This is such a good start
The writing is actually amazing
It's hard to find a captivating story that is also well written but i think this ticks both boxes
looking forward to the next chapter
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Author's Response: This is ironic. I just read your story earlier (Broken Hearts...I reviewed it and as I said before its really good, but sad...) Anyway, thanks for the review, and thanks for saying my writing is amazing *bows to your excellent complimenting/writing skills*. I submitted the next chapter a couple of days ago, so hopefully it will be up soon. Once again, thank you for the wonderful review!
Great job! My only complaint is that Lily seems very Hermione-ish. It's a common cliche in J/L fics to characterize Lily exactly the same as Hermione (Hogwarts, A History). In truth Lily has many different qualities than Hermione. I liked the bit about Petunias' "Why-I-Hate-Magic List." I saw in an author response that you had gotten a rejection letter. This happened to me when I submitted my first story and again when I submitted another one of my chapters. Don't worry about it, just use the mods' comments to improve your story. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks. I know in a lot of James/ Lily fics Lily seems to act a lot like Hermione, it bugs me...However, in later chapters, Lily is going to be very unlike Hermione. Hermione would never...uh-oh, I better not say that. Anyway, thank you for the suggestion about not taking it personally (the rejection). I tend to be a little hot-headed (I blame my red hair, lol.) Thanks again for the review... By the way, I love your story.
Author's Response: Oh sorry, I just had to add this - Nice username. ;-)
Great Story =)
Author's Response: Thank you. It is the first story I have posted here, and this review has definitely brightened my day and encouraged me to write more! :)
Not bad, I hope to read more in the future!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I've already got a couple of chapters written, but I am rather confused because I got a rejection letter and now this is posted. Not that you needed (or probably wanted to know that, but). Anyway, thank you so much for the review!