Very good.
Author's Response: Why, thank you ~Venia Taint
I found you're poem very well written and insightful. The only thing you really need to watch out for is your word choice.
For example:
Though you’ve lost the last of light,
Your hope for others won’t be smite. in this line the ending was a bit akward. You use light a lot in you're poem, but this was a nice effect to the whole of the poem.
Author's Response: Yes, I seem to be getting ALOT of responses as to the confusion of the poem, so I'm currently working on a 'translation' that I'll post soon...maybe...eventually? anyhoo, thanks aton for the review , THe advise and support is always appreciated!
You do a wonderful job rhyming and interpreting Harry's life. Since I am so novice at this *reddens* could you offer a bit more as to what you meant in each stanza? Thanks!
Okay, favorite part:
Learn to fight against the dread,
Avenge those who you love are dead.
So keep running towards the light,
Your hope is fading with the might.
Wonderful job, I really like this poem. I can offer more 'help' (praise, more like) when I understand this better...
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Author's Response: Sure! I'll post another bit to this fic with an explanation of each stanza...so keep a look out, and THANKS! ~The Tainted One
I do enjoy your storys deeply! Are you going to write any more? xx
Author's Response: *snorts* DUH! of course I'll write more, and if it makes you feel anybetter, I'm doing a really BIG story, so keep an eye out! And thanks so much for the kindness... ~The Tainted One
Very nice. I can't "poeticize" to save my life.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks! As for your poeticizing though, i'm sure your fantastical at it, so now that's three put-ups!! *smiles nievly, completly brainwashed by parents...*
This is absolutely beautiful and sad at once. I especially like the last stanza. It's also refreshing how you put a somewhat religious spin on it, since so many people say that they won't read
Harry Potter because it's anti-religion.
(I'm Christian myself...)
Somehow your poem manages to make his death seem like more of a positive thing than a negative thing, which is rather nice. It's not the kind of poem that leaves you depressed. I hope to see more from you, soon!
Author's Response: Really? Thank you VERY much...I was trying to inccorperate a feeling of accepetance, positivity, and even neccessity in Harry's death (I have always thought Harry to be a Horcrux which Voldemort made unintentionally before during his death...hence thier wierd connection and similarities) As for the religion part, I feel that it is neccessary to believe in something, especially someone (like Harry) who has lost everything...even though I'm not a big Jesus person myself, it seemed key to the poem. As for the last stanza, I really tried putting my whole heart and soul in that bit...Harry lossing his sanity and life to save those of others and humanity...Thanks a ton for R&R-ing! *huggies* ~The Taintied One
Author's Response: P.S. I really hope to be getting more up soon, so keep a look out!
Whoa. This was really dark. A very good exploration of Harry's feelings. I really enjoyed this. Very well done.
Author's Response: My VERY FIRST REVIEW EVER ! ! ! Yay! Thank you for the compliments...I can finally breath, I was thinking that maybe some of the bits were to obscure (such as the bit at the end where I have Harry decide to inflict self injury/commit suicide after killing Voldemort inorder to be with the ones he loves/has lost) to really find meaning in through the books...it's INCREDIBLY difficult to fit the life of a main character who spans seven books into one short poem...anyhoo, thank you, agian! *hugs* ~The Tainted One
