*is grinning* That was awesome! I love Bellatrix and this made me love her more- what's up with liking characters when we should hate them?
When you say "I've never written this way before" are you meaning the sex? Because it was good. No need to worry about that. =]
Two random comments- first of all, the name Mamie made me smile- that's what I used to call myself before I could pronounce "Megan". And second, I love Cher! We sort of used to be pen pals... long story. But yeah. Keep this one up, it's really good. ~megan~
Julia, this is so good. Your writing style is very mature, in my opinion this chapter reads as though it were a novel, not a fanfic. I don't know how you do it your choice of words, your descriptions, the way Bellatrix is detached yet passionate, analytical yet impulsive, or maybe the offhand yet real way you use "strong language". It's very impressive. I'm jealous.
Your characters aren't one-dimensional in the slightest! They have multiple motivations, they're entrancing while at the same time being repulsive (sexy Rodolphus? omg.), they're absolutely fascinating. I want to read more about every person you introduced; I want to see the way they interact, because it seems so real and unexpected, almost shocking. Again, very mature it actually reminds me of Ken Follet's writing style, a little bit.
What are you reading? he purred, quite clearly thinking that the mere sound of his voice was enough to send Bellatrix into an auditory-induced orgasm.
*dies* I love it. Bwahaha. What a perfect way to describe it not only the way some guys act, but the way some fanfic writers write them. Hee.
I'm not sure what my favourite part of this chapter is. I love Bellatrix and Rodolphus's little exchange, and Bellatrix and Tom are just hot, but Tom and Dumbledore wow. It's fascinating to read this from Tom's POV, and to see how much pain Dumbledore must be in to know that the man in front of him is pure evil, but there's nothing he can do about it, and at the same time he truly cares about Tom. It's brilliant.
The next time he met that useless old man, he swore to himself, he would kill him.
But he doesn't, does he? LOL. I bet that drives him insane. Um. No pun intended. *cough*
I am He, he murmured, his voice slightly amazed, yet at the same time completely assured [ ]
That line sounds like blasphemy, with the way it echoes God's declaration of being "I AM" in the Bible. Did you do that on purpose? It's intense.
And wow, Narcissa sucks her thumb. What a sweetie. And she's so innocent here well, she is twelve. But that's exactly how twelve-year-olds are. They have their point of view, and that is the way the world is. I like how Narcissa has a purpose in the story someone to be on Bellatrix's side and at the same time have ideals that are completely different, AND still acting like a twelve-year-old.
Please write the next chapter soon? I really want to know what happens! =)
Author's Response: Abigail! I'm so sorry I've left responding to this absolutely wonderful review 'til now. I've read it several times in the four months that it's been here, but I just haven't responded. *headdesk* So, again... I'm sorry. Anyway, now that my apology is out of the way, i can proceed to the response (and the thanks)!rn
Thank you for the blush-inducing compliments. I aspire to publish someday, so your positive responses to my endeavours encourage me to no end. I love that you... well, I guess like is not the best word, but, really, I love that you like Bellatrix.rn
And, of course, I'm thrilled that "sexy Rodolphus" comes across as more than just a hot, cruel guy who thinks he's the stuff. I like that you want to read more about him. (And, of course, LOL, about the Gary-Stu writers, =).)rn
You know, I'm quite pleased that you enjoyed reading Dumbledore/Tom. I wrote that part very quickly and I wasn't sure how it would turn out. I'm pleased to see that it spoke to you.rn
Tom, as you've noticed, fancies himself God. I wanted that sentence to echo for the reader--the interpretation of it was totally up to you, so seeing what you did in it (Biblical allusions) is awesome. rn
Narcissa. *grins* I love her as a child because she is her own little entity. The Black sisters are all so different; they are, by far, my favourite characters in Harry Potter. Narcissa is, to me, the innocent, the angel of the family. She cares about her family and I think that she really does feel deep emotion and more than a little protectiveness toward her sister. She wants Bellatrix to make the right choices.rn
I'm trying to write the next chapter but it's hard with high school ending. It will be out this summer, though. (I hope...)rn
*hugs* Thanks again, Abigail!*rn
Keep writing! Keep writing! I'm dying to know what happens next!
this is the most interesting fanfic ive read in ages
Author's Response: Wow, thank you, Bianca! I'm so glad you like it and I'm definitely planning to keep writing. I already have the base plot for the next chapter. Once again, thanks. =)
Wow this is amazing! Well written and intriguing plot line. Reminds me a lot of The Time Traveller's Wife by Audrey Niffennegger, if you've ever read that, kind of the same plot of love through the ages, love withstanding time. Nice!
Author's Response: Thank you! =)
I never have read The Time Traveler's Wife, but I will definitely check that out. Sounds fascinating. And, if you like time-travel books, the Outlander series by Diana Gabaldon is ace. =)
Once again, thank you so much for the review. 'Twas very encouraging, dear.
Beautiful chapter!!! I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: *grins* Thank you; you're the first to review this new chapter and I was very anxious about it ... so you've somewhat assuaged my worries. *hugs*
I'm thrilled that you liked this and I certainly intend to update soon.
I don't think I've mentioned this yet, but you're absolutely BRILLIANT at descriptions of all kinds. You go into the meticulous details of things, and that really helps me get a clear mental picture.
Tom saving Bella was an interesting twist - and a great way to remind us of the age difference.
I'm looking forward to seeing how this plays out and what the plot's going to do next...
Author's Response: *grins* Thanks again, Katie; sometimes I feel like I go a bit overboard on the descriptions, but what can I say? I love "showing" things. =)
*sighs* As for Tom saving Bella, I've no idea why he did that. I think I did at the time, but ... oh, wait; I think I've got it again. =D
And I'm looking forward to the same thing. *grins*
Thank you once again!
Nicely done. I've never read a Tom/Bella fic before, so this should be interesting...
I liked how you started off with the dream, as opposed to reality - and was Tom writing in his infamous diary, or was that just a piece of parchment?
Also, I like how you portrayed the romance thus far: Lust, not love. I don't think that Tom Riddle could ever love, but I'm sure that as a teenager with hormones he could most definitely lust.
- Katie *clicks the 'Next' button*
Author's Response: Hi Katie,
Thank you so much for the review! =) I'm really glad you liked how the story started and I hope to continue it soon. I just realized (after rereading it myself) that I do want to continue it.
And, yes, that was the "infamous diary." =)
Oh, and definitely 'lust,' not 'love'. Tom, bless his cold heart, would never be able to love, as JKR has reiterated time and time again. And so. =)
Thanks once again!
i like it alot very intriguing keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Dory. =) I appreciate your review very, very much.
You are an amazing writer. I hope you update this story soon !!!
Author's Response: *blushes* Thank you. I've finally broken through my writer's block, so I hope that I can update this soon, too.
Thanks once again.
I always wanted to know what my father was like in Hogwarts!
~Riley Kay Riddle~
Author's Response: Well, Miss Riddle, thank you so much for the review.
Your father was ... well, he was certainly original. I'm sorry you had to lose him, but keep reading this chronicle of his life and you're sure to find out things you never knew. Maybe you'll even find out who your mother was...? =)
Once again, thanks for the review, Miss Riddle. I hope your disposition is better than your father's was, but if you inherited the looks (which I'm sure you did) then I envy you. =)
I've read this story through again, and I have to say, (again), THAT I LOVE IT SO DARN MUCH!! Stories that are about Bellatrix and dark/angsty things are SO very interesting. And speaking of Bella, I absolutely LOVE your "The Many Faces of Bellatrix Black" banner! Keep up your awesomely-cool work. I really have come to enjoy it sooo much! ~!Sarah!~
Author's Response: *giggles* Thanks, again, Sarah. Your reviews are so fun! =) And thank you, too, for the compliment on my Bella banner. As you can see, I do love her. *giggles again*
I'm so glad you're enjoying the story and I'll try to update soon. Lately I've been busy with bannermaking and inter-house unity, but writing should have priority soon. *crosses fingers*
Cheers and thanks again, moncher!
I really liiked this Julia!
Once again, your great detail, detail, detail is what drew me in! The way that you write these fics actually wants to make me become a better writer!
I loved what you did with the characters! And I loved the ending! Once again, I have nothign to criticize! *giggles* (like I would in the first place) You are an amazing writer, and you most likely had an amazing beta.
Great ending as well!
Author's Response: *grins*
Ah, yes, the detail. Sometimes I feel that it's over-the-top, but I can't stop. Argh! *giggles* I'm glad that it inspires you, though. That makes me very glad. (Especially since I'm your beta for a current story. *waggles finger*)
I'm glad you liked the characters, too. They're a pair of devils, aren't they? *grins* Well, maybe not yet... Ah, the ending, yes... It puzzled me and my beta. You should have seen us: "I dreamed I saw an angel?" *makes face* "No..." "Okay." "I dreamed I saw a girl?" *gag* "Ew, no..."
*grins* That was confusing, and it was confusing, everything was confusing, but I'm glad you liked how it turned out.
Thanks for the compliments, dear. That makes me very happy, and compliments for beta-ing go my lovely Evie, apollo13, and Theresa, notsosaintly, of TPP.
Thanks again, dear!
Your vocabulary is amazing, it really paints a picture. I'll be looking forward to more!
Author's Response: *smiles* Thanks, Megan, you truly are too nice. =)
This was rather an intermediary chapter, but I had to somehow introduce the two main characters. Bella's hero-worship of Tom is interesting, isn't it? *giggles*
There shall be more, patience, patience... (And hopefully I get inspiration, eh?)
Thanks so very much, again!
Wow, Julia. It's beautiful and... haunting is the word I'm looking for, I believe. I have never thought of Tom as a real person before, and only one chapter in your story has changed my views. Wonderful job once again!
Author's Response: Thanks so very much, Megan, you've no idea how much I treasure your reviews. They're a giant ego boost. *giggles* =) Just kidding...
That is a lovely word to describe this first chapter. 'Haunting'. I'm also very glad that you think of poor Tom as a person. He's always intrigued me, but as Voldemort ... Poor guy. Life dealt him a nasty hand of cards and he cheated. *sighs*
Anyway, thanks very much again for the lovely review.
Julia, dear, you've done it again. The imagery is beautiful, the characterization is perfect... I had to stay up late to read this, because I just couldn't wait until tomorrow. I do hope more chapters are up soon. Another truly wonderful story by the amazing Celestial Melody! ; D
Author's Response: *squees* *hugs*
Thanks, Christine; I swear, I absolutely adore your reviews. =) Thank you so much for yousa compliments on the imagery and characterization. I tried, really, really hard ... Well, no I didn't, because first chapters are easy, it's the middle chapters that eat my lunch, and my dinner, and my breakfast, brunch, linner *giggles* and everything in between.
Anyway, I'm so glad you did review, it makes me happy and now I can cleean some more and try to get some sleep. Oh! And PM you back; I've been working madly on a banner and 'tis posted in moi thread. I always get creative inspiration in the middle of the night; does that happen to you? It's true, though, studies have proven that people think better at night. *sigh*
Anyway, this is borderline spam on my own story *grins* but I'll run along now. Thanks again, dearie!
P.S. More chapters? What are those? Just kidding... There shall be more, soon, I hope... *scared face* What can I say? Those middle chapters are killers.
Wow! Very awesome story. I like your other storys, but I think that this one is the most interesting I have read. Keep about the suspensefully-awesome work, I really enjoy this story!
Author's Response: Thanks very much, Sarah, I can't tell you how much I appreciate your review. The story is scarcely an hour old and already I have two reviews; hooray! =)
I'll do my best to keep this mysterious; I'm so glad you're enjoying this.
Wow! This is so good! I was hooked from the beginning, and you have such a way with words! Your word pictures are as beautiful as your banners ... and that's saying a lot!
And I've never felt sympathy for Tom while reading a fanfic. That really takes talent ... I'm so impressed! This is definitely going on my favourites list!
One thing confused me, though. At first, you describe the girl's eyes as amethyst, but later, you say that there is brown in them ... just thought I'd point that out -- it might not be a mistake, but it puzzled me.
I can't wait to see where this goes!
Author's Response: Thank you, Abigail, for the wonderful review! You're so sweet *hugs* for all that you said about my imagery ... and my banners! =) I'm thrilled that you're enjoying the story, and thank you for the comprehensive review...
Which leads to my mistake. *blushes* You see, originally, I'd had the girl with purple eyes, believe it or not. *grins* However, my beta nixed that right away, because purple eyes are extremely uncommon. She's right; I don't know where I got the idea. *smiles* Anyway, I changed her eye color everywhere else to a turbulent brown. Thank you for noticing that "amethyst" reference, though, I'm ever grateful ... and I changed it. =)
As for sympathizing with Tom, I do, too. =) Poor guy; he didn't have a good childhood, and, well... Who wouldn't turn into a horrid monster after that desertion? Well, maybe not. =) But the thought is nice.
Thank you, again, for your help and for your compliments. I'm so glad you're liking the story so far.