Reviewer: Nyaza
Date: 09/03/07 15:58
Chapter: Helga

it's so difficult to fin good ficts fo the founders (well, finding ficts at all from them it's difficult!) I really really got interested by it, Helga and Godric seems so no alike, it's werid to think of Helga older than Godric, as i have always picture her as the youngest of the four. I really wish you get to go on with the story cause i'm intrigued, and it's pretty much different fr everything else i have read! Nice work n_ń!

Reviewer: IamGinny3744
Date: 07/14/07 21:19
Chapter: Helga

WOW!!! I LOVE it... I like the details, I almost feel as though I'm actually there. I believe that this is a WONDERFUL story... please continue...

Reviewer: Chaser921
Date: 05/05/07 23:41
Chapter: Helga

This is a very good start; I really like how acurate you're being in portraying life in that time period and place. I also like that you've made Helga one of the Norse. It's an interesting twist. Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: honeydukes_10
Date: 02/11/07 20:11
Chapter: Helga

Hello! Wow, this is a great start to this story! I can't wait until you update with other chapters!

Just wanted to say a couple nit-picky things about it:

You said: "They reached Įsgeršr's house and walked in. "You're late," the old badger scolded. With her bulky form and fierce face, she did indeed resemble an enraged badger."

This is a great way to compare the old witch to a badger. However, I had to read this a couple of times; I found it a little confusing. It might have just have been me, but maybe you should reword it, saying instead, "......With Įsgeršr's bulky form and fierce face, she did indeed resemble an enraged badger." Again, it might be just me, you could find it perfectly okay.

Also, you say: "It was just a coincidence,she was sure, but fear gnawed her like a wolf. " I simply love when people put this in their stories. It seems so dramatic, yet believable. However, it should be, "But fear knawed AT her like a wolf." I leave out words sometimes, too, so don't feel bad.

Also, I really do believe this is a very believable story. I mean, I may still want to think of the Founders as they are, but you also have to think of the "What Ifs".

You do this very well. You also make me really feel bad for the villagers, who have either gone through heck with the famine, or those families who have lost a valued member due to a horrible disease.

Again, I can't wait until you update with chapter number two, but until then, Happy Writing!

Andrea





Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. I am soory I haven't gotten to respond before now. The next chapter when I get it done will be be eather about Godric or Salazar most likly.

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