Reviewer: AurorGirl101
Date: 02/14/07 14:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was really great!! I like the refrain. My favorite verse is verse 3. You did realy nice with this!!

AurorGirl101 of the Knights of the Round Table

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Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 12/30/06 13:02
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great parody! I’m not too familiar with the carol, though I think I might recognise it if I heard it, but I thought the rhythm and rhymes worked well standing along as well.

The blood lay on the ground, the children cried,
On the cold night when the Potters died.

These first two lines were an excellent intro! They set the dismal, deathly scene really well and prepared us for what was to come. My only critique is that the verse titles: “verse 1 etc” and “refrain” in bold, were a bit distracting and perhaps broke the flow of the parody up a bit. Apart from that, this was fantastic and I really enjoyed it! Well done and good luck! ~Suzie

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 12/13/06 16:02
Chapter: Chapter 1

The rhyme scheme was perfect, and the story good in this one. It was a nice read, though a bit on the depressing side. Great luck on the challenge! Cyns

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Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 12/12/06 14:46
Chapter: Chapter 1

Well done! I'm vaguely familiar with the carol, and I think you picked the right song for this topic. It is rather dark and sad, as carols go, but so is what happened to the Potters. You did well following the form of the original - good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I had fun writing it.

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