Reviews For Freeze the Moon
Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 12/12/07 19:01
Chapter: A Fair Faade

I dont think this is a fic you can necessarily write a review about as you go. Theres so much going on that you cant make assumptions about who the characters are and their motives, which is what makes it so good to read. I mean, I couldnt even remember the boy was Crabbe. As Elle said, I was going though my mental list, and came to the conclusion that it wasnt anyone I actually knew, it was just a small Slytherin boy who perhaps was put in the house because of his ambition, but his shyness lead him to be controlled & because we hadnt seen this him before, we had seen another side of him.

She marvels at why they ignore the beauty of winter, with pure white falling from the sky and the insulating wonder of the packed snow. This is just gorgeous. I just read this sentence and had to pick it out. I appreciate it so much, as Ive never seen or experienced snow in a wonderland sort of way, Ive only had to drive sooooo many hours, only to be disappointed. Its like she permanently lives in a fairy tale, and takes everything in her stride. I just I got so much depth from Luna when she said that she died every day.

Even after half-coming to this conclusion, I still had no idea. But it works out. And, I love how they deal with it, each of them. This line - Luna hugs The Quibbler to her chest, angry at both boys and more than sad about one. its just shes so sure about everything, and her way, although not correct as far as others are concerned, works for her. Thats one of the charming things about Luna, that she doesnt question why he reacts in that way. Good characterisation.

She wonders how hands can be muscular. Hee. Such a Luna thought. Its one of those ones that everyone has and then they go, hang on, doofus, what the hell? Except what I love about Luna, and the way youve included this, is that she does say the obvious things people dismiss as irrelevant. Like this little wonder, here; She sighs, wiping the tears away and licking her fingers, tasting the salt and smiling wryly. Its so beautiful, that Luna does this. I do this (is this normal?). Its just something like she appreciates everything. I adore your Luna, I really do.

The only criticism I can offer (why am I always so torn with criticising? Is it their work of genius, or an innocent mistake? Am I a doofus?) is that I had no idea it was Crabbe. Touching on my genius point, that could be your point, that Crabbes other side isnt noticed, but the only thing Id really guess it was Crabbe from, reading it again, would be his hair, and browns a pretty common colour. Id suggest probably some physique details, and perhaps his thick brow or something. Borrow a line from the books, just so people have that subconscious thought in their head :). But really, aside from that, there was nothing I could find that was really out of place. It was short, but quantity is no measure of quality, after all. Have a nice Christmas :).

Reviewer: liquid_silver
Date: 04/14/07 11:57
Chapter: A Fair Faade

whoa . . . this is excellent! i love how you provided insight into Luna's mind, as she's my favorite character. and i never thought of Crabbe as anything but Draco's dumb lackey, but you changed my mind! i also love the parallels you drew between Belle and Luna. i never noticed it before, but they really are a lot alike. your writing is transcendent.

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 03/27/07 3:28
Chapter: A Fair Faade

Hello! Just for a random bit of information, Beauty and the Beast is one of my favourite Disney Animated Classic's.

I think it is amazing that you matched this song with Luna, I know I never would have thought of it and I have *cough* memorised the movie. Everyone hates watching Disney movies with me because I always sing along and speak the words two seconds before the character does. Never watch a Disney movie with me, if you do you will regret it.

I'm sorry this review is much too silly for such a beautiful and sad story. I'll try to calm down now. *deep breath*

I really loved your characterization of Crabbe. While I was reading the story I kept picking through all the Slytherins in canon and I was trying to figure out who it was. I immediately crossed Crabbe off my internal list because, well, for lack of a more articulate phrase, hes always mean and stupid!

In this story I saw a whole new side to Crabbe, and it was believable. To see him succumb to Dracos leadership so swiftly, even after proving he to be a caring person. He took pity on Luna, someone that is a social outcast, like him almost. Everyone sees Crabbe as the stupid sidekick and everyone sees Luna as loony. It makes sense that he would be able to understand someone like here.

Then there was Luna, the way you captured her actions and emotions in such simple words is truly amazing. You tackled such complex emotions in this piece while keeping her in character.

They leave, and Luna sits on a windowsill, thinking and staring at the frost-covered window. The anniversary, she thinks. Its here, its today, and Im sitting on a windowsill, doing nothing.

That was one of my favourite parts of the stories because I just had a mental image in my mind. We saw Luna, and her loner exterior. Then with one simple sentence we slip inside her mind. I know that when I am distressed about something it is just a simple thought that sets me off and that line shows it perfectly. Almost absently one thought lead to another and after that so many feelings just crashed upon her.

I would make this review longer, but my dad has just scolded me because I woke him up from typing. Just overall, I loved this story. Your characterization was simple and wonderful, you also described settings vividly and it was just wonderful.

She walks down the corridor, looking around as if searching for an answer. She bumps accidentally into the wall, hears laughter echoing throughout, and stumbles back.

I know when I read this it was just a sad *facepalm* moment. I imagined her walking around aimlessly, just lost in her conflicting emotions, and its just like BAM. What I mean to say is, you were very good about getting emotions across.

Eep! *has been scolded again* Thank you for writing such a dazzling and heart-felt story.

-Ellie

Reviewer: Thespidermanblanket
Date: 01/06/07 14:20
Chapter: A Fair Faade

wow. out of all the fics I've read about luna and her mother i particulary like this one

-TSB

Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm flattered.

Reviewer: hermy_loves_ron
Date: 11/19/06 16:09
Chapter: A Fair Faade

That's so sad! But a perfect song choice for Luna.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!!

Reviewer: Huffleclaw
Date: 11/17/06 18:07
Chapter: A Fair Faade

I thought this was a really great story, especially becasue I am currently in the play Beauty and the Beast. How do you get involoved with the school assignments, gauntlet submissions, etc???

Author's Response: Thanks! To get involved with that stuff, go over to the forums.

Reviewer: ginevra715
Date: 11/17/06 16:33
Chapter: A Fair Faade

great parallel between luna and belle, it really is perfect. and this is a such a sweetly sad story! love it. very well-written.

Author's Response: I was so excited when I connected the song and Luna. :) Thank you so much.

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