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Name: Hokey (Signed) · Date: 08/15/07 8:51 · For: Chapter 1
Hanni!!! *tackle-hugs*

I can’t believe I’ve not read this fic before. It’s one of the best Dramione fics I’ve ever read – original setting, just the right amount of fluff blended into the angst, great characterisation and absolutely beautifully written. I liked the touch with the lyrics, they were very fitting! I didn’t even realise they were lyrics, and not just simply Hermione’s thoughts, until I read the A/N. =P

The whole idea with Draco having been Kissed was just heartbreakingly sad. From the first paragraph I was in tears! The way you then wove in memories into the story was very well done. I especially loved the first memory… so sweet, and sad… “Why do you care so much?” Brilliant. =)

This story had an awesome style and flow, it went by so quickly and easily that I would’ve wished that it was longer. Argh, why couldn’t Draco let his heart decide, for once! *sob*

You’ve done a great job with this fic, hun! Very well written! Me loved it. =)


Name: Phia Phoenix (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 2:03 · For: Chapter 1
Usuall I HATE D/Hr fics, but this one actually seemed more... realistic than most. Tear-jerkingly tragic, of course, but I really liked it. The flashbacks were very nicely done, unlike a lot of flashbacks.
Language was great, too.
What's the Evanescence song? It sounds quite depressing. Most of their songs are like that.

Do you really think Draco will end up in Azkaban? I don't. I reckon he'll come round.

Author's Response: I do too, but you know how it is...for angst's sake...LOL. The song is Your Star by Evanescence, and I'll have your banner soon! --Hanni

Name: bertiebott12 (Signed) · Date: 06/29/07 20:01 · For: Chapter 1
Hanni, this was great! Hermione was perfect, I love the way you write. Great use of flashbacks!

Name: bertiebott12 (Signed) · Date: 06/29/07 19:59 · For: Chapter 1
Hanni, this was great! Hermione was perfect, I love the way you write. Great use of flashbacks!

Name: Doctor Phoenix (Signed) · Date: 04/12/07 17:39 · For: Chapter 1
I have to be honest: I usually don't like Dramione fics. But it seems I have to revise my opinion now, because I did like this one. In fact, I liked it a lot. A whole lot.
I loved the description of the kiss at the end: "a spurt of warmth in the endless cold." Very poetic.
Maybe I've judged the Dramione genre too harshly. Thank you for changing my mind.
-Doctor Phoenix
PS: Thank you for my loverly banner!

Name: dragonwings (Signed) · Date: 04/12/07 12:37 · For: Chapter 1
That was so, so sad... I almost cried. I wish that she could've saved Draco, but at the same time I really liked the ending it was more realistic in the sense that Draco can be too stubborn for his own good sometimes. It was heart-wrenching to see his fate though. Why did Hermione come and see him sooner though? She still loved him when Harry and Ron came to rescue her, so why didn't she go back for him? Anyways, great one-shot, I really liked it!

Name: helgaandgodric (Signed) · Date: 03/19/07 18:59 · For: Chapter 1
Oh! This is so sad, although romantic. I really like the "For a minute, there, I thought he was actually turning into a decent human being" line. It is very true to character, and fits the situation very well.

Kate -> Knight of the Turnip Table

Name: Mind Games (Signed) · Date: 03/18/07 13:48 · For: Chapter 1
I don’t typically read Hermione/Draco stories, but your summary made this too good to pass up. It’s so mysterious and it just made me so curious about the story. I think having a good summary really made my overall impression of the story even better. The way you write is so mysterious and that is why I think it’s so intriguing. You don’t give us all the information right away and you even leave some things unanswered in the end. It’s just perfect! You make me so eager to keep reading and you keep me questioning it all while I’m reading. Great work!

The overall idea you had is unique and different from what I see in most Hermione/Draco stories. I usually stay away from this pairing because I feel that it becomes too cliché, but it’s so refreshing to read the work of an author who takes this pairing and brings new ideas to it. The story actually contains more thought and depth, not just romance between the characters. The way you write Hermione/Draco is so different from what I usually see and that’s one thing I love about it.

The Azkaban setting added to the dark aspects of the story so well. I thought it was rather chilling the way you wrote it. I nearly shivered as you were describing it! Everything from Hermione feeling as if no one trusted her to the separate cells for the prisoners that had received the Kiss. And when you got to Draco…I just felt the emotions and atmosphere so well. The way you describe his lifeless form was so heartbreaking. I loved how you focused on his eyes. I could just picture them. And when Hermione looked back towards them at the end really completed it. Just beautiful!

Now I have my nitpicks to point out…

There were many people who had been sent to Azkaban after the War.

I don’t believe ‘war’ would be capitalized here.

“Yeah, right. Your friends would sure help me.” He said to me.

You should put a comma after ‘me’ instead of a period. Also, ‘he’ does not need to be capitalized.

I think the interactions between Hermione and Draco started off as just a bit too nice on Draco’s part. He seemed to almost enjoy helping Hermione and, given their past, I think he would have treated her more harshly and spoken to her as if she was beneath him. Making his dialogue just a bit more callous and maybe even having him gloat a bit would make his actions more believable.

The second flashback between them was good, but I still just couldn’t quite believe it. I think they both might have been just a little too nice to each other. It just seems like a big jump from having them share so much hatred for each other in the past to having Hermione nearly tell Draco she loves him. The relationship developed too quickly for me. However, I do think the idea is very possible. Perhaps you could mention how long Hermione had been held captive and how she had learned to know a new side of Draco in that time. Was Draco there for Hermione at one time? Did Hermione help Draco when no one else could? If we had a reason for how the relationship came to be, I would have no trouble believing it.

You left off with some mystery, which really intrigued me. I love endings that really keep the reader guessing and questioning the story. This story was very thought-provoking and inspiring to me. You have that way of letting us still think about and remember the story long after we read it, which is amazing! This was such a poignant and lingering piece, as well as a great example of Dark/Angst. Actually I think it could also make a great chapter fic if you’d ever consider expanding it. The ideas are fantastic! Well done!

Katty – Knight of the Turnip Table

Author's Response: Thanks for your heartfelt review with meat! I shall fix my mistakes ASAP. I've been really swamped with RL lately. Thanks so much for your review! It made me happy! --Hanni

Name: Gin_PotterGirl (Signed) · Date: 12/25/06 5:52 · For: Chapter 1
AWW! Tearbreaker! Or...that might just be me.

I really like your story, I mean, a lot. I liked the most how you used a point of view by not giving a person away at the beginning, but then...oh nevermind.

Hermione is kinda and OOC, am I right? If she is, then you definatly pulled it off. I suggest writing more stories like this, you know, from that point of view, because I think it sounds better in your stories then a regular point of view.

Hmm...what else? Oh yeah, you are very good about your details, because I felt like I was there. I think you are very good at Dark/Angst, and you should write more of that catagory.

Hope I helped some, and Merry Christmas!


Author's Response: You really think I'm good at Dark/Angst? Wow. I think I'm best at romance. Hmmm....

Name: nikkiolapotter (Signed) · Date: 12/17/06 15:39 · For: Chapter 1
I absolutely loved it! Great job, Hannah. It was emotional and happy all at the same time. Simply beautiful.

Name: dirty_little_secret (Signed) · Date: 12/15/06 20:17 · For: Chapter 1
Aww i think its sad! but its good! lol

Name: totally obsessed (Signed) · Date: 12/02/06 0:34 · For: Chapter 1
that's wonderful...but draco should come back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that's too sad to let her just walk away with him all alone there, no feelings, no emotions....*sobwailcry*....

however, the one line 'So despite being with Ron - Oh Merlin, poor Ron - I still tried.' confused me...where is ron? does he know about hermione? are they together? you didn't mention any feelings for him, and that almost made me think ron was dead, which makes no sense...

well, congrats on the wonderful story! toodles! -adrienne

Name: Sammi 1992 (Signed) · Date: 11/23/06 13:13 · For: Chapter 1
brilliant. though i'm a sucker for happy endings, but i still loved it!!!

Name: Silver_Quill (Signed) · Date: 11/23/06 0:53 · For: Chapter 1

That was so deep... I love the flashbacks, they're so realistic! And those are some of my favorite songs! You are one of my new favorite authors!

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