Oh, wow. It's so sweet! I want to meet Emily. I love how you give more backround for Hermione's life beforehand - as we don't get to see it in the books.
Yes, her hair was the same color, but it didn’t bounce anymore. It lay flat. Her eyes still made him melt, but they lacked the usual twinkle. Her smile was still contagious, but it now lacked the reassurance it had before. The confidence and certainty.
The imagery there is superb. i can really get a clear picture of that in my head.
I love Ron's "I'm your man"-ness - it's really sweet. I loved it.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks, Hannah! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Speaking of good descriptions, I'm in the middle of your fic Meet the-- Children? right now...