Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil
Date: 01/18/07 13:40
Chapter: A Bad Day After A Worse Night

Great story! I've never seen one about what happened that day. It was very interesting to read your take on Sirius and Peter's encounter and their feelings. I liked the way you tied in Peter's cowardice with some cleverness, because I truly believe that Peter was not as clumsy and stupid as most authors make him out to be. Great job!
~JBV

Author's Response: Thank you. I remember reading something about how some writers make Peter into this meek and off-to-the-side type of character, and that is wrong because he was a Marauder, so I figured that he must have some brains. Plus, aren't rats typically symbolic of sneakiness?

Reviewer: mugglegurl
Date: 12/23/06 17:56
Chapter: A Bad Day After A Worse Night

A few small things.

“Liar!” he roared. You were their Secret Keeper when they died. Only you could’ve told him where to go!”
There should be a quotation mark before 'You'.

His face then contorted itself into on he though conveyed an emotion of deepest anguish and despair, but only succeeded in creating one of fear and patheticism.
I think you mean 'one' and 'thought'.

While I can't imagine myself not catching these, I apologize if I overlooked them.

Author's Response: It's alright.

Reviewer: mugglegurl
Date: 12/23/06 17:50
Chapter: A Bad Day After A Worse Night

*happy dance*
Yay! It got accepted. And although I let you know how I thought when I beta'd, I'll just say that I think that this fic was pretty accurate (with what we know so far, at least). It was very Peter-like to lie about it, even though Sirius knew it was his fault.

As for the missing the Hagrid part in your first review, I don't really think that was necessary for this fic. The part with Hagrid wouldn't have seemed right, since this is a fic about when Sirius meets Peter.

A very nice fic, dear. It was fun to beta and I'm glad it's posted.

Author's Response: *happy dances with mugglegurl* I was so happy when I got the letter saying it had been accepted. It took me a while to lengthen and fix it (I originally wrote it in January 2006). I'm beyond greatful for your beta work. That's very true, I guess if I went back now and tried to put him in he wouldn't fit anyway.

Reviewer: Kerichi
Date: 12/23/06 13:21
Chapter: A Bad Day After A Worse Night

I enjoyed your take on what happened. I think Peter would have been more 'Sirius, what are you doing here?' and don't think he was spiteful, just willing to sacrifice everyone else in order to live, but I absolutely agree "this is a cruel fate for having done nothing"!


Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I guess it's just how I thought he would be, I dunno. I had to have him find a way to escape with the witnesses and stuff like that.

Reviewer: harryandginny1165
Date: 12/23/06 5:48
Chapter: A Bad Day After A Worse Night

yep thats how i would have pithured it
if i might make a suggestion, u should have shown when hagrid met sirius after the attack

Author's Response: Thanks. I probably should have put in that part, but I must've overlooked it when I was flipping through PoA for reference. Oops....

Author's Response: Wait a second... I put that bit in chapter 3 of Before They Died....

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