I really liked this, despite the teary ending.
Poem has good texture. A question - What is a beautiful body without soul?
Don't You think you should add some emotions, write with your eyes closed and heart open. IT dosent really matters if your poem hasen't got good texture- like in your case, you wrote beautiful rhymes but no voice. Voice is the echo of your heart, that sings and rhymes your poem automatically. Dont worry about rhyming that much that you forget to add some of your own laugh, tear and most important you yourself.
Author's Response: It was myself, my dear. I have a lot of problems in my life and sadness, I put it in. It's a poem very close to my heart.
That is so sad! It's a beautiful poem. This is definately your style of writing. *wipes tears from eyes*
Author's Response: Aww, thank you. I'll try to write something heartbreaking some other time then too!
Two things, one is completely off topic I might add :
One, That was such a sad poem but such a good one! And
Two, You became a member on Mugglent Fanfic on my b-day last year
Keep up the great writing!
-Hermione (aka Hannah)-
Author's Response: Thanks. I'll try to keep it up as much as I can :) (School is taking all my spare time away)
Oh my! What a sad poem.
Author's Response: Yes, but this is the way see their story, because I think Ron's going to die in the end. (Or then Ginny) I hope you liked it nevertheless. I tried hard to put down the sadness and the feeling.
Nice job, but (this is probably the second time this hour I've left a review of this caliber) The summary must be changed. That summary is not attracting readers/reviewers at all. Poems are barely read/reviewed, so they must have appealing sumaries. I suggest you look at Stoical Silences by lupinslover12 for a good idea of a nice poetry summary.
I like this poem a lot. It involved a lot of emotion and I did like the rhyme pattern. Said outloud, the ABAB stanzas were very quirky and cute. However, this poem did have a lot of sincerity and depth. Good job!!!
Author's Response: Thank you a lot. I'll see what I can do with the summary. Thanks fot your kind advice. I've noticed it myself too that it doesn't seem to attract many people, sadly.
