Aw. That is so sad. It really does seem like a mother trying to tell her son what is happening. I don't know how to explain, but I liked it.
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you liked the poem, it is kind of chilling isn't it...I'm glad you got the point I was trying to get accross. -Emily-
I like this draft more. Although I really cant see alot of differences. You write great poems but you should also write some stories. They would be good ones from your perspective. Anywayz, great job and keep writing!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you like this poem. And I'm glad that you liked it...Maybe I'll try to write a story or two...Thanks... -Emily-
Wow! That's so good! I love reading poetry, I just can't write any, lol. Fantastic job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love writing poetry, and to see that someone else appreciates it makes my day...Thanks... -Emily-