Reviews For Feelings for Ron
Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 12/02/07 19:22
Chapter: Sad

Marvelous, Michelle. *claps* Write more poetry. And you did this without a beta...? Wow. Marvelous, Michelle. I like the letter 'M' at the moment. :D Weird Victoria. *hugs* xxvictoria

Author's Response: Yay 'M'! Actually, Lindsey (Ron x Hermione) helped me on the first chapter, but then I went solo because she strated to go on hitaus. *huggles*

~Michelle


Author's Response: Yay 'M'! Actually, Lindsey (Ron x Hermione) helped me on the first chapter, but then I went solo because she strated to go on hitaus. *huggles*

~Michelle

Reviewer: marvelousmeg
Date: 10/19/07 19:55
Chapter: Sad

Not like... LOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Do one about after she is hurt and then then making up!!!!!!!! (if you want- duh!)

Author's Response: LOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Hmm ... maybe I'll do that, after I'm done with my school project. Who knows what may happen?
Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Briel
Date: 08/19/07 12:47
Chapter: Love

Wonderful poem! I really like the variance in line lengths. It creates a different, almost choppy rhythm that I feel reflects really well the way in which emotions often spill out of people suddenly. I also like how the last stanza differs from the rest and deals with Ron's emotions (even though from Hermione's perspective still). The one issue I have is that, as the first two stanzas deal with an emotion, I expected the third to do so as well. Although I do like this stanza, funny is not an emotion and seems a little out of place. However, overall I think this is amazing! You really seem to understand Hermione!

~Briel

Author's Response: Thanks, KatieWood a.k.a. Briel!

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 05/30/07 18:53
Chapter: Sad

Hey Michelle, I'm back for another round. :)

I think I liked this better than the first; I'm glad you decided to lengthen this, because it's really cute.

Here:

You know,
that I love you.


and

This time,
I am thinking.


You've got in that extra punctuation again when you free-verse. When you freeverse, you're supposed to just let the poetry come through your fingers naturally; you don't need a punctuation mark every time you break off a line or stanza. You may want to find a beta to help you sort through this.

Sad or depressed, I feel both.

If Hermione is feeling both, then wouldn't you have an 'and' instead of 'or' between 'sad' and 'depressed'?

Like saying Crookshanks killed Scabbers.
I did.


When you have this sentence here, it looks as if you're saying that she, Hermione, killed Scabbers, something we know didn't happen. After I re-read it I realised you were talking about how she forgave him, but I just wanted to clarify.

I'm glad you're still writing poetry, Michelle! it makes me smile. Really cute job, dear. :)

~Lindsey :)


Author's Response: LINDSEY . . . again!
Thanks again for the review! I like my first peom better, but I'm in the middle of writing chapter 4, the final chapter, and I'll be submitting chapter 3 tommorow.

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 05/30/07 18:30
Chapter: Love

Hey Michelle!

This was a great poem, dear. Very cute.

However, you know how you kind of free-versed in some parts of the poem, like this:

It's like,
you know that I,
love you to bits because,
You watch me from every corner.


You don't really have to add a form of punctuation after every single line. You've got a lot of those extra commas everywhere.

Also, in the first stanza, I think you've spelled 'reminds' wrong. You've got an extra 'e'.

I like how you had incorporated a different emotion at the beginning of each stanza, but what happened to the fourth? :)

Since this came from Hermione's perspective, then I kind of liked how she was struggling with her inner emotions. Or, was she actually telling Ron?

But I love when I say loving,
I do.


I'm not sure that I really understand what you mean here. Do you mean that Hermione loves to say 'love'? To Ron?

Very nice poem, overall, but I think that it could have been a bit more descriptive in your statements. Nice!

~Lindsey :)



Author's Response: LINDSEY!!!!
Thanks for the awesome review!

Reviewer: GinnyFanForever34
Date: 04/25/07 13:09
Chapter: Sad

That was good but i think you need to put in something about Ron's point of view

Author's Response: Thanks! Maybe I will do a sequel with Ron's point of view, but this is just for Hermione. Sorry! ~ Ginny

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 04/22/07 14:30
Chapter: Sad

Hermione forgives Ron! Great addition, Michelle.

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Thankies! But will she is the last chapter...which will be a while, since this story will be about 11 chapters? ~ Ginny

Reviewer: Ritter
Date: 04/20/07 21:15
Chapter: Sad

Very nice, update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try updating quickly!

Reviewer: hermioneluvsronald
Date: 04/20/07 16:58
Chapter: Sad

That was weird and different but i like it.

Author's Response: :)

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 03/18/07 15:50
Chapter: Love

Awww... that's sweet. I can just see that sort of internal struggle Hermione has about falling for this boy and not wanting to show it so blatantly when he's one of her best friends. I especially like the first stanza! Keep writing!

Author's Response: Hey Schmergo! Thanks! I think I know why your reviewing.....*giggles* ♥ Gin

Reviewer: hermione_at_heart
Date: 02/03/07 18:09
Chapter: Love

Hi again GinnyPotter!

I really like this poem, as the others said, it is very sweet! I particularly liked the use of the single words at the top of the first three stanzas. I'm no poetry expert, but this gave a good structure or form, pattern is probably the word I'm looking for! :)

I could never be brave enough to attempt poetry as I think it is a very difficult form of writing (not for everyone, obviously!) So well done for your fab poem, I really enjoyed it!

Phily :)

Author's Response: Phily! Hi! Thanks for the review. -Gin

Reviewer: MJ_Padfoot
Date: 01/31/07 19:13
Chapter: Love

Cute! I like it!

Author's Response: Thank you! -Gin

Reviewer: hermy_loves_ron
Date: 12/12/06 21:53
Chapter: Love

Cute poem! You did a great job with showing how Hermione really feels.

Author's Response: Thanks! =]

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