Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/25/07 15:18
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Imbedded - to deposit in a partly inclosing mass; to cover

I think the word 'imbedded' works perfectly for the title because Harry is trying to cover up and forget his feelings so Ginny wouldn't be hurt. Therefore, *looks up* the word ‘imbedded’ fits perfectly – or if the title was meant differently, the word ‘embedded’ could be used. Either or, though I like imbedded better.

Onto the review...

Great job, Tagidi Riva, you did excellently (ha ha, that is so a word)! This is a wonderful poem - did I mention that before? (In another review - I might have.) Well, anyway, I think this poem describes Harry's feeling perfectly. It's subtle and delicately gives off an air of...truth. Yes. Truth.

My favorite part/line/thing (sorry):
For when he is sinking in despair,
she is the only rope.


That's as 'fluffy' as this poem gets. (Not that fluff is bad.) That's why I like that line - Harry deserves a little fluff in his life, right? Right. *glares around angrily*

I agree with everyone else - this poem is absolutely spectacular and I really liked it.

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates


Author's Response: I hole heartedly agree , the man deserves a big fat fluffy cloud. Thanks again for the review.

Reviewer: nuw255
Date: 01/23/07 11:32
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Oooh, this gave me a little chill. But in a good way. Argh; I really love poetry, but it's so hard to review! Rest assured, though, that I enjoyed this one very much. Ta-ta for now!

Author's Response: I guess I just got you back for the goosebumps you gave me not too long ago.:)

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/16/07 14:02
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Wow - so eloquent!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I was so glad to see so many poems posted earlier. I know I reviewed but yours was very well done.

Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 01/08/07 10:59
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Wow! This poem really is touching, and you’ve conveyed the elements of love extremely well. The mood I sort of picked up was of Harry needing Ginny as a ‘strength’ to help him through his darker times. Your use of language is amazing in showing this!

Lesser men would buckle
to the strains by which he's weighed.


This was one of my favourite lines. I loved the use of ‘buckle’, which gave me a vivid image of a person’s knees/legs buckling, and them simply collapsing from the strain and stress of it all. This really emphasises Harry’s strength and stamina. Wow.

Some nitpicks: I noticed that you left in an American spelling: even though in candor he is not. Candor should be “candour”. I also understand that you had a sort of pattern for capitalisations at the start of lines, but I felt that the first word in the last line should have been capitalised, to give the ending of the poem a bit more shape and finality.

Aside from that, I loved the last two lines! The repetition of “how will” and “the answer” were really effective, and I felt an almost eerie sort of echo, like two people saying these words.

This poem is lovely! I’ve had it favourited for a while, but hadn’t gotten round to reviewing! *hides* Good job, anyway. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. For the most part my poetry is free form and soley based on my current emotions. The concept of remaining in character and retaining anothers perspective is still new to me. Thank you for the reminder and I will remember next time.

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 01/07/07 12:31
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

I thought you might have meant embedded, it made more sense than the typo. (;

Author's Response: Again, thank you so much for catching that.

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 01/06/07 20:16
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

One question, what does "imbeeded" mean?

Author's Response: Thanks so much for catching that. We all passed it by and didn't even notice. It should say imbedded in the title like in the poem. Oops!! Imbedded though means to lodged in or to fix something deeply into your mind, like an imbedded memory.

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 01/06/07 20:04
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

I didn't want to review because I dislike even numbers, but I absolutely have to. This was beautiful. I had to read it out loud just so I could say all of the words. Everything just rolls off your tongue; it's not a random jumble of words to sound pretty. This actually means soemthing and that's what makes it remarkable, at least in my opinion.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the compliment. I love to write in sonnet form.

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 01/02/07 12:28
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Oh..i made it sound like i didnt post anything on this site....i meant that i never posted a poem with that rhym scheme here. You took your SATs? I'm taking them this year, and you're right about the vocab words. Never even heard of a word called prognosticate till i started SAT words *grin*...

Author's Response: Good luck on your SATs. Thank the Lord for my stellar verbal score because my math score was abysmal.

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 01/02/07 12:24
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Beautiful. You rhym very nicely, and keep it all making sense. And i like the rhythm u put. I like to use that kind of rhythm for some of my poems (but none of them are posted here).

I think this was my favorite part:

In his eyes lay his emotions
sadness, anger and forlorn.
Lesser men would buckle
to the strains by which he's weighed.
Remarkably triumphant
soul and character unwaved.
He's more a man than anyone
even though in candor he is not.
He is searching for answers,
for it is truth which he has sought


This was very enjoyable. Keep it up :-)
By the way, you have a good command of the english language. Like me :-P...;-)

Lady Magician

Author's Response: Thank you so much. The only thing I love more than writing is reading, so I have amassed a huge vocabulary.

Reviewer: abbs866
Date: 12/22/06 20:25
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Wow Rivah, it's wonderful. I love the vocabulary, and the emotion that you bring through this. Love it!

Author's Response: Thanks abbs, I am glad you liked it. Hopefully after the wedding I am going to submit a full length story.

Reviewer: Ms_Wolfsbane
Date: 12/22/06 8:59
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Fantastic poem! It's really beautiful. You have a good vocabulary!

$Wolfie$

Author's Response: Thank you very much. See what a 780 verbal can do. Study for your SAT's and you too will have a plethora of words to use.

Reviewer: Moony 62442
Date: 12/22/06 6:56
Chapter: A deep imbeeded yearning

Oh, goodness, that was amazing! I don't usually get into poetry (maybe because I am rubbish at it...), but that was brilliant! Loved it; so totally going on my favorites! That was amazing; I don't know why you are so worried about your upcoming story!
~Moony : )

Author's Response: Thank you sweetie, you are too kind. Characterization and plot I can do but grammar is my downfall. There lies my worry.

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