This is quite a serious review, not at all like my normally bubbly self because this is not the normally bubbly story I read.
At first I was apprehensive about reading this fan fiction because I am a more of a fluff story reader but if I want writing to be my career I need to experience all kinds of stories not just the ones that have happy endings because not all stories have one. This story pushed emotions and the extreme topic of rape to an earth shattering high. I am sad to report that many times people don't fully realize bad things happen in the world until it happens to them: Rape, Murder, Abduction, Flooding, Tornadoes, Hurricanes, Family Disputes and so on. But this story really puts the reader into perspective, really makes someone who reads it understand and sympathize. The news carries such sad stories these days about dreadful crimes and maybe if people could look into each other’s hearts more there would be less of that. This story, the way you wrote it, is like ice water thrown over someone when they're sleeping. It's easy to feel for Hermione and the utter despair she was in but it also gives insight into the violator, Draco. I, as a reader, was dead set on despising Draco in this story at the beginning but then I felt less and less hatred, though I still felt a whole bunch of it, and instead began to pity him. Villains don't just shoot out of their mothers as monsters; they were molded that way by events in their life, as are victims. Your story shows both sides of the track and in such a way that, despite rape being disgusting in itself, that I, the reader, felt more of a heart wrenching sadness for those involved. You gave humanity and life to characters that don't truly exist and made me feel sad for what happened in the story even though I knew it hadn't really happened. Hermione, though she despised Draco with her very being, did the only thing she could to attack Draco back and that was to make him more addicted to her. She didn’t love him, she never did nor could, but convincing Draco she needed him with her was absolute torture to him. He needed her and this developed into a rage when he realized it could never be so this love turned into pain. Draco hurting her wanted her to hurt him tenfold, and so the never ending cycle of hatred begins until those involved are utterly consumed by it as if burned alive. Sadly, this cycle continues even today in the form of people beating up other people, of murders, of racism, or rape, of abduction, of war, and prejudice. This story, though the main topic is rape, has emotions and feelings that are, in a sense, the basics of all crime. It takes a wonderful, strong writer to do something of this extreme level and still touch my heart through the horrid events of the rape. Sure, parts of it were graphic and I felt terrible I was even reading something so intense yet that’s how things are in the real world too. People do vile, horrid, and terrible things to each other than many of us can’t even imagine so why should a story that’s so serious tone that down so it isn’t real anymore? Rape is real, therefore, disgusting and hard to comprehend. That is exactly what I got from reading this story.
I hope that future readers will not follow their first instincts as I almost did and not read the story out of fear or disgust of the idea of a story about a girl being raped night after night. Because we can't just shut our eyes to what we find disturbing, because we can't turn away from terrible crimes if they make us sick to our stomach, because we can't, nor shouldn't, ignore those who are suffering if it doesn’t affect us directly. Thank you, Queen of Serpents, for opening peoples' eyes and not closing your own. Well done.
I have to say, that was unlike anything i have ever read. That being said- i loved it. Amazing talent you have. Truley amazing. The insight you give into the minds of both of them is incredibly accurate - espesially in the situation they are in. The story is extremeley complicated, and it seems like no one could pull that off, but you did extremely well. I just cant get over the insight you give to the emotional/mental aspect of the characters. You have an amazing talent, and if this story didnt broden anyones horizons then i don't know what will. It was a pleasure to read, no matter what anyone says, because it isn't sick or disgusting- its the truth. xoxox wheezysgirl77
I FEEL SO BAD FOR HERMIONE! Why in the muggle world did he have to rape her?
good . even better , a new pov .
even more epic than the first . wow .
very epic . very well depicted . a lotta talent where that came from .
I love the end!!
you wrapped it up nicely. It just makes me more curious about how you're going to continue the story. I'm definitely still going to read on
I'm reading on!
har har it's too good to stop now
"Oh yes, like Curly Pimple! No wait that doesn't sound right. Oh wait it's Shirely. Shirely Temple. "
lol i laughed out loud.
Anywho, what a powerful chapter. Yay draco has a conscience. Your words conveyed his feelings well and i could feel his guilt and pain
wow, very powerful.
i like how you give Draco some human emotions as well instead of making him a cardboard cutout villian
you are a beautiful writer. Even though this is a rape story, you make it very emotional and not trashy. kudos. i'm looking forward to reading more
This is a really good story and it's very well weitten. I love it besides the fact that someone got raped. You did Hermione perfactly in the story. She's all tough and everything at the end and I like it. I also like Draco in it, but only when he apologized. I also like how he was upset that he did that. If he wasn't, then I probably would have stoped reading it. I really like how she was in control at the end too.You did a very good job and I really like this story!
I have to say that i think this ending would have been better than having it end at chap 9, but I now have to read the next chaptr so i will just say that this fanfic is great, and leave it at that. The emotions are excellent! You really feel for both Hermione and Draco in this, it's great.
omg! i totally loved this story....in a weird way....lol! you need to do another chapter or something continuing!
that was such a good story. are you gonna do follow up just so we know what happened to them. it's only fair.
interesting. but good