I've read the whole Snape story till this chapter. I must say this is by far the worst chapter ever. In what possible way does the M.E piece contribute to the story? It does not contribute thematically and I very much doubt it if it will come back later in the story. It actually clashes with the story.
At least the previous stories were entertaining enough though. The perspective on Snape growing up from a young child was wonderful
Author's Response: Hmm. I had to go look at this chapter, and then ponder for a bit, to have a response. Severus isn't quite up to his full strength and evasiveness yet at this stage, but his wish for privacy is all it could every be. So here he's taking a semi-genuine interest in the world outside Azkaban, which will keep Ginny talking more and give him far less time to worry about what he'd regret saying once he feels better. It's an evasive move, and though Ginny suspects as much, she's indulging him. In a sense, it was supposed to fit into his ongoing set of dodges as he refuses to tell her the truth while trying not to lie to her. Too, he suspects that once he's told the whole story, Ginny will go away again, and he's beginning to enjoy the regular company and the actual meals. Therefore, he's not only evading but also delaying. Whether that WORKED or not, storywise, is up to the reader. Clearly it didn't work for you. Sorry! Glad you liked the rest!
Author's Response: * ever. Blasted typos.
Awww that was really nice.
- the last chapter as well as all preceding ones - there was absolutely nothing to remark on.
*clears throat needlessly*
- unless you're going by the german or dutch versions, they, I believe list him spelled with a V.
Ah, thank you once again!!
I can’t tell you how grateful I am to have this story as an alternative to DH. You’ve so convincingly brought Severus to (as you say) “a different sort of” peace, and not in a maudlin ‘everything’s perfect now’ way either, but a very real and psychologically complex way, with much of the old pain and (parts of) the alienation from others still intact.
There are a couple of passages from the last chapter (pre-epilogue) that really got me: “He had nightmares of his lost infant son, adult and disappointed by his father’s weakness. The Lily of his dreams drifted further from his waking memories, more mercurial and less substantial. The Marauders outnumbered him still, some nights” ….achy stab in the heart! (good achy). And “Severus could find himself breathless with wonder that he owned such a miracle as a pair of toenail clippers; conversely, the tiniest setback or hurt could seem one injustice too many, folding and pressing him under the mass of pain that life could be.”
I think maybe Rowling chose the ending she chose for him because she just couldn’t imagine a redemption for him that would work (what? the Wizarding version of a ticker-tape parade [can you imagine how he’d hate that]??, or him entering a Zen monastery…?? chummy handshake and slap on the back from Harry?? come on….)
But you wonderfully found him a place, “shielded from the Wizarding world”… and with Ginny…
The back-scratching and delightful little “attorney-client privilege” joke. The passage where she calls his name three times…. sigh!! “She kissed him back to life”….double sigh!! I would happily have had that scene go on and on…(within the limits of mugglenet censors, of course).
And the touching between them in the epilogue… after all the times Severus didn’t seem to know what to do when Lily extended her arms to him, it’s so lovely to think of him having this ease with Ginny.
And, yes, it was brilliant to show that from Bill’s (surprisingly melancholy) POV, with the bittersweet blend of puzzlement and grudging acceptance…No schmaltz. And the subtly-communicated sense that Bill too lost much in that war.
As always, remarkably economical...though I might have liked to know a BIT more about the quick look on Snape’s face that made Bill like him more.
The Severus you’ve created is such a rich, powerful character, and you know him so incredibly well, inside and out. Rowling may have created him, but at this point she just can’t compete….
The whole Severus in Profile series is going to stick with me a long, long time. And will inspire much rereading (and trying to nudge every Snape fan I know to get online and find it.)
Thank you, thank you, thank you!!! I hereby throw a great deal of virtual chocolate and roses your way…and I wish it could also involve great heaping wadges of cash, which you most richly deserve!! You are beyond fabulous!!
What is WRONG with Rowling anyway? Well, I'll keep checking back here in case you decide to "fix" the travesty known as book 7 (can you tell I was a bit unhappy with the grand finale?). You're definitely my fave Snape writer.
Looking forward to the beginning of another fabulous story: you do seem to see Snape as I do -- and write about him better than I could ever hope to do. I shall "abandaon all hope" of out-writing you, and submit to the pleasure of reading! Thank you, kind author!
That was nicely satisfying. I like how Severus is somewhat included into the Weasley clan and that he married Ginny. That was perfect. Oh, and good choice with a countryside setting. Country dawns are so gorgeous. *sigh*
I adore all your writings about Severus and can never thank you enough. Good job on this fic, and I'll be eagerly reading the inevitable future oneshots. ;)
Dear, dear. I came to this chapter and immediately found myself faced with a grave problem in your work. See, you’re not allowed to call the chapter “Epilogue.” Especially not as it’s only chapter 27. I’m disappointed, especially since I find myself doubting that you will be starting a new chaptered fan fiction in the near future, given the vast gobs of time that your original fiction has been swallowing.
My second complaint (and pardon the vague spoiler, but I know you have finished Deathly Hallows) is not aimed quite so much at you. If we’re going to go in for an everyone-has-children epilogue in canon, why on earth can’t the real one be more like this, with far less sap and far more actual personality? I think the difference is that while both are happy, this one is very human––mess, as you seem to have noticed, is excellent for achieving that feeling––and the epilogue to DH (I mean the book, not your husband) is very fairy-tale. This may be an epilogue, but it still counts as part of the story, as my brain wants to put it, because the interactions between the characters are real and meaningful.
Ride The Mutton gave me some priceless imagery. Hilarious idea. I suppose that if you can ride a sheep without magic, riding a broomstick would easy by comparison. And yet, I somehow doubt that anyone else would have thought of it. I can always count on your writing for refreshingly original (and wryly humorous) events, actions, and character observations.
My favorite bit, though, is the paragraph describing the tactile relationship between Ginny and Severus. It continues what you drew in the previous chapter, and more subtly highlights the motif of touch throughout twenty-five chapters the preceded them. Sleeve brushed sleeve, then bodies angled to suggest leg against leg, then shoulder lightly contacted shoulder. It was remarkable to watch as a dance, as if two strangers performed on a stage, but faintly annoying in family. I like that you don’t “fix” everything; Bill may be family, but he doesn’t necessarily like Severus. Beyond that, though… I love the Touching. Severus has always had an awkward, gloomy sort of grace about him (after all, he is the type to accompany one to the opera), and Ginny has always been graceful in a playful, cat-like way. The imagery of their sleeves brushing is so beautiful because it is so believable, so right, so entirely ordinary and extraordinary. The suggestion of a dance is brilliant, not just because I adore dance, but because it so perfectly encapsulates the relationship you’ve portrayed.
I’ve really loved reading this, and like In the Eyes of Others, it will probably be one of the rare fan fictions that I actually reread multiple times. Thank you.
I love seeing how it all ends - so sweet! Plus, it was a clever touch using Bill's POV! Ginny and Severus' relationship seems (no matter what Bill thinks) very cute and very loving - just what the both of them deserve! This entire story has been wonderful - lovely writing, a brilliantly original plot and perfect characterization. I cannot think of one thing I didn't like about this fic - and about your entire "universe". I hope to see more from you soon!!
Yay! I'm so glad he's finally happy... You've definitely made me ship Ginny/Severus (and made me mad at DH... *sigh*). Anyway, the imagery and the way it fit so well into the Severus you've characterized and built up was wonderful. The reader could understand his feelings, and yet was relieved when he accepted Ginny. :) I can't believe there's only one more chapter though... :(
:) Love Bill's little cameo... Their interactions were hilarious - gotta love Severus... Anyway, it was lovely to see Severus getting moved in - realizing that it's all his. Though I did miss Ginny (and am still hoping, incidentally for her to... pop up... :D) this chapter was wonderful! It's great to see Severus so happy!
This was an excellant few chapters. I love how you've pulled everything together. Great job.
Thank you for allowing Severus his happy ending...
I like how you told it from Bill's point of view.
Oh. Severus finally gets a chance to be happy, and loved, and…I forgive Ginny for all of the things I don’t like about her, because she gave him that. This story – all of your stories – are so well written and easy to believe. The characterizations, and Snape’s slow, slow recovery. Thank you for the wonderful reading.
So so happy to have your Severus back again! I really needed that! Lovely moments all through here...I love the idea that he sent her a Patronus with just blood and will. And that he gets his uncle's house back. So sweet and melancholy, and, as always, laced with your wonderful humor. Thank you!! Write on!!
So so happy to have your Severus back again!! Lovely moments!
Aww. I love the sweet moments thrown in there! Makes me feel all fuzzy inside... :D. Plus, I love your world, and I hope you don't change it too much to fit with DH... I definitely prefer your Snape! Speaking of which, I love the way you characterize and develop him! I can't wait to see where this is all going... Update soon!
Excellent story, true to snape's character but still different from the book in a fun way.
Yes. I will always treat your stories as my own 'canon'. Keep writing! Would love to see some more missing moments and other snapefics, esp from DH