That....Confused me greatly. It was absolutely fantastic, but it confused me so much. Haha.
Love it! I thought for a second it was going to be Sirius.
Author's Response: Hee, that was the point!
very sweet, i wish i could write something like that :]
Author's Response: Thank you! And I'm sure you could ;).
thanks for expaining that code in the paper. i didn't get it either, but this way it seems like it could be a coincidence.....gahh whatever. good story anyway!
Author's Response: >> I'm pretty awful with subtleties, actually. So, and explanation was called for! It was an inside joke for the person I wrote for :).
Well, it's sweet, but rather unusual....good job, i liked reading this.
Author's Response: Unusual? That's always good!
Oh my . . . I thought it was James, but is she just reallly drunk, is that why she's kissing him, it was a moment of temporary insanity? Cuz one min she's like 'I hate you!' and the next they're kissing! It sounds really good though, keep writing and please UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: LOL. I love your scattered thoughts! They remind me of my own... & I'm pretty sure it'll justbe its own piece for now ;).
Aww, this was an amazing story. I loved how James was really Lily's secret admirer, and how he pretended he wasn't...it was really sweet, I loved the whole thing!
Author's Response: I only wish it would happen in real life :).
awwwwwww...i love fics where james is lily's secret admirer!
Author's Response: Me too!
awww, cute story. simple but cute... and james was quite a good secret admirer. really liked the story, it was very well written...so yeah. you should definitley write more stories!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I will, actually :D.
That's really realy good!
Author's Response: thanks!
That's so sweet! I really like it!
Author's Response: Thank you!
That was so lovely! Awww Steph this really was wonderful. I enjoyed it immensely.
I really like the whole 'secret admirer' idea as a way to get Lily to understand how James feels. It's smart, and something that James would probably have done.
"Hate is just love that lost its way"
Wow. That is so true, even in reality's circumstances. Where on earth did you come up with that?! I might just need to take that if you don't mind. Very truthful and creative. :)
The only thing I found could have been played slightly different was toward the ending where Lily's emotions kind of jump from one to the other. One moment she's angry, the next she's crying, then she's kissing him. It's just a little choppy, but other than that, I didn't find anything at all.
You did such a fabulous job, Steph. Great work!
Author's Response: fer surre baby!
I think I was rushing a little, and in a bit o unsure territory when I wrote the ending, because it's a very general pairing and I was trying to move Lily to this state where she wasn't cliche, and I was just a little nervous, but apart from that I think it turned out okay! Thanks dearie!
AH! THAT"S SO SWEET
Author's Response: Aww, thank you!
*pssts at Steph*
I'm finally on MNFF!
And I had to say that I love love love James/Lily fics. There aren't enough of them out there, honestly!
I'm amazed at your ability to characterize so well. You hit Lily and James' personality dead-on. I don't even think JK could have done it any better (okay, well, maybe a little better - since she did make the characters up. :P)
What else can I say? Lovely fics as always. Will continue to read everything else you've got up! (:
Author's Response: MAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! *tackles* You the best friend a girl could ask for, you know? Reviewing and joining up.. just 'cause I told you *loves*
The comment about characterisaition made my day, you know? It really, really did. Heart to you!
That was cute...I love it!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: thank you!
i love it
Author's Response: thank you!
*is finally reviewing a Steph!fic*
After reading that, all I have to say is…aw! I love reading fics about how Lily and James come together, so I adored reading this and seeing your take on how it would happen. Your characterization was just guh. Beyond guh. You managed to capture proud!Lily and arrogant!James, and still make them come together in a believable way. So many J/L fics I’ve read have James and Lily just push aside their differences within a fraction of a second, so I love how Lily doesn’t let go of her grudges that quickly. Also, once Lily does know that the secret admirer is James, she doesn’t just go along with it. Even towards the end, Lily’s still stubborn as ever.
Your twist on this pairing is so cute. You lead us to believe that the secret-admirer isn’t James so well with all these “If James ever finds this guy…” lines and such. I must admit, when I read the “last person you’d expect” line, I thought it would be Snape or something. It really WAS the last person I expected, so I can picture how shocked Lily must have been! I love the way you wrote girlyflirty!Lily, but kept her characterization so flawless.
A few grammar nitpicks…
‘You’re taking the word of a guy who’s best friends with Potter? You’re seriously going to meet a boy you don’t even know is real’. That sentence needs punctuation. Also…
Who was he? ‘Of course I know that. But why are you drinking it. You’re a wizard.’ I do believe that “But why are you drinking it” needs a question mark.
Lily felt like hitting herself over the head. What had made her come out on this whim, to meet this stranger? Oh, right, James. I loved this line! It’s so ironic that the only reason that she’d break rules and go out that late was so she’d get away from James, and yet, she finds herself in this situation. *giggles* I like how you wrote that irony throughout this entire fic—Lily finding herself more interested in this secret admirer than she’d normally be, just to get back at James.
The last line was so cute! You can really tell that Lily’s trying to remain proud, but is somewhat flattered by what James has been trying to do. That’s just another example of your pwning characterization. This isn’t the fluffiest fic I’ve read, but the last line is just so romantic! It opens up so many new options for James and Lily, and there are so many possibilities about their relationship after this. [Pst. Write a sequel.] *giggles*
/long awaited review
Author's Response: Loves nitpicks, by the way. :D And thank you so much rachel dear, I love your reviews. They're so YOU. And heee, you caught the irony! I wanted it to be a surprise, so you caught that! Cheeky monkey!
/long awaited response.
It was the perfect balance of love and hate! I think this is the best James Potter I have ever read, exactly how I've always imagined him. Unbearably cocky and arrogant to the point you hate him, but also loving and stupid and hopeless! Then there was Lily! She was smart and it wasn't. It was different than all the other Lily's I've read about. She hated him, it was pure hate but she also had hope for this other boy for love. You had her blind-sighted, but it worked so well!
When James did that in the Great Hall, when he read teh letter I wanted to attack him. We knew it was him but I literally smacked my hand against my forehead. I think it may have been my favourite part but he was so BLAH. I loved that line though *scrolls up to find it*
'I think you blew it, Prongs,’ said Remus over the top of his book.
‘I’ll fix it,’ he said, confidently.
Those two lines were my favourite part. And when Lily slapped James out in the snow and he chased after her. It was brilliant!
I only wished that you had broken it up into two chapters so it could have been more evenly spaced.
Author's Response: Oh man, the best review! We knew it was him but I literally smacked my hand against my forehead. That. Was. Priceless! I think you just noticed all my favourite parts! Hee!
Hey Steph, i though it was about time i started catching up on all the stories you have been spitting out recently =P
this is really cute, and i'm lovin the quote "Hate is love that lost its way".
Is Gold :D
see you in the next story i havent read yet...
Author's Response: "Hate is love that lost its way" was actually part of my prompt :) Yay Kali's back! I missed you hun! *squish*
My first step along the road to fulfilling that unbreakable vow... aren't you proud of me, Steph? I'm proud of YOU! you seriously rock the world, and I love this story, even though James/Lily isn't my thing. I'm glad to call you my beta! 10/10
Author's Response: Awww! Juli! Thank you so much! *squishes you*