Wow I love this very well written
Author's Response: Thank you.
Wow - there really is something very hard hitting about this story... I think it has something to do with how your Umbridge just never seems to feel remorse. She feels no pity, for anyone really, not to mention anything. It's like some kind of blindness - even Fudge is more of a tool to her than a person.
A coldness has stayed with me after reading this story. You took a really unique angle on it all, and conquered every challenge differently, I think, to most others. Well done, and good luck!
:-The Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves-:
Author's Response: The Turnips have House Elves, nevermind I don't think I want to know. My impression of Umbridge is that she has never let herself care about anyone before. She'll help someone if its in her interest, but care, no. Umbridge really reminds me of Count Dooku in the novelization of the third moive where he is thinking about how everyone is either an assest or a threat. There is no third group. Umbridge thinks of Fudge as an assent nothing more. In that way of thinking there is no room for friendship. Its sad that she chooses to live that way, but that is how I see her character. I glad you felt like mine was different, becuase I felt like I didn't really stretch the prompts at all. Thanks so much for reviewing and good luck to you to.
Oh my gosh! You definitely deserve to place in this competition.
When I first saw this story, I thought, "How could this character possibly be made likeable? I have to see this!" Well, Dolores was the opposite of likeable. She was sneaky and selfish and underhanded, and as deliciously nasty as always. Oh, wow, she was perfectly characterised, and she just made me gasp every two seconds at her latest repulsive deed.
You are just as good at writing Umbridge as JK Rowling herself, and this is the first gauntlet story I've seen that truly portrays the character as they are, without romanticizing them or making them wimp out in the end and refuse to kill their target. (I'm guilty of that one... I just couldn't do it.)
Amazing job, in any case. This is a story that's made an impression on me. The scene with Rita and Dolores was particularly memorable-- put them in the same room, and Harry's bound to be doomed!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks a bunch for this review. I honored that you think that the my writing is good, but if I was anywhere near the skill of Rowling, on any of her characters, I'd be writing my own novels not fanfiction. Though I'm glad I managed to keep Dolores in character. I never even considered not having Umbridge kill her target. The problem was trying to figure out someone she would care for enough to make her hesitate. I sure if you had Nott not killhis it was for a perfectly good reason. I definently check yours out sometime this weekend (I've got a 6am flight tomorrow morning and I need to pack). Glad you liked the scene with Rita. Dolores + Rita = lots of fun. I had a blast making that article as far out their as humanly possible. Thanks again for reviewing, and good luck to you in this challenge.