Reviewer: notabanana
Date: 01/07/07 12:48
Chapter: James' Christmas Chaos

Aww...sweetness, cuteness...awww. Okay, I have composed myself now. I couldn't see Remus pounding a doorbell at fifty hits per minute, thats more of a Sirius thing. In fact, Remus and Sirius seemed a little too immature for their age in this fic, despite Sirius' fanon reputation for being crazy and overenergized. What form of TaeKwonDo has a purple belt, by the way? I still really like the fic, it was great in a funny/adorable way.

Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 01/01/07 8:20
Chapter: James' Christmas Chaos

*aww* This was a really sweet and moving story! Like the previous reviewer, I did think it was a bit unrealistic as the Potters were meant to be rich, but aside from that, this was a brilliant story!

Up until the Christmas Eve of 1979, James thought he knew everything about Lily; her favorite nail polish color (garnet red), her favorite food (Italian), her favorite music group (The Beatles), and her favorite book (To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee). This was really nice. I love the way that James can reel off lists of things that Lily loves, it shows how well he knows her. I also like the slight emphasis you put throughout the story, on Lily’s muggle heritage, and the fact that despite the fact that she lives in the wizarding world, she stills enjoys a lot of Muggle things. *Loves the Beatles, Italian food and To Kill and Mockingbird* *giggle*

A very ‘James’-ish’ thing that I liked in this story, is his use of capitals in “The Pen” and “The Journal” etc. It makes everything seem a lot more defined and makes these items so much more important!

I just have a few nitpicks: Every now and then, a gaggle of carolers would pass by the house that James and Lily lived in; the music of their song drifting up to the second floor windows. “Carolers” here should be spelt “carollers”

While most people wrote with feather quills, Lily opted for her fountain pen; and that honor was reserved for writing in her diary. Just a britpick here, “honor” should be “honour”. I love this idea that Lily still writes with her fountain pen sometimes, that’s so sweet!

The idea of James giving up his broomstick almost made me act like Remus and Sirius did! We all know how much James loved flying and the idea that he gave up something that meant so much to him, for someone that means even more, is really moving. I enjoyed this story a lot, well done and good luck! ~Suzie

Reviewer: to_the_stage93
Date: 12/16/06 12:59
Chapter: James' Christmas Chaos

Awww!!! That was a really cute take on a classic story. However, I did think the story was a little unrealistic. JK Rowling has said many times the Potters' were very rich, so I doubt somehting like this would occur. Still, I hope that's not too harsh, and with all due respect, I think you did a good job on this! Love the line about the wierd pregnacy craving!

Author's Response: D'oh! I forgot that detail! I almost never use Lexicon! I usually forget to do so. I added that AU warning just in case so that people will know what they are in for. Thanks for catching that!

Reviewer: to_the_stage93
Date: 12/16/06 12:59
Chapter: James' Christmas Chaos

Awww!!! That was a really cute take on a classic story. However, I did think the story was a little unrealistic. JK Rowling has said many times the Potters' were very rich, so I doubt somehting like this would occur. Still, I hope that's not too harsh, and with all due respect, I think you did a good job on this! Love the line about the wierd pregnacy craving!

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 12/15/06 20:38
Chapter: James' Christmas Chaos

That is a very cute story! I love the love and thought that you show James going through to find the "perfect" gift! It was funny when Lily rushed into the house. Her excitement was great! Thanks for the holiday cheer! Cyns

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 12/15/06 9:59
Chapter: James' Christmas Chaos

Hi Erica! I thought that since i beta-ed this for you that I'd give you a review! Te he!

This is a really good story plot for one. I love the detail in the emotions and writing.

This is just a classic thing of love for Christmas... I loved your ideas and the story, and I particularly enjoyed bate-ing it!

~Lindsey

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