Reviews For The Sky Lament
Reviewer: the_yaks_second
Date: 06/28/07 14:44
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

This is also really good. I love the style-very simple which I think adds to the emotion by keeping the ideas les 'cluttered' and so harder-hitting. However, I enjoy the simplier style with the more complicated imagary.

Author's Response: I think it's maybe the most hard-hitting, Holly, because it wasn't meant to be hermione's, so i wasn't trying to see things through anyone else's eyes at the time. Thanks again! :-)

Author's Response: I think it's maybe the most hard-hitting, Holly, because it wasn't meant to be hermione's, so i wasn't trying to see things through anyone else's eyes at the time. Thanks again! :-)

Reviewer: BringPadfootBack
Date: 06/03/07 20:11
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Poor Hermione....

Author's Response: yes i know, poor hermione.l..good thing its not gonna really happen!

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 04/26/07 15:38
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

How touching. This poem really was not like your other ones that I've read. This one is just so sad and beautiful.
And the song faded into the stars. What a great ending to such a strong piece!

Author's Response: this poem probably appeals to you the most because i actually wasnt thinking of hp when i wrote it; i wrote it because of my own emotions at the time. i have a really bad bit of nostalgia because i moved a few months ago from the place i grew up *hint: i might not live where my bio says, but im from there* ...so it was really just raw emotion from me,and wasnt meant to be an hp poem, but as i saw i hadnt posted a poem in a long time and i wanted to give my readers a nice present for the holidays (and because i formed a hermione story that fit), i posted it! :-) Thanks alot!!

Reviewer: hogwartsrules
Date: 04/21/07 6:50
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Another brilliant poem. All the stanzas seem to fit together perfectly, as though they were created for that very purpose... which they were.

I remembered as I walked away,

That I was not yet going back home,

But I thought, as the sky turned navy blue,

No matter how long it takes, the day will come.



And the song faded into the stars.

Erm... I thought that stanza had the most meaning out of any of them,,, it sort of showed that almost all hope is lost, but the sun will always rise again. I also thought it was the most well-written...

It was hard to decide.

10/10

Author's Response: thanks so much! i wanted to end the poem powerfully to show that there was always hope, even in the darkest of times! Thanks! :-D

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/29/07 17:48
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

So sweet and sad...and the part where she said her love for life was starting to decay? Chilling. Great word choice, there. Very appropriate, right, perfecto....

Here we go....my favorite part:
I remembered as I walked away,
That I was not yet going back home,
But I thought, as the sky turned navy blue,
No matter how long it takes, the day will come.

And the song faded into the stars.


*sigh* So...eloquent and moving. I love it. Wonderful, and very powerful. Great description on your part!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: thank you again! i just love adding those little parts, i was almost not going to add that 'and the song faded into the stars' part, but then i thought that it would give the poem a sense of completeness and make it very powerful, and that yes, she will return to where her heat is, someday. :-) THANKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: J_Bird
Date: 01/27/07 11:03
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Aw, so sad. :`-) It was beautiful.

Author's Response: thank you lots! im so happy that u read all the poems. :-)....LadyM

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 01/08/07 16:37
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

IT'S HERE, IT'S FINALLY HERE!!! Check it out, my story's here! Well...if you WANT to read it...you don't have to... :-)

TTFN,
JJ

Author's Response: OF COUERSE I WANT TO! IM ON MY WAY RIGHT NOW!...sorry for not answering before, my internet went screwy on me....i felt isolated fo a whole 3 days! *sniff*

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 01/07/07 13:40
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Um...yeah...I meant Tunami *who we gonna call? Typo-busters!*

Author's Response: lol, that program on cartoonnetwork...w/e...lol

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 01/07/07 13:38
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Yeah, ur rite, that didn't make sense...but I'll spare you this once. *puts down weapons* Ron must be getting annying, huh? He really is tricky, 'cause you can't make it too emotional, but he's not always joking like F&G. I think the idea for the conclusion is great! Good luck with that!

So...um...

Hey, randomly, do have any pets? I have a dog and a parakeet...my dog's name is Freddy...he's a fox terrier...reallllllly cute!!!!

Yeah, um...what's Tsuname? At first I thought you were talking about this one character i know of...but her name's Tsunade...

Well, good luck with your poems, I hope you feel better! (Do you still have that cold?)

--J.K.

Author's Response: SORRY for the delay! my internet went caput!...yea, on is so hard....YEA I DO HAVE A PET HER NAME IS SAMMY AND LIKE A MONTH AGO SHE GAVE BIRTH TO 2 GIRLS IT WAS SOO CUTE!...i said tunami, lol, and thanks fo the luck.

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 01/06/07 12:27
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Hello!!! I promised to review you after watching Naruto, right? Ok, so that was yesterday...Sorry!

Did you have a good New Year? I did. I made some resolutions...two of them conflict...one is finish watching every Naruto episode (there's like 200, I'm in the 90's) and the other is spend less time on the computer...I watch Naruto on the computer...LOL...have you made any resolutions?

I am so excited for my new fic to be validated!!! I really should continue writing it, so I can submit chapter 2 right away after the first chapter is validated...ah well...

I hope your Ron poem comes out soon...he seems like a hard person to write about...Anyway, get that done and out, and I hope you write tons more stuff too!!! Good luck in the New Year!

--JJ :-)

Author's Response: No prob! I been sulking about with this stupid cold and that was enought to keep me preoccuppied. (or however many 'p's u put in that word) My new year has, in all truths, been miserable, only because of this stupid cold. Seriously. It's eeeevvviiiilllll!!!!!!!!!!!!! Wow. Naruto on the computer. What happened to Tunami? they don't have it on cartoonnetwork anymore:-P? I made a few resolutions, mostly that i'll make sure to go back to the states for a nice, long visit this summe, do anything potter for another great year (lol), live to become 13 :-D...but seriously, it was to try and be nicer to my sis and do better in school. Well, if u need a break, take one! the author of my favorite story is mostly always busy, so get a chapter out of her once a month! But she's not one to abandon the stories. He's such a hard person. I'm trying to make it least poetic as possible (it's RON were talking about!), but still keeping it a poem, but the way i wanna do it, it ends up being him just naggingon and on and on (SHUTUP RON!)...so im trying to find a way around it. Actually, i'm looking more and more forward to finishing ron because before i even sat down to see what i was gonna write, an i dea popped into my head to make one poem to comclude all the poems, from a third-person POV, describing all of their stories and wrapping it all up. but i still have to finish with good old ron before i can get that up :-)......... S.K :-)

Author's Response: Er. Sorry if that seemed a bit fast-paced and not-making-sense. But i guess ull understand it after reading it a few times *dont hurt me*

Reviewer: HPwizzzard
Date: 01/03/07 16:37
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

And another good one! I like this one best, maybe because of the absense of a certain pesky canon ship. Um.

And the music began to play again,
Clear in my heart and mind,
A lament of the most desperate hope,
That spoke of dreams that wouldn’t be left behind.

That would be the best part ;D
However i can't see Hermione allowing herself to be kept away from the Wizarding world, even by her parents. She's an adult now. And wouldn't the whole order be on her side?



Author's Response: Hehe...thats why its called fanfiction :-D....i dunno, i guess i pictured her being obedient to them at all times? I like that stanza too, and i hope u like the big metaphor in the story. Thanks for reviewing all of them!!!!

Reviewer: Hermione499
Date: 01/01/07 21:00
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

im ur first comment of 2007 YAY!! umm i wanna see the ball drop...how was ur new year?

Author's Response: eh...it was okay. My uncle came ove yesterday (january 1st)...with my super-cute cousins :-)........theyre so little and cute and stuff...lol.....anyway i wanna see the ball drop too! i miss nyc....how was ur new year?

Reviewer: Hermione499
Date: 12/31/06 22:46
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

HAPPY NEW YEAR SARAH!!!!!

Author's Response: HAPPY NEW YEAR HEATHER! god, i miss watching the ball drop in times square back in nyc...we new yorkes dunno how lucky we ae till we leave...anyway hope u had a good new year!

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 12/30/06 20:06
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Alright, THIS is the last review. Just wanted to say I read your bio, thanx for mentioning me :-) Have a Happy New Year, Happy Eid, all that jazz. Or rock. Whichever you prefer.

Bye,
JJ ;-D

Author's Response: Tee hee...knew u couldn't resist. So, on with it!....Happy Hanukkah and New Year to you, hope ur done with ur shopping. We're finally done with this dreadful year, eh? (or, almost done)...and i didnt but a mugglenet tee shirt *sniffle*...i SO wanted one... Thanks for reading my bio!....So, 2007. Are you ready for this? (que music) Bye, for the last time in 2006, S.K.

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 12/26/06 15:42
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

OK, THIS is the last review!! NO MORE, so THERE! Hah! YOU have to review ME if you want to talk again. Hah!

Yeah, the second book in the Inheritance series is Eldest...the first being Eragon of course...I didn't see the movie, but I DID get to see Night at the Museum...wicked awesome...

I don't draw realy people either. I draw randomly made-up ones. They all look anime-ish...that's just my style...and I of course draw Kakashi (look him up on images to see what I had to draw) for my obsessed friend...not the one who calls me Janie though.

You are so right about the nickname...some of my friends call me JJ, or Jay...good people, they are.

I like your name...Sarah...you're lucky :-)

I'd knit you socks...but I'm still having trouble with scarfs. You can have a scarf though...I'll send it to you with a couple of my drawings...and an autograph for when I'm a famous author, of course :-D *lol*

So...Happy New Year and Happy Eid...I don't know when Eid is, but happy Eid anywayz...talk 2 you next year...
--JJ

Author's Response: OK FINE ILL REVIEW YOU!!!.......cool u saw a good movie...i think the last GOOD movie i saw was......the pink panther lol...........................thats how my dawings look as well! and i have those eyes on them too......lol jay jay..............................................send me a scarf by fed ex and a drawing and ill send u some of my drawings back!!!.... Happy new year to u too and eid is an islamic holiday lol (can u believe there are three in a year but we only get gifts for like one? except my bother and sister...they get gifts all the time..spoilt brats...).......TALK TO U LATER!...illl review u but i have to figue out what im gonna say! Sarah

Reviewer: Hermione499
Date: 12/26/06 14:41
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

oh yea sarah HAPPY EID!!! Its on the 31th right??

Author's Response: yea, one of those days....I HOPEI GET SUMTHING COOL FOR EID (al adha...can u believe that thee are like 3 but the major one was the one in october)...THANKS and HAPPY BDAY (again) AND I HOPE U HAD A GOOD CHRISTAMS! god i wish i could invite u to my house for new year...

Reviewer: Hermione499
Date: 12/26/06 14:28
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

ye im turning 16!! yay!! i want some cake

Author's Response: *hands cake and milk*....why dont u go back in 'adversity' to when rania threw u a 15th b-day party!...HAPPY BIRTHDAY AND COME ONLINE TODAY OR ILL HAVE TO SEND U AN E-CARD!!

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 12/26/06 10:46
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Hey! One more review before the new year!

You hate knitting? That's ok. I used to hate it too, and even now I prefer using a Knifty Knitter.

About the Yu-Gi-Oh cards...well, I used to collect Pokemon and Neopets cards, plus I played Yu-Gi-Oh with my obsessive brother AND got dragged along to the movie.

I didn't get to see Eragon, but I read the book.

Oh yeah, and I am terrible at drawing HP characters, but it is fun. I'm good at animals and people, though, just not wizards ;-)

Bye 'till next year!

--Jane (DON'T call me Janie. My friends does it and it drives me NUTS!!)

Author's Response: cool.....knit me socks. That's what i see when i look into the mirror of Erised. Thick, wooly, pink socks ;-)....ah eragon i think its with thats eries of dragon books like eldest and stuff right?...lol im horrible at drawing hp characters as well (did i say that last time?)...but i agree its fun to draw them.....*shrug*..i don;t draw people much....at the risk of offending them...tee hee....... noo i don't want this to be the last review for 2006! theres still 5 days left!....booooooo :-(...^_^...... Bye till next time, Sarah................................................................PS...i would never call you Janie....tell ur friends they have no taste in nicknames...what about Jay Jay? ;-)....

Reviewer: Hermione499
Date: 12/25/06 21:59
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU MUST HATE ME!!! I DIDN'T REVIEW FIRST!!! God, I was sooooooooo busy with like everything, blahhhh i missed you and everyone! Ok, neways, gosh i lovvvved this so mysterious and lovely HA! umm i love u lol, neways really gooood!!! MY BIRTHDAY IS IN 1 MORE DAY!!! YAY!! 10/10! Au revoir~

Author's Response: NOO i dont hate you! i understand you were busy, completely understandable...i was so busy for the past week as well! i even got my repot card on friday!..thank god i passed everything ;-).........I MISSED U TOO! i was waiting fo u to come online.....anyway im happy u liked it its for hermione ur fav character! I KNOW UR BIRTHDAY IS 2MORRO UR TURNING 16 RIGHT?? CONGRATS! XOXOX

Author's Response: NOO i dont hate you! i understand you were busy, completely understandable...i was so busy for the past week as well! i even got my repot card on friday!..thank god i passed everything ;-).........I MISSED U TOO! i was waiting fo u to come online.....anyway im happy u liked it its for hermione ur fav character! I KNOW UR BIRTHDAY IS 2MORRO UR TURNING 16 RIGHT?? CONGRATS! XOXOX

Author's Response: oops...i think i pressed the submit button one too many times...hehe...

Reviewer: Dragon_Warrior
Date: 12/25/06 15:36
Chapter: Hermione's Lament

Ha...review #3 for this one. Well, techinically it's #8, but...

Actually, Naruto has yellow spiky hair. The show is kinda violent, but it can get sooooooo emotional...I cried at the end of one episode...anywayz, if you're interested, go to youtube.com and type in "naruto episode 1."

Old song, huh? I'm not one for oldies, but what the heck. You never know, huh?

I CANNOT WAIT FOR HARRY POTTER AND THE DEATHLY HALLOWS...I CANNOT WAIT!!!

Oh well, i'll pass the time writing random HP fanfics and drawing Naruto characters for my friend. Hey, do you like drawing? Or have I asked that already...?

HARRY POTTER ROX!!

YOUR POEMS ROK!

(I LOVE WHOEVER INVENTED CAPS LOCK!!!)

Random review #3 is coming to an end...so sad...Buy-bye, keep writing, happy new year, i like knitting, etc.
--J.K.

PS: Have you read Eragon or seen the movie?

Author's Response: yea, i knew it was sumthing like that...I CANT WAIT EITHER! IM SOOOOO EXCITED BUT WELL PROBABLY STILL HAVE TO WAIT LIKE ANOTHER 6 MONTHS OR MORE!! :-(....no u havent asked..hmm...i do like drawing, but im not that great at it..i actually try to draw hp characters..tee hee....HP AND MY POEMS AND CAPS LOCK ROCK WOOT! and ur poems, too....so thats it for #3?...i like ur reviews!... Bye, happy new year, i HATE knitting (sorry), and i used to collect yu-gi-oh cards ;-)... I wass going to watch Eragon, btw, last weekend, but my mom was sick and she wouldn't let me go alone :-(. S.K

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