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Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 10/01/07 3:24 · For: James Potter - A Death Eater?
It's interesting but I'm not sure why James didn't try and escape everytime he was away from Voldermort... or why Dumbeldore didn't help him escape when he saw him. It didn't seem like he was really forced to do tasks after he was tortured.

I also don't get the scene where he mistakenly thought he was seeing his friends. That didn't really make sense to me. Was he just supposed to be delirious?

Finally, the epilogue felt rushed.

Nice attempt overall, and I think you made one of the better efforts I've seen to make James seem forced into it.

Name: taytay (Signed) · Date: 07/09/07 22:57 · For: James Potter - A Death Eater?
i liked this storie but james is not cut out for being a deat eater.try time travle.

Name: taytay (Signed) · Date: 06/20/07 0:39 · For: James Potter - A Death Eater?
its pretty good i was kind of hoping to hear more but its a good story

Name: Lady Galadriel (Signed) · Date: 03/02/07 17:11 · For: James Potter - A Death Eater?
Wow!!! That was really good! I like the ending! lol

Name: Cheshlin (Signed) · Date: 11/17/06 22:53 · For: James Potter - A Death Eater?
You had one of the most difficult characters to convincingly get through this challenge. I think that you did an amazing job of it. Having James and Lily attacked and giving James no choices was a great way to explain him agreeing to be a Death Eater. You kept true to James' character, and I find that great! Thanks for a great story! Good luck with the challenge!

Name: crazy_purple_hp_freak (Signed) · Date: 11/17/06 13:12 · For: James Potter - A Death Eater?
This was one of the gauntlets that I was most interested in reading...the idea of James becoming a Death Eater seems quite impossible, but I think that you've made it work.

If I could be anything, Id be your tear so I could be born in your eye, live on your cheek, and die on your lips.

I absolutely LOVE this line! It conjures up such a romantic image... *sniff*

I also liked the way that Voldemort slowly extracts information from James, like the fact that Remus is a werewolf. You've tied this in really well at the end...I didn't think that James would kill Remus, and his thought processes here are in character and quite realistic.

I'm curious to know more about the Muggle village outside the cave. It's a really interesting idea to have everyone that James knows in the scene, but as Muggles...

My only crit here is that the spilogue seemed a bit rushed. I wish we could have seen the 'reunion' scene between Lily and James... *longs for fluff* heehee

A great job. Well done!
~Suzie x

Author's Response: Eek, I love getting reveiws! It always makes me so happy! I really like that line to, I didn't make it up, I read it somewhere to be honest. But I was a bit afraid everyone would think it was really sappy! So this is happy making. And I was pretty worried when I found out I had to make him a death eater, but i'm glad that it's at least slightly bleiveable! Loads of hugs Lily

Name: adalittle (Signed) · Date: 11/14/06 22:00 · For: James Potter - A Death Eater?
cool, nice writing style, and hmm interesting, i have never heard a story where James becomes a death eater...

Author's Response: Well I chose the character before finding out my topic. And likewise I've never heard of him becoming a death eater either! But I'm happy to know tthat it still sparks interest! Thanks! Lily

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