That was just lovely! At first I thought Snape was stumbling and blushing a bit much. But then you concluded with this line:
Just as a Potions Master never quite knows which elements will combine perfectly to yield a new magical elixir, none but Fate could predict that a blind clerk, an armless pianist, and a deaf composer could interlock at one critical point in time to break the heart of a heartless man.
What a fantastic line! It explains everything, and ties together all that Snape has gone through so far. It's really quite clever, bringing these three things together in this way to affect such a result. I love Snape's reactions to music, it seems appropriate somehow. I think he'd love Beethoven's Ninth Symphony, or perhaps some Mahler (one of my favorites.) Are you a musician?
I look forward to seeing how this all ties back to Pendragon! Great job!
Author's Response: *bows* I was proud of that one, too. The old one-sentence novel type of thing.
Aww, that was a nice chapter. I liked it because it was different - a change of pace from the usual rush of one chapter to the next that most people put in. good work
Author's Response: *grin* Well, that's the last one I have written at this point, so there definitely won't be any more rushing...
Author's Response: Whoops, I lied, I forgot I had a couple more ready.
Wonderful job, as usual. I really enjoyed reading about Charlie - you did a great job with him! I am fascinated by the character of Dula, even if you did borrow him (that's so neat!) You do a good job of creating sympathy for Snape, even while keeping him in character as the bitter piece of work that he is. I am fascinated by the notes on the next chapter, I'm looking forward to the music bits very much! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Yah, Dula was just soooo cool, I couldn't think of a better character for this story--I'd have to reinvent him! Fortunately, the author was very nice about lending him out--I suppose it would hardly be fair for a fanfic writer to say "don't you dare use my character!"
I loved the "blond bastard" part. It was perfect placed.
Author's Response: Hee hee! Can you tell SS and LM were best friends?
I love this chapter sooo much. Charlie's reactions when he first meets Snape are great, and the way he slowly starts to trust/get use to him is very well written. I also love that Snape is still at the top of his game with the sarcastic comments.
Author's Response: *snerk* Thanks, yeah, I imagine he had a lot of snide to think about for the last 50 years.
Hi there! I like what you continue to do with Harry, and you are developing Pendragon very well. I like her biting dialogue. I assume she is bitter from the injury - does she know Snape researched the spell that caused it? I would think Ron and Hermione's personalities might temper her bitterness a bit more, but I also suspect there is more to her story. Now about that embrace . . . ;)
When I asked about romance, I wasn't actually suggesting it. ;) What is interesting is that you have really towed the line with the potential for romance - it could go that way, but maybe not. Snape seems to have some very fatherly feelings for Pendragon, and my first impression of the embrace here was that he was using Occlumency or Legilimency (or something!) to calm her mind. On the other hand, I could be completely wrong about both! We shall see! I'm curious how long you anticipate the story will be? Well, I really just want to ask how it ends and if Pendragon is cured but *of course* I won't. ;)
Keep up the nice work!
Author's Response: *giggle* Fear not, that wasn't a romantic embrace at all. The explanation will come in about 5 chapters. I'm not sure how long this story will end up, I have 14 chapters so far but it has a bit more to go yet.
Private Lesson so far is one the most "delicious" story to my taste. Although I also enjoy other works deeply but this piece of work is just owesome. I even dream it to become "true", that somehow JKR acknowledge it as "official" HR story after book 7. Hmmm... maybe I will drop her a line suggesting so? Or perhaps we shall start a signature campaign to propose such acknowlegement?
Thank you to share it with us.
Author's Response: *serious giggles* Well, I'm pleased that you like it so, but gee whiz, I think it's a mistake to call JKR's attention to any fanfic--Anne Rice didn't take too well to that sort of thing, after all. Besides, *glances around furtively* I think my book 7 is going to be better than her book 7 (but don't tell anyone I said so). Not to mention that she's allegedly going to kill Harry in book 7 anyway. :o
Again, you've created a history - your own stuff inside this world. Wonderful.
Ron and Hermione's daughter!!!! Oh goodness.
Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Well, it's fun that the world JKR created has so many possibilities within it. :)
I've finally realized what makes me love your writing so much, besides the obvious [excellent writing, in-characters, great plots] - you make it real.
I can imagine Jo herself having all of the information that you put above.
It's something that can happen in the Harry Potter realm, yet *you* made it up. It came directly out of your mind and onto the screen now.
I find it absolutely amazing - I couldn't do it.
So here are my congratulations to you, and keep up the great work!!!
Author's Response: *blush* Thanks--but it really isn't all that amazing. It's just writing. I didn't used to think I could do it either, and then I gave it a try and voila...if you can think, you can write. Really.
Excellent story, Snape is very well written. I never would have guessed that about Pendragon. Please Keep writing. :)
Author's Response: You bet!
Great job! Your background on the curse is fantastic. The history you've given Ron and Hermione and their daughter was also well done. I was surprised by the other side effects of the curse - Pendragon's name, her memory, her magic - it's all very tragic. And to think Harry let her curse him to try to help her!!
I have one question, which I'm fairly sure you won't answer, but I'll ask anyway: is this moving toward any sort of romance??
Keep up the great angsty work! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: You know, I'm not sure. It wasn't intended, but I think there might be some on the horizon...
*giggles* I love the "Are we clear?"; "Crystal." Part. Makes me think of Jack Nicholson and Tom Cruise in one of my all-time favorite movies. *Sighs* Tom Cruise in a navy uniform....
Author's Response: I can't handle the navy uniform.... *grin*
This is a very fascinating story. I very interested to see what happens and to see what has happened. Fifty years of HP history to flesh out. I loved Snape's explanation of past events.
Author's Response: Thanks! That reminds me, I need to update!
Awesome! What a well-thought out backstory, first of all. I love how you connected your story to book six, great job! The curse is just so amazing - what great imagination! It's a terrible curse, yes, but its history is so fascinating. And I know the story of Pendragon's injury will be equally as gripping.
What I really liked about this chapter was seeing Snape open up a bit, and even more so - seeing Harry respond. You have just done an amazing job projecting their relationship into a dark future. It's just so enjoyable to read!
I read one chapter at lunch, another after dinner - you are going to spoil your readers with these fast updates. ;) Wonderful job, some fantastic writing here - keep it up, I look forward to reading more, even if I have to wait!
Author's Response: *snort* Well, you may be the only one! But the speed will drop after about 6 more chapters, as that's all I have written so far. I'm glad you're enjoying it, BTW, it's nice when you write something and someone "gets it," ya know? :)
Lovely job, if "lovely" is the right word for a d/a story! ;) I liked Snape's dark humor:
I'll just have to make up for my antiquarian appearance with my sunny disposition.
How very Snape!
The curse choking Pendragon is a very vivid, dramatic image, as is Snape using Sectumsempra to release it. Great job!
Author's Response: *grin* Thanks!
Eek!!!! oh my gosh, I want more!!
This was by far the best chapter--I'm anxious to find out what happens next!!!
Author's Response: Thanks!
I sincerely hope that Pendragon gives poor Severus a chance... he is, after all, only trying to help.
Author's Response: Well, considering all she knows of him is that he's an ex-con and a complete jerk...
Wonderful chapter! The Black Lightning curse is absolutely fascinating, and you've only begun to tell us its full story! I am astounded that Peter Pettigrew is the one who cast it at Professor Pendragon, I can't wait to hear more of that story. I love the animosity between Snape and Harry, you do a very good job with them. You've also managed to write a significantly older Snape in a very believable, sympathetic way. I really liked this chapter, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Wow, what a kind review! Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it! It's something very different from what I usually write, so I'm always worried that it will get out of control, you know? but it seems to work.
oooh... interesting chapter!
Why do I find arrogant men sexy? *sighs* Ah well.
Keep up the good work!!!
Author's Response: hee hee.
Very intriguing! I wonder why Snape couldn't see Pendragon on the grounds? I love what you've done with Harry here. I know the story is about Snape, but Harry is my favorite character so I'll probably always say something about him. ;) The curse that Pendragon fights is really interesting, I can't wait to find out the story behind her injury. (and Harry's!) Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: The invisibility issue will get explained later, as will more about her injury itself...lots to come!