Wow, that is nice. For a first poem, it's realy, really good!

I liked the structure, the shortness, EVERYTHING. I have nothing to critique.

Ok, so I lied. I have teeny bit. Look at this part:

Pain.
I saw him slain.
Shock.
Only a veil will remain.
Anger.
What was to gain?
Sorrow.
Wallowing in pain.

And

Resentment.
Drives me insane.
Revenge.
Contorts my brain.
Death.
Has left its stain.

In the second part, the stuff in italics continues to the next line. However in the first part it does not continue. Am I making sense?

However, I loved it all the same!

~BB

Author's Response: Nice try, but I still side with Meda....and her Haddocks. Their much more cute and deadly than yours were...But thanks for the review. *smiles innocently while pocketing some Galleons filched from BB*

OMG! That was so awesome! *Claps, cheers, does chicken dance*

Almost made me cry. I don't cry easily, I'll tell you that. When you look deeply into the poem, you can feel Harry's emotions, and that's what got me.

Author's Response: Wow...I never thought that this would make anyone other than me cry.

I just need to say, I didn't expect to laugh form this. But your A/N sheer genius. This poem is so sad and it is meaningful. I miss Sirius! Notice Jo always says Dumby is really dead, but who cares? She never said Sirius is really gone, has she?

Author's Response: actually i think she did....somewhere in the mugglenet/tlc interview...