantastic job! *skips off to read the next part*