Author's Response: Why, thank you ~Venia Taint
I found you're poem very well written and insightful. The only thing you really need to watch out for is your word choice.
Though you’ve lost the last of light,
Your hope for others won’t be smite. in this line the ending was a bit akward. You use light a lot in you're poem, but this was a nice effect to the whole of the poem.
Author's Response: Yes, I seem to be getting ALOT of responses as to the confusion of the poem, so I'm currently working on a 'translation' that I'll post soon...maybe...eventually? anyhoo, thanks aton for the review , THe advise and support is always appreciated!
You do a wonderful job rhyming and interpreting Harry's life. Since I am so novice at this *reddens* could you offer a bit more as to what you meant in each stanza? Thanks!
Okay, favorite part:
Learn to fight against the dread,
Avenge those who you love are dead.
So keep running towards the light,
Your hope is fading with the might.
Wonderful job, I really like this poem. I can offer more 'help' (praise, more like) when I understand this better...
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Author's Response: Sure! I'll post another bit to this fic with an explanation of each stanza...so keep a look out, and THANKS! ~The Tainted One
I do enjoy your storys deeply! Are you going to write any more? xx
Author's Response: *snorts* DUH! of course I'll write more, and if it makes you feel anybetter, I'm doing a really BIG story, so keep an eye out! And thanks so much for the kindness... ~The Tainted One
Very nice. I can't "poeticize" to save my life.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks! As for your poeticizing though, i'm sure your fantastical at it, so now that's three put-ups!! *smiles nievly, completly brainwashed by parents...*
This is absolutely beautiful and sad at once. I especially like the last stanza. It's also refreshing how you put a somewhat religious spin on it, since so many people say that they won't read
Harry Potter because it's anti-religion.
(I'm Christian myself...)
Somehow your poem manages to make his death seem like more of a positive thing than a negative thing, which is rather nice. It's not the kind of poem that leaves you depressed. I hope to see more from you, soon!
Author's Response: Really? Thank you VERY much...I was trying to inccorperate a feeling of accepetance, positivity, and even neccessity in Harry's death (I have always thought Harry to be a Horcrux which Voldemort made unintentionally before during his death...hence thier wierd connection and similarities) As for the religion part, I feel that it is neccessary to believe in something, especially someone (like Harry) who has lost everything...even though I'm not a big Jesus person myself, it seemed key to the poem. As for the last stanza, I really tried putting my whole heart and soul in that bit...Harry lossing his sanity and life to save those of others and humanity...Thanks a ton for R&R-ing! *huggies* ~The Taintied One
Author's Response: P.S. I really hope to be getting more up soon, so keep a look out!
Whoa. This was really dark. A very good exploration of Harry's feelings. I really enjoyed this. Very well done.
Author's Response: My VERY FIRST REVIEW EVER ! ! ! Yay! Thank you for the compliments...I can finally breath, I was thinking that maybe some of the bits were to obscure (such as the bit at the end where I have Harry decide to inflict self injury/commit suicide after killing Voldemort inorder to be with the ones he loves/has lost) to really find meaning in through the books...it's INCREDIBLY difficult to fit the life of a main character who spans seven books into one short poem...anyhoo, thank you, agian! *hugs* ~The Tainted One