Reviews For Mourning
Reviewer: Sainyn Swiftfoot
Date: 09/06/08 11:49
Chapter: Mourning

Wow, that is nice. For a first poem, it's realy, really good!

I liked the structure, the shortness, EVERYTHING. I have nothing to critique.

Ok, so I lied. I have teeny bit. Look at this part:

Pain.
I saw him slain.
Shock.
Only a veil will remain.
Anger.
What was to gain?
Sorrow.
Wallowing in pain.

And

Resentment.
Drives me insane.
Revenge.
Contorts my brain.
Death.
Has left its stain.

In the second part, the stuff in italics continues to the next line. However in the first part it does not continue. Am I making sense?

However, I loved it all the same!

~BB

Author's Response: Nice try, but I still side with Meda....and her Haddocks. Their much more cute and deadly than yours were...But thanks for the review. *smiles innocently while pocketing some Galleons filched from BB*

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 07/07/08 13:14
Chapter: Mourning

For the first poem it's good. It rhymes, the flow is easy, and it brings over emotions. Good job, well done.

Reviewer: voldiegirl
Date: 01/11/08 20:47
Chapter: Mourning

OMG! That was so awesome! *Claps, cheers, does chicken dance*

Reviewer: Dara
Date: 11/11/07 8:05
Chapter: Mourning

For a first fanfic, this is really, really good! Very short, but it conveys how Harry felt very well.

Reviewer: Dubbledore
Date: 06/20/07 12:11
Chapter: Mourning

Almost made me cry. I don't cry easily, I'll tell you that. When you look deeply into the poem, you can feel Harry's emotions, and that's what got me.

Author's Response: Wow...I never thought that this would make anyone other than me cry.

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 05/12/07 21:47
Chapter: Mourning

Wow, very very short, but still good. And the whole thing rhymes- which is cool.

My favorite part is the end:

Death.
Has left its stain.


Good job. ^_^

Author's Response: thanks.

Reviewer: LovelyxLena
Date: 12/11/06 15:30
Chapter: Mourning

I just need to say, I didn't expect to laugh form this. But your A/N sheer genius. This poem is so sad and it is meaningful. I miss Sirius! Notice Jo always says Dumby is really dead, but who cares? She never said Sirius is really gone, has she?

Author's Response: actually i think she did....somewhere in the mugglenet/tlc interview...

Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 12/10/06 5:13
Chapter: Mourning

This is short but very powerful. I love all the emotions in italics; they seem to reflect exactly what Harry must have been feeling. The rhythm and rhyme both fit very well and the poem left me thinking a bit as well...excellent poem. Well done. :)

Author's Response: thanks, i didn't really think it was that good...

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