Reviewer: mcclure_512
Date: 12/18/06 20:24
Chapter: The Last Flick of the Wand

Excellent! Imagery was spot on for me and I could feel the poem the whole way through, if that makes any sense. T.S. Eliot's poems are often long and... weird and you did a great job capturing his style. Go Ravenclaw, hope to see your poem on the podium. =)

Author's Response: Eee! Thank you so much, I'm so happy you like it. I also hope to see your entry on the podium! :)

Reviewer: kumydabookworm
Date: 12/15/06 22:05
Chapter: The Last Flick of the Wand

I love the ending. Your choice of topic (a Pensieve) is REALLY interesting. :)

One thing I may want to fix is that Pensieve should be capitalised. ;) I checked the book and it is capitalised there.

Beyond that, I think it's fabulous. -sigh- Competition sucks! :p No, but seriously, good luck with this challenge!!! :D You'll totally deserve it if you win!

Love,
Kumy

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Urgh, pensieve should be capitalized? Oh well. It looks a lot better with a lowercase. I'll see what I'll do. ;) Thanks so much. I know, competition does suck! But sometimes it's fun. :) -Jenn

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 12/15/06 13:24
Chapter: The Last Flick of the Wand

Wonderful job! I just read the original and frankly I like yours better, because I can understand it! :) You did a fantastic job taking T.S. Eliot's form and using it in this poem set in the Potterverse, right down to the little details like wands and owls and joke shops. Using the Pensieve in place of the lamp was inspired. The memories were perfect. I thought the stanza about the Dark Lord was particularly well-done, very powerful. This was great to read - good luck in the challenge! Go Ravenclaw!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Eee! Thank you so much. I really appreciate your comments. I was so excited when I thought of the pensieve instead of the lamp - it's a memory holder! Go Ravenclaw! :)

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