Very good. I must say i prefer JKR's ending, because none of those four died, but yours is much more realistic. The use of legilimency and Harry's not letting his lack of occlumency skills beat him was nicely done. He used what he'd learned by accident to turn the tables, well i guess Snape taught him something.
i thought it was good but you never said how Harry was cut. am i to assume Voldemort did it while he was using legilimency
Author's Response: actually it was a nonverbal spell
i want to see if i can leave a review for myself
Author's Response: I CAN!!
well that was depressing=( you couldnt have like made ginny all of a sudden wake up and have them live together that would have been better having all the heros die whats wrong with you?? hmf
Author's Response: That was my origanl ending (that they would all wake up and live happily) but there isn't a spell that brings someone back to life.
Wow. A very short yet thrilling one-shot. I was really into it. Voldemort was brilliant and Harry was SO AMAZING!!!!
I would like some more explanation on Harry's death. Blood was "leaking out" but that's really all. If "dizziness was slowly overcoming his mind," then we could see he had already lost a substantial amount of blood.
So cool. The emotional attachment between Ginny and Harry was very clear. I was glad to have been given the freedom to imagine the battle myself, and you giving us how it all ended. Very nice! A favorite. ♥
Author's Response: Thank you very much! and i will definetly see what i can do about making the death clearer.
