is that a cliff hanger to you? not to me. its a joke. a cruel joke!! but really good story. hurry up and update. one thing don't take offense its called constructive critism.lol but i would have thought sirius to be a bit more cocky. but like i said really good story. though you scared me a bit when lily saw james' shoes and sock scattered by the creek. i thought she was going to find pants ...unmentionables. if you catch my drift hahaha ;)
Author's Response: Haha! Sorry about the cruel joke... :D And, yes, I sometimes view Sirius as a bit cocky. Right now I'm writing a one-shot where Sirius is constantly trying to bother someone in particular and thinks that he can outwit them every time... but it never works. :D But I guess I took a bit of a different approach to his character in this story! Thanks for the comments and the review! I really appreciate it! :D Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
ZOMG!!!! Thank you so much for updating! This is my favorite fanfic on here! I just think its so cute!!!! Update again soon! Much love for this story!
Author's Response: Your favorite? Wow, I'm really glad to hear that! :D Thank you so much! Thanks for reviewing! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
Yay! *punches air* You updated! And with a nice long chapter, too!
I was so glad to see Sirius in here, nice to see a familiar face. However, I didn't feel he was very... realistic. Wouldn't he be a bit shocked to see Lily Evans polite? Did James tell him about the improvement? If not, I'm very surprised at the sudden friendship and lack of coldness towards the girl who gave them hate for so long.
Besides that, this was a perfect addition to the story! The museum was lovely, and I just adored James's friendliness and kindness. Excellent work, and can't wait for the net chapter!
Author's Response: Yep - the updates are getting quicker and they're just as long as the others! :D And, once again, I'm really glad you pointed that Sirius bit out for me! Thanks for the review - and the critque! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
Great chapter! I loved the museum. Update Soon!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the museum! I was a little nervous about how some people might take it, so I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
yea! the next chapter! can't wait for the next one! i love this story! just love it i tell you! O_o hurry up and get the next one up! love the length too! love long chapters!
Author's Response: Yay - I'm so glad you love it! Haha! And don't worry, the next chapter is on it's way... and it's long. :D Thanks for reviewing! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
Yaya, I love Sirius! I was wondering if he'd show up in the story at all.
Author's Response: Yep, he showed up! :D Also, I think he pops in towards the end, as well... but depending upon how it goes, he might show up more than that! Thanks for reviewing! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
I adore this story! It's so original. I've never read any James/Lily like it. It's really well written too! Can't wait for more! You've really got something here!
Author's Response: Thank you! I've worked a lot on trying to make it original, so I'm glad you said that! :D Thank you so much for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
ZOMG!!!!! LOVE this story!!!!!! Keep up the good work! UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Yay - I'm so glad you like this story! :D Thanks! And thank you so much for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
Cool job!Really loved it!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm glad you like it so much! Thank you for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
~ Hannah Abbot
Author's Response: Haha! Alright, I guess you can have an update... :D Thank you for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
You know, when I first started to read this story, I didn't really think I'd like it that much, cause I usually don't like theater-stories.. but this story is really growing on me.. So I was very happy when the update was here! Your descriptions are really good, and I loooooove that the chapters are so long. A lot of stories have really short chapters... but here you certainly feel it's worth the wait length-wise.. and story-wise as well ;)
keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I'm so glad I was able to change your mind about the story! :D And I'm really glad that you like the length and description... I work the most on getting the description just right... but I usually have to work on keepinig the length shorter than I want, or else I'll have to split chapters into three parts... which, believe it or not, HAS happened... :D Thank you so much for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
~ Hannah Abbot
Author's Response: Yay - they're not fighting anymore! :D But don't worry... there's still plenty of time for their friendship to develop... :) Thanks for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
What just happened? O.O
~ Hannah Abbot
Author's Response: I know... Crazy Lily, declining James' help... Who would ever want to turn James down??? :D Thanks for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
Bum Bum Bummmmmm!!
~ Hannah Abbot
Author's Response: Haha! Bum bum bum is RIGHT! :D Thank you so much for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
i absolutely loved this part of the story!!! its was soo cuteee!! Lily def. likes James...
but when are they finally going to get together??
Author's Response: When are they going to get together... :D You, my dear, will just have to wait for that! :D But don't worry, there will be plenty of "moments" leading up until that point... Thank you so much for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
Whooo-hooo!!! All is good when James takes his shirt off!!! Yay! Awesome job! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Haha - yes, James with his shirt off! :D That automatically makes the story number one. Haha! Thank you so much for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
I love your penname too, it's so cute!
Author's Response: Hahaha - thanks for that little add-on! :D Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
I felt that I should add my favorite parts from this chapter too...
"She knew that she shouldn’t be so tense when James was helping out with some scenes, but it was so unnatural! At least with her father in charge, she felt that she had a better grip on things."
Lils DEFINITELY likes him!
"James slid a hammer into his belt buckle and held up a dress with his other hand. “We just got your new costume,” James shouted loudly, his voice traveling across the room. “Do you want to try it on? You know,” he added, and Lily could have sworn she saw the flicker of a grin cross his face, “the costume designers got it in a different size and wanted to check and make sure it fit this time.”"
Great way to get back at Jess!
"He glanced down at his shirtless chest and began to grow very uncomfortable with the situation."
Heh heh heh! However, this next one has got to be my favorite.
"“Imagine the stories I can tell with this thing,” James said loudly so Lily could hear him on the other end of the room. “I could say I fought a dragon… Hey!” James called even louder than before, trying to get Lily’s full attention. “I could tell everyone that I went back in time and one of those huge knights I told you guys about sliced me open and I made it back to the future just in time to get life-saving surgery!”
“Or,” Lily took her handheld mirror back and snapped it closed between her two fingers, “you could tell everyone that you stepped in a can of paint.”
“That does not leave this room,” James narrowed his eyes playfully at Lily."
Oh, I ought to tell you that I also, in chapter one, loved James's thoughts about his clothes, and the way that Lily confirmed that fear. In this one, I would like to tell you that I love your version of Mrs. Potter throughout the story, too.
Author's Response: I felt so bad writing that whole costume thing with Jess... It's so effective using words to get back at girls instead of physical threats, though. :) And, as for the bit where James tries to act tough with his injury... don't worry, that bit makes an appearance in the fifth chapter. :D Thank you so much for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
I love how into it James gets in this chaper, and all of Lily's emotions and frustrations. This was, again, a really well written chapter!
I managed to pick just 3 favorite quotes this time, woot woot!
"Finally, in an extremely calm whisper, James looked back up and asked, “Lily, do you realize how heavy an actual medieval sword is?” He paused, waiting to see if she would answer. When Lily did nothing but glare back fiercely, James tilted his head a fraction of an inch to the side and continued. “Do you even realize,” he started to raise his voice so the entire room could hear, “how much work it took for an actual knight to use a sword?” He stepped closer to the stage and locked his gaze on Lily. “Have you seen a picture of a typical knight during the middle ages?”"
"James gestured at his arm, pointedly ignoring Lily’s eye roll. “Imagine every one of these knights like they were on steroids.”"
"James shook his head with a small chuckle. He dropped both of his hands onto the edge of the stage, on opposite sides of Lily, and leaned in closer. Lily felt a jolt of energy shoot through her as James’ thumb accidentally brushed against her thigh. She was powerless; she was sitting on the stage, but James still seemed to be just as tall as her standing on the floor. As her heart thudded faster in her chest and her face heated up, Lily wondered if she was beginning to develop claustrophobia."
Ooh. she DOES like him! Silly Lily (Hey, that rhymes!), not realizing it!
I think that it would be so cool if Peter breaks his leg (are you getting the theater connection?) and James has to replace him at the last second. That would be sooo cool, cuz he's perfect for the role!
Author's Response: Yes, the fight Lily and James get into is almost a bit bloody without the blood, isn't it? But it's the best stuff to write! :D Thank you so much for the review - I love reading what your favorites of the chapter are! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
I loved the scene with James and his mother, and how she kept cornering him with his own words! I also think that you are doing an incredible job with James in ths story, and the dialogue continues to be great! This is one of my favorite J/L fics, and I've read almost all of them!
Favorite Quotes (I realize that this is going to be another ridiculously long review, even worse than the last one, sorry! I just can't pick one favorite...):
"James burst through the doors leading from the street and ran down the slope towards the large group of kids, skidding to a halt just before he hit the stage.
Lily narrowed her eyes at the boy as she was silently reminded of who was actually responsible for fixing up the theater in the prior years; who had suggested the ideas to her father; who had, even, helped the hired workers to renew the look of the theater out of his own free will.
Lily pursed her lips together and glared at James as she heard the group of girls all giggle at James’ untimely entrance.
James doubled over to rest his hands on his knees and breathed heavily. He looked up at Mr. Evans with a beet red face and wiped sweat off of his forehead. “Am I — ” James gasped for breath “ — late?”
Mr. Evans beamed with great pleasure at James. “Right on time,” he said proudly to the boy who had never missed — or been late to — a play rehearsal. “We were just about to start.”"
"James scoffed at Peter’s new appearance that had not been there the summer before. He checked his own hair and was proud to see that his — however messy it may be — didn’t pass his eyes."
"But did he really have to look like he was in some sort of a creepy trance whenever he was thinking? It was borderline disturbing."
"Mr. Evans patted them both on the back. “You two finish chatting; I’ll wait for you in the car, Lily!”
Before Lily could quickly follow in her father’s footsteps so that she didn’t have to “finish chatting” with James, she was held back by an arm dropped around her shoulder. James’ voice spoke very loudly in her ear. “We won’t keep you waiting too long, Mr. Evans!”
Mr. Evans laughed joyously and waved at the pair before exiting the building through the double doors with his script tucked beneath his arm.
Bennett Theater had cleared out. The only people left were a red-faced Lily and a snickering James.
The moment the theater doors closed behind Mr. Evans, James heard a very low and steady growl by his side."
Author's Response: I'm so glad you love James, because I always want him to turn out the best... He's my favorite, even though I shouldn't have favorites. :D And I'm really glad you like this story a lot! That makes me really glad! Thank you so much for the - long - review! :D Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia