The story is very very different from what I'm used to reading. It's sadistic and dark, but in a way I like it. Reminds me of 50 shades. The writing is fairly well, and you've got a nice plot. But the only comment of negativity I have is that none of the characters would act like this. It is simply not in their personality. You should definitely add that warning in the description so we don't expect something else.
I imagine the soundtrack for the part where Draco's holding Hermione before he has to leave to be the song "Daylight" by Maroon 5. This is so sad, but I'm definitely going to keep reading!
Oh. My. Gosh. I'm speechless. I don't really know what to say- but it's a really good story.
Wow that is so scary- but why can't she tell anyone? Isnt this as bad as it can get?
this is without a doubt my favorite draco/herminone fan fic
Where do I start? I've read the first chapter now and I must say, it makes me uncomfortable.
Apart from the fact that while Draco is a jerk, he probably doesn't have the balls to do something this vile, Hermione would never let him anyway. She would fight him, I am sure.
Here, however, she just seems to shrug this rape that you are - hopefully! - trying to portrait as horrible off, and then there's this scene:
"I didn't want to do this now. At least in my room I would be able to have the comfort of my bed to cry in to sleep but now I'd have to make the long journey to the Head rooms in all my pain."
Seriously, *that*'s her major complaint here?
As I said, I've only read the first chapter, but I really hope you're not going to turn this into a Hermione/Draco romance. Rape never starts a romance.
wow. Intense and enjoyable.
This isn't a love story, it's so much more than that.
Human emotions, lust, hate, and yes, hormones. So complex, yet you really descrbed throughly what can happen. Yes, you must've really put yourself to the test for this. I love it, you are an incredible writter and don't let anyone tell you that this story is sick or that you're a pervert :)
This is so creepy. Yeah, no offense, but are you like okay with rape?
This could have been an okay story, but your conventions, grammar, and choice of verb tenses are awful. It made it really hard to focus on the plot. Btw, you messed up your Roman numerals. Oh, and I don't think any of these characters actually sounded like themselves. Not one of them would have done the things they did.
Hermione is being stupid. Enough said.
I'm reading on!
You've got a challenge, missy. I will be reading on! Believe that! I don't have a weak stomach. If I can read Twilight, I can read this.
Here I am again and I hope something horrible happens to him. I don't feel sorry for this Draco Malfoy at all and I hope he rots.
What?!!!!! Ugh, I'm really disgusted with this! UGh!
Finally, some sense! Ugh, he makes me wnat to kill him! Blegh, Draco Malfoy makes me wanna retch.
I love you Hermione! Ron and Harry are such jerks. So much for having concerned friends, but i don't think they would have done that to her, my only comlaint.
Finally you're feeling guilty you bastard!! Ugh, I would hex him into oblivion if I could get my way!
Gosh, this is really...intense. What made you want to do this story so violent? I'm new on this site but send me a message or something if you ever read this.
I'm only going to read this to figure out what the hell is going on. I'm not comfortable with rape scenesat all but this is just strange as you know what. I'll keep reading, there were a few grammar problems and maybe a tad too graphic for my taste but this is your story, not mine. I've read worse.