Reviewer: hogwartsduchess
Date: 12/14/06 14:02
Chapter: Of Coloured Pencils and Plastic Bags

This was a very touching story. It's wonderful to see Harry through the eyes of an outsider. You can convey emotions that would be impossible in the characters provided to us. This was wonderful look at Harry's life outside of the Dursleys home and Hogwarts. I, too, have often wondered what a discerning teacher may have thought about him, and to see it written out like this is very moving.

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to leave such a thoughful and insightful review. The viewpoint I chose for this just seemed the natural one for what I wanted to convey, and I am rather happy with how it turned out. Thank you again for your lovely comments.

Reviewer: xginny_weasleyx
Date: 12/14/06 13:52
Chapter: Of Coloured Pencils and Plastic Bags

That was so beautifully written. He sounds like a child you would remember forever. There was a child like that that I looked after in p!. She was such a sweet girl but she was always ill and she was so skinny. She didn't return to school the year after and I never found out what happened to her. That was beautiful.

Author's Response: Although I am not fond of Harry in the books, I find the thought of him as a small child rather endearing, in a sad way. He would have been memorable, I think. It's sad to hear about the girl you mentioned too. Thanks for taking the time to review.

Reviewer: Ithinkrabis2people
Date: 12/14/06 13:09
Chapter: Of Coloured Pencils and Plastic Bags

Oh, this is lovely! Such a sweet story, and a very interesting angle. I don't think I'd have ever thought of it!

If I might make one suggestion? In some places, you had some punctuation a little out of place. If you ever decide to do a longer fic, I'd advise you to get yourself a Beta reader, just to help you catch little errors!

Lovely story. Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to leave such a lovely review. The angle just sort of came to me, as I have often wondered why no one realised what was going on with Harry. I do actually have a couple of longer fics with betas, however it is not something I normally worry about so much on my one shots. As you said, it is the little errors that get me and I never notice, but they don't tend to be so bad in shorter pieces. I may start running my shorter pieces past a beta though. Thank you again

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