Nice, I hope you finish it. This beginning could lead to some very interesting situations.
"The air was disgustingly thick..."
--Hmmm. Not my first choice for an adjective, 'disgusting', maybe you could consider a change. It's descriptive, but somehow it doesn't feel right.
"It was the exact opposite of silence. The scene in front of him could be described in one word; chaotic. His mind was only on one thing; getting Draco Malfoy back to the Dark Lord. "
--Oops. Those semi-colons are not needed. What you do need is a good old regular colon. But i would not suggest using two sentences with that pause in a row.
"Snape was very aware of Draco yelling at him."
--This doesn't seem right. I would add 'suddenly' to the sentence. That would make it more in place. 'Snape was suddenly very aware...'
Otherwise, I love it! It's nice to see someone's idea on what happened after Dumbledore was murdered. Good writing style, lovely vocabulary - and no typos! (from what I saw, at least!)
I can't wait to see more chapters.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. :) I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the luck.
This story is intense! I agree with anvil sized hint! Your story is unique in the fact that it is actually exciting in the first chapter! Great job, and keep up the good work! I hope I see an update soon! This is going on my favorites list!
Author's Response: YAY! Thanks. :) I'm glad I'm getting such positive reviews on the first chapter.
very nice very nice
I think that all of the characters are GREATLY in character... grr Voldemort. I wonder what Draco will say. hmmm
Author's Response: Aww, thanks. :) I'm happy you like it and I'm going to keep you in wonder... until the next chapter, of course.
Wow... talk about realistic. Very impressed! Usually first chapters are boring, but it seems so intense. Can't wait for the next chapter!! *adds this story to FAVORITES*
Author's Response: First review! Thanks! I'm glad you liked it and I'm happy that this story is on your favorites list.