Where do I start? I've read the first chapter now and I must say, it makes me uncomfortable.
Apart from the fact that while Draco is a jerk, he probably doesn't have the balls to do something this vile, Hermione would never let him anyway. She would fight him, I am sure.
Here, however, she just seems to shrug this rape that you are - hopefully! - trying to portrait as horrible off, and then there's this scene:
"I didn't want to do this now. At least in my room I would be able to have the comfort of my bed to cry in to sleep but now I'd have to make the long journey to the Head rooms in all my pain."
Seriously, *that*'s her major complaint here?
As I said, I've only read the first chapter, but I really hope you're not going to turn this into a Hermione/Draco romance. Rape never starts a romance.
Wonderfull!
This isn't a love story, it's so much more than that.
Human emotions, lust, hate, and yes, hormones. So complex, yet you really descrbed throughly what can happen. Yes, you must've really put yourself to the test for this. I love it, you are an incredible writter and don't let anyone tell you that this story is sick or that you're a pervert :)
This is so creepy. Yeah, no offense, but are you like okay with rape?
This could have been an okay story, but your conventions, grammar, and choice of verb tenses are awful. It made it really hard to focus on the plot. Btw, you messed up your Roman numerals. Oh, and I don't think any of these characters actually sounded like themselves. Not one of them would have done the things they did.
Hermione is being stupid. Enough said.
You've got a challenge, missy. I will be reading on! Believe that! I don't have a weak stomach. If I can read Twilight, I can read this.
Here I am again and I hope something horrible happens to him. I don't feel sorry for this Draco Malfoy at all and I hope he rots.
What?!!!!! Ugh, I'm really disgusted with this! UGh!
Finally, some sense! Ugh, he makes me wnat to kill him! Blegh, Draco Malfoy makes me wanna retch.
I love you Hermione! Ron and Harry are such jerks. So much for having concerned friends, but i don't think they would have done that to her, my only comlaint.
Finally you're feeling guilty you bastard!! Ugh, I would hex him into oblivion if I could get my way!
Gosh, this is really...intense. What made you want to do this story so violent? I'm new on this site but send me a message or something if you ever read this.
I'm only going to read this to figure out what the hell is going on. I'm not comfortable with rape scenesat all but this is just strange as you know what. I'll keep reading, there were a few grammar problems and maybe a tad too graphic for my taste but this is your story, not mine. I've read worse.
This story is so dark. But it's absolutely amazing at the same time. It really opens your eyes to the fact that just because it's Hogwarts doesn't mean that nothing bad ever goes on there. I totally see where you're coming from, and you have such talent. I've read a few of your stories and you're such a good writer. Thank you for sharing your work :)
Masterpiece. The story exposes human frailty..our loneliness that trumps fear, inherent desire for bloodlust, passion/emotions that varies in an instant.. So beautifully recalled. From chapter 10 onwards though, I felt that the major themes were a bit confusing, a bit lost. Ending was great, I thought it would be more explicit -- oh well! Leaves room for imagination anyway! And really liked the suggestion of blind attraction at the end. Thoroughly enjoyed the read! :)
Wonderful story! I had to read it all in one sitting cuz it was so addicting!
i even thought she was about to get away... nice story so far. wandless magic... is that possible in the wizard world??
I'm speechless. This was amazing. You're an incredible writer. Wow.
