lol! loved it! great first chapter! they're just so funny and cute when they're younger!
Author's Response: They certainly are... I should write more stories with little ten-year-old Lily and James characters. :D
i likecd it =)
please do the next chapter fast pretty pleas =P
garrh!!!!!!! oh my god, this is so dramatic! its crazy, i'm loving the update, i don't have the brainpower to write any kind of intelligible review right now, but i'll probably come back in a few days once all this lovely james/lily action has sunk into my mind. thank you so much for this chapter! you rock my dumbly-dorr socks.
This is one of my fave stories! Just promise to update, mmmkay?
i am in love with this story... as well as James! you are an amazing writer! teach me! hurry with the next one! i love this so far! and im sure i will love it all the way through! gimme more! gimme more!
great chapter. it was sad poor james and poor lily. they were so close to being togther. grrrr why didnt lily tell her friends.!! great chatper. please update soon!
that was simply... no other word for it... WOW!!!!
but like i told earlier i alredy tracked u down at fanfiction.net.(m happilycharmed there.).. n honestly I AM READY TO KILL FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!! its been so long!! plz plz update soon... on fanfic first... these muggles take way tooo long to update!!
love u really!!!
omg i love it!!! please add more fast!!
*Squee!* I am so happy that you finally got to update! :D This is very possibly my favorite story on the site!
She hadn’t actually believedthat it was a dream...
You forgot to put a space between believed and that.
When something belongs to James you actually use 's. You're only suppose to use s' when the noun is plural like girls'. Since James is one person, it should be James's.
I love how you write emotions. When Lily was embrassed, I was blushing, when she was sad, I wanted to cry, and when she was giddy, I felt like jumping around screaming and laughing. It's really amazing how empathic your writing is.
I also love how believable your characters are. I could easliy pictured James getting angry that way and yelling and saying those things. I love how much of a klutz Lily is. I'm a natural klutz too! I really like how obvious Lily's moods are. In the beginning she's frazzeled and confused. Then she's sad, embrassed, and angry with herself and then she's confused again. And the she's deliriously happy, but still a little sad. This chapter sure put me through an emtional rollercoaster!
I think the thing I love the most though, is how I always know exactly what your characters are doing. You describe their movement so well. I think it partly come from having a theatre background. Your used to stage directions, yeah?
James blinked, trying to see where Lily was going with this. “I guess,” he mumbled.
Aww. Poor James. The girl he's in love with thinks he was just acting. :( Also the tension between Lily and James is just fantastic!
“He’s a really great actor,” Lily said, almost sounding as if she were trying to persuade her friends how great of a guy James was. “But he won’t audition for anything.” She smiled sadly. “He’s been helping me with memorizing my lines for the past several weeks… And he can dance!” she added excitedly, suddenly remembering this fact about James. Without so much as a warning, Lily leapt up from her place against the door and sprinted across the floor to her closet. She opened the door with a great deal of enthusiasm and searched through the items hanging up, quickly finding the jacket that she had shoved into the closet the night before.
I love this passage! I think it's my favorite one of the whole chapter. I love the feelings it produces and I love the magic of it and I love the way I can see it.
LOL! Do you think I could have said "I love..." any more in this review?!
I LOVE IT. this is honestly my all-time favourite fanfic!!!!!!! pleeeeease keep writing!! you're a fantastic writer and I loooooovvvvvvve your work.
Author's Response: All time fave? Nice! :D That's definitely good to hear! Thanks!
this is possibly the saddest chapter i have EVER read in a romance fic! i cried so much when james left lily in the room.....usually i pick sides but here i just don't care i just want them together. i don't know how you're gonna make it happen but i know it's gonna be good. and i love that lilys friends were so understanding because in other fics they stay mad for a while and i don't think real friends would do that ..you are wonderful writer and i can't wait for an update!
W.O.W. is all I have to say. =D
awsome as always update soon!!
ahh you leaved us hanging!!
omg this chapet was..im speechless! i feel emotionally tired..i swear i was on the verge of crying (somehting i almsot NEVER do when reading something) and was laughing hysterically along with Lily. u truly outdid ureself this time! the emotions were portrayed amazingly! this is my all time favorite chapter! it was so well written i dont have ONE complaint. just wow...this was...truly amazing!
Oh plz let it up really soon! I've been waiting for this chapter forever! I've been going crazy!!! Plz update within the month if you can because I just LOVE this story!!!!!
YAY!!!!!! Oh my God, Oh my God, how's she gonna get him back?!
A riveting and truly inspiring experience, reading your story. Keep pouring on the drama!
I really liked it ...not only like but loved it! This is a really awesome story! I just read chapter 12 ... could u plz continue and put the final chapter 13...i really cant wait for it...i really loved the way u made james n lily to reveal their feeling....plzzzz update soon
Author's Response: Haha - I'll do my best on getting that up as soon as I can! Summer break officially starts in 3 days for me, so I'll have plenty of time to write, then!rnrnThanks for reviewing!rnrnYours truly,rnAmelia Bedelia
This is by far my favorite story, please update soon. Lily's friends are not helping her situation very much. Oh and I loved how she smelled James' coat when she hung it up, she really needs to just realize that she loves him. :) please continue!!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you think so - that's a good thing to hear! :D And I'll try to update sooner next time!rnrnThanks for reviewing!rnrnYours truly,rnAmelia Bedelia
awesome story hurry up and update my fav fic ever!!!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm so glad it's your favorite! That's good to hear!rnrnThanks for reviewing!rnrnYours truly,rnAmelia Bedelia