This is cute. I like the end a lot!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I had a lot of fun writing it. =)
Sweet!
She’s fallen in love with the boy she can’t stand.
How romantic! I love that! It's an excellent description of the way Lily feels - falling in love with someone that she despises!
Down she does tumble, but James breaks her fall
Metaphorically and in this story, this is a very good show of there-for-me-when-I'm-down, which is the kind of person that James is!
Great piece!
Hannah
Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing! :]
That was so awesome.
-Susan
Author's Response: Haha, thanks! :]
Wow! I really enjoyed this. The rhythm and word choice is really well thought out and I could hear the song playing in my head. :)
My favourite part was the ending:
Down she does tumble, but James breaks her fall,
“Well, maybe,” she thinks, “he’s okay after all.”
I love the thoughts in italics...they're so sweet! Good job and good luck in the challenge. ~Suzie
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I had to read it out loud like twenty times or something before I could get it to sound right. Thanks for reviewing! :]
adorable! i love that she's in love with his messy hair. that's one of my favorite parts about the Potter men too! well done and good luck!
Author's Response: I love their hair too! Thanks for reviewing! :]
HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!! hahaha the last lines are perrfect =)
Author's Response: Aw, I'm glad you like it! :]
Oh! That was cute! Great work!
Author's Response: Thanks! :]
LOL That was very cute and funny! Thanks for the giggles and well done! :)
Cyns
Author's Response: I'm glad it made you laugh! Thanks for reviewing. :]
Aw that was so cute! I liked the way it rhymes, it was nice.
Author's Response: Thanks! :]
Very sweet. I can't write poetry to save my life, but you most certainly can! Excellent job.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I never write poetry, but I had a lot of fun with this. :]
That is so cute! I could totally "hear" this in my head as I read it. Good work with the rhyme and rhythm, and it told a story as well! Great job, and good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I was so happy to see I had a review for this. Thanks for taking the time to leave one. :]
