Incredibly sad, yet powerful. I was a bit confused by the part about his love, though. Was she another werewolf? An Animagus, perhaps? Maybe I'm just being thick here.
Anyway, in the first line of the third-to-last stanza, I think you meant to write "two," rather than "to," but other than that, everything seems perfect. Of course, the best (or worst, depending on how you look at it) part of the poem was the end. That's so like Remus to beat himself up for killing the man, even though the git was out to kill him first. The last line, though... *shivers* very powerful and sad. Kudos to you.
~NuwNuw
Author's Response: Thanks! Tomorrow's my Bat Mitzvah. She's Tonks. It's bit random, though.
That was a very sad poem! I think it portrays a werewolf's pain perfectly - they have no control, and end up killing the ones they love sometimes, even if they don't want to kill, they have to. They have no control.
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Author's Response: Thanks. I like tigers too (I have read your profile.) Didn't mean that in a stalker-ish way. Miss Wolfsbane
That was lovely, and terribly sad. Your poem starts out... Graceful, and then it turns dark and moody. Poor Moony.
Author's Response: Well, that's how Moony's month goes. It's... serene, and then, on the full moon, it's scary.
Oooh! That was so sad! Really well decribed. At one point though, I felt it was a bit childish, i.e when you wrote a "stupid" man called him a beast. I think ignorant, or..foolish...or..unknowing (if that's a word) would be more appropriate.
I really loved the last line. It tells us how werewolves like Remus have to kill to eat but strongly regret doing that.
Author's Response: Great suggestion! Well, I am sort of a child. I'd love to use that. Poor Remus goes through so much.
Aw, Wolfie that was so sweet and sad all wrapped in one! Very well written, it was great
Author's Response: Thanks, Abbs. I love poetry.
Oh my... that was very well done but so sad! Poor Moony... Er... That sounded odd considering that I am the one writing it... Ah well. It was great; a very good (but sad) poem. : )
~Moony
Author's Response: Well, the guy was a git. Though moony didn't deserve to be punished. Yes, sad. Thank you.
