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Name: luvme4ever (Signed) · Date: 08/31/07 22:25 · For: Chapter 1
oooohhh wow ive been looking for one of these!! excelllent job!!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you found it!

Name: marauders maidens (Signed) · Date: 03/12/07 17:17 · For: Chapter 1

Author's Response: Yes - it was rather sad, wasn't it...

Name: deanine (Signed) · Date: 01/01/07 22:50 · For: Chapter 1
Okay, wow. This was vivid and well written and it brought me down. *weeps*

As a person who loves Fred and George and loves to torture them this was a joy to read. Every word I was looking for the backstory. What could have happened to bring Fred to this moment? How could it be possible? Was George dead? How would George dying bring Fred to this??

You had me groping for answers until the very end... when you ended Fred. *weeps more*

Constructive comment: Where you say airwaves, I wonder if you mean airways?

*sniffle* Now that I've cried, I'm going to find something happier to read.

Author's Response: Thank you so much deanine! Yes - I heart Fred and George too, and just couldn't pass up this chance. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it - finding the backstory was one of my favourite parts, finding the reasoning behind the terrible chain of events that took place. Yes - I did mean airways! Thanks! And thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

Name: Hp_4_eva (Signed) · Date: 12/18/06 0:25 · For: Chapter 1
That ws amazing.

If you were my 8th grade Language Arts teacher, you would tell me to support that statement with facts and bits from the story. In honor of her dead self, I am going to do just that.

First of all, the reviews that you've already gotten are right on. It is an amazingly hard and complex thing to make a story that involves a Wealey, Death Eaters, and no duels going inbetween the middle of them. You made it seem not only possible, but given the circumstances, likely even that Fred would become a Death Eater for his brother.

It's the sort of story that does the characters justice. I know this may sound strange, but I'm struggleing to find the right way to say this. It has poetic qualities to it, but is not nearly so boring. While it's poetic and sobering, it doesn't entirely lose the spirit of the twins, because of the incrtedibly large amount of irony. He grew up being entirely anti-Voldemort, and then here he is, getting a dark mark.

It's an amazing story. I would add it to my favorites, but that list is getting too close to 200 for comfort, so i'll add you as an author on. This story really is amazing. 10/10 on this one.

Author's Response: Wow - thank you so much for your review. I'm so flattered that you thought it did the characters justice - as I do get completely what you mean by that, and I'm so, so glad that you think so. I'm afraid I am rather a large fan of irony, so you'll find it a lot in my stories. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.

Name: lily_evans34 (Signed) · Date: 12/01/06 20:12 · For: Chapter 1
Teh Kiara!


Ahem. Yes. I would leave a SPEWing review, but as I beta'd it, it might defeat the purpose. Actually, I might just SPEW review it later. Hm. There's a thought.

Anyway, as you know, I completely adored this story! I never thought that Fred being a DE could be believable, but alas, you pulled it off!

Just thought I'd drop by to say that you pwn, and w00t for getting it accepted!

This spammilicious review has been brought to you by a one Rachel, who has no life and enjoys reviewing triplet fics.

Author's Response: Rachelsquee! *hugglespwningtripletspamalso!* Thank you so much hun - for betaing, and now for reviewing as well! And wahey for spammilicious reviews! *hearts*

Name: Cinderella Angelina (Signed) · Date: 11/26/06 20:07 · For: Chapter 1
This story was really good. Quite incredible, actually. You made Fred Weasley becoming a Death Eater almost believable. The ... Iím not sure if it was the images, the description, or what, but I really felt like I understood Fredís life. The constant references to George were probably the best part of whatever it is Iím trying to describe. It was quite shocking to find out that while we knew from the very start that he was doing this for George, it wasnít for him, as if he were avenging him. It was to pay him back. Incredible.

The part where Bill talks to Fred was very powerful and almost convincing. (Yeah, I keep using the word Ďalmostí. Thatís because even as good as this was I still couldnít quite see it but donít know what to say to fix that so it wonít be brought up again.) It was a good shock to find out that Bill was a Death Eater too, though they seemed to be in it for slightly different reasons.

The theme...more than one way to destroy a man...was very well illustrated, I thought. Itís an interesting thought. True, too, and the way you presented it didnít necessarily preach about it. It just stated it and proved it. A good tactic for papers, perhaps? (Donít listen to me about that. *fails English*)

Possibly my favorite thing you did in this story was the riddle, and how you used the riddle in the retrieval obstacle. It was...it was a nice touch. And having it be Angelina that had it and that he had to kill was perfect for the way you were building it up with George and all.

Okay. Nitpicks. Just for your information, since I am a lazy author and thus expect everyone else to be lazy too and not go back and fix the mistakes I note. Right after the Dark Lord asks what special services he can give to the Death Eaters, there is an ďitísĒ that must needs become an ďitsĒ if the grammar nazis of the world will ever be pleased. A couple paragraphs down, where ďhe said what?Ē Thereís an italics code you need to shut. In the paragraph before the riddle, thereís another ďitísĒ...incidentally, the diligo donatus is a nice touch...

Overall, the writing style on this fic is really good. The emotions are well described and the overall tone of the fic is pleasing in a dark, terrible sort of way. And...thatís all for now. Have a nice day! *D*

Author's Response: *hugs* Thank you so much for this lovely review, Leslie! I can't say how much it means to me how that it was almost believable. I felt that the references to George were important, as he is such an important part of Fred's life - and that's what made it hurt so much more.

I am so glad you liked how it wasn't 'for' George in the conventional sense, as that was a part I really enjoyed writing - however awful it was for all the characters involved. Yes - Bill was in it for different reasons, but I quite liked how all these different experiences happened to everyone, and how they all dealt with it.

I'm glad you liked the riddle, as I remember that took quite a while to come up with and connect to everything. But how ironic that it was Angelina - I wonder if things would have been different if it had been someone else? *giggles* I forget sometimes that I wrote this! So I guess I should know... Merci for the nitpicks - I'll try to go and change them when I get a minute - but likely as not that'll be another year or so!

Thank you so, so much for this lovely review, I'm so glad that you enjoyed this fic and it's dark, terrible tone - as that's exactly as it should be. Thank you!

Name: Silver_Quill (Signed) · Date: 11/20/06 23:22 · For: Chapter 1
Oh my god, Kiara. I absolutely love this! If anything, it's the best piece of work you've ever written. It's wonderful how you can switch from humor in Dear Dumby to angst here, and to romantic-ness in "When is it too Late?" You're truly an awesome author, It'd be awesome if you had a real book published!

Keep writing! This is completely, pwnfully, tighter-than-spandex cool.


P.S. I bought a shirt today that reminded me of you "In Tennis, Love Means ZERO" Haha, like it? I got another one that said "Smooth Like Butter"

This rocks!

Author's Response: Thanks Alexa, you're so sweet! I'm really glad you liked it. I must admit, I do enjoy slipping into a genre I don't usually write, like angst, although I do really enjoy writing humour and romance - the best part is blending them all in together! I'm pleased (albeit slightly disturbed!) that you think this 'tighter-than-spandex cool' - thanks (I think!)! And yes - it would be so cool if I ever got a real book published - I'll let you know when I do! And your T-shirts sound great! Thanks for revieiwing!

Name: rbcarr (Signed) · Date: 11/20/06 23:04 · For: Chapter 1
Very dark. But I like it. It's virtually free of melodrama, which can be difficult when writing stories such as this. Love the choice of character! Fred Weasly, very different. Sentence structure is well done, the characters are developed, but not overly so. And the plot is an interesting one. That twist there, with Bill, that was original. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you - I am so glad that you enjoyed and took the time to let me know, it really means a lot =) Yes, it was quite dark, which is something I don't often write, but I when I do I quite enjoy it! I'm glad you didn't think it was overly done in any form, as I really try to keep my writing realistic (well, as much as it can be in the HP world!). I'm also really glad you liked the twists, as they were possibly the best part of writing this! Thanks for reviewing!

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