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Name: ssslytherin (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 17:48 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won

Author's Response: I'm working on it!

Name: Akari (Signed) · Date: 02/01/08 22:38 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
Loved your story so much!
However, the last chapter was a little rushed, everything else was great!

Author's Response: Yes, it was! >.< Thanks for reading my story.

Name: moonstonesilver (Signed) · Date: 02/01/08 10:37 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
awwww - hope Won-Won doesn't hear that!!! >:D please make him hear it - things'll get spicy after that, i think! and whatever you do - update SOON!! please please please please please please {out of breath} please please please please ple - you get the message, right? PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

Author's Response: LOL I got the message loud and clear! Thanks.

Name: Ibory (Signed) · Date: 01/20/08 20:21 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
I love it!

I love Meow. :]

Author's Response: I love Meow too!

Name: slytherinprincess22 (Signed) · Date: 01/14/08 19:51 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
this has to be one of the most clever stories i have ever read! well done indeed! please update soon. ;-)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying.

Name: Rictumsempra (Signed) · Date: 01/14/08 8:11 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
Awww.. Hermy's so cute as a four-year-old ;3

Author's Response: Isn't she? XD

Name: Rictumsempra (Signed) · Date: 01/14/08 8:05 · For: Tea Time with Meow
Haha, Ron's such a spaz xDD

Author's Response: He is! But he's a cool spaz.

Name: fanofFred (Signed) · Date: 01/13/08 11:38 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
A awesome story! You are a great writer!:-)

Author's Response: Thanks! XD

Name: CrazyForDraco (Signed) · Date: 01/07/08 11:42 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
pur-leeeeeze update soon! I am loving this fic so far and can't wait to read the rest...but poor ron...lol, hanging from the celing...
this honestly truly is my favorite fic ever!

Author's Response: Thanks! XD

Name: carlap (Signed) · Date: 01/04/08 15:32 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
Oh, I loved this chapter!! Please update soon!!!!!!

Author's Response: I shall. Thanks for the encouragement.

Name: dracoluverx3 (Signed) · Date: 01/02/08 4:38 · For: Exploding Cauldrons
Awwww.. this is by far the cutest and funniest stories on here! I love the last line.. "i love you fewat". sooo cuuuteee. Im going to die if you dont continue this. grrwrr.. =]

Author's Response: I am going to continue it. Even if I do leave the fandom, I have every intention of finishing this story. Thanks for your review

Name: RainbowWarrior (Signed) · Date: 01/02/08 1:11 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
Nice story. It's brilliant how your making Malfoy do all that work. ha ha...

Author's Response: Lol. Thanks

Name: Sing Hallelujah (Signed) · Date: 12/28/07 9:39 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
where are you....did you move to spain....coz if you did....i know where you live *evil laugh*

please update :)


Author's Response: I've been busy with real life drama. I have been writing the next couple of chapters but they need lots of tweaking. But I assure that this story isn't abandoned or forgotten. XD

Name: the leaky cauldron (Signed) · Date: 12/14/07 16:48 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
plz plz plz plz plz continue this story plz

Author's Response: Yes, of course. LOL I've been really busy lately so I haven't had time to write, but once everything whines down I'm sure more chapters will go up.

Name: the leaky cauldron (Signed) · Date: 12/07/07 1:44 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
Plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz (pause for breath) plz update this story . :)

Author's Response: I'm working on it. -pats-

Name: Insecurity (Signed) · Date: 12/02/07 13:26 · For: Hot Chocolate Musings
It’s a very quirky idea – Hermione sent back to her toddler years and Draco being forced to babysit her. I commend you for thinking up a unique and very humorous scenario. I can understand why it burst over the restraints of a one-shot. I especially liked the argument that forced the potion explosion – very IC to have Draco and Hermione bickering, and then the bickering to escalate into a full-out duel. Hermione has a ridiculous temper at times, and so I can understand why Draco wished to retaliate. Calling him “nothing but a foul, loathsome cockroach” would certainly have rubbed him up the wrong way. I liked her exaggeration; it shows just how little she was willing to trust him.

Hermione is adorable after her transformation. I really loved the awkward speech when she asked “Who he?” and how she called Draco “Fewat!” (*giggles* I now have visions of Gato Loco leaning over kitty Ferret and saying this!) I could really imagine her as a young child, the way you describe her. Especially her nibbling her hair – something I used to do as a child when I was nervous. It was really cute and well characterised.

One thing I wasn’t too keen on, considering it was in the first chapter of a HUMOUR fic, was the lengthy backstory about Draco’s past. There was nothing particularly wrong with it, but with humour stories you don’t want to dwell on the dark parts. You could have summed it up in fewer sentences or, even more daringly, used satire or dark humour to explain it in a slightly wittier manner. It makes the argument that follow seem slightly more serious, not just angsty teenagers bickering over an unwanted task.

Being the grammar tyrant that I am, I feel I should point out a couple of blips. Firstly, this sentence: Malfoy turned around scandalized that he was being laughed at yet he managed to scowl at the same time. Now, Americans are renowned for using more commas, not less, yet there is a total absence of them in this sentence. In my British opinion, I would say you certainly need one between ‘around’ and ‘scandalised’, plus I would suggest for the sake of pacing one before ‘yet’ also. Plus in this sentence: Draco could only scowl in anger as the four eyed git and a naďve Hermione walked out of the makeshift potions lab in the second floor; a giddy Hermione waving goodbye enthusiastically the entire time to him. This is a very wordy sentence, and you use a semi-colon where it should be a comma. Also, on the second floor, not in. It’s probably just a case of proofreading, but two errors in one sentence means it gets copied and pasted into Word for comment in review – lol! Also, at one point you say ‘Tonk’s pink hair’ rather than ‘Tonks’ pink hair’ – watch out for those fiendish apostrophes after words beginning with s!

Oooh – and funny line that I liked: Draco had been busy inspecting his fingernails when he got nicked by the thick volume across the forehead. *giggles* I could just imagine this. It’s sort of slapstick comedy with a very camp Draco.

This is a very lovely story. I can see now why it has got such a wonderful response from reviewers!

Laur xx

Author's Response: Laura, I haven't replied to your wonderful review. Thanks for all your compliments in regards to IC Draco and Hermione [even as a four year old] Thanks for your concrit on the backstory of Draco and the dark humor/wittier bit. You're not the first to mention it, and I imagine you won't be the last. I have considered rewriting the first chapter but at this point, I rather just finish the story and move on w/some orig!fic. And OMG -hangs head in shame- you SPEWers always make me so nervous when reviewing my stories. Lol. Thanks so much for reading the first couple of chapters. -squishes- ~Ritta

Name: simplyevil123 (Signed) · Date: 12/01/07 12:28 · For: Fewat v. Won-Won
omg that lasted line i would love to see this in the moive i would see that for sure bloody brilliant

Author's Response: Lol.

Name: ellie_hplover (Signed) · Date: 12/01/07 8:04 · For: Nap Time Drama
Ahhh poor hermione without BOB

Author's Response: I know!

Name: ellie_hplover (Signed) · Date: 12/01/07 8:00 · For: Morning Tattletale
Who throws bloody books in the first place?!

that was the best line

Author's Response: I know! That's one of my favorite lines ever.

Name: ellie_hplover (Signed) · Date: 12/01/07 7:57 · For: Libraries, Mudbloods, and Ferrets
I love when little kids can't speak proper, they are always soooo cute!

Author's Response: Thanks. XD

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