Reviews For Trust
Reviewer: Oliver_Wood
Date: 11/29/06 20:24
Chapter: The Betrayal

Oh Jace, this is so good! I absolutly love Neville! and that you are shipping him with ginny. This is so good. I honestly can't wait to read more! There is more, right? There better be!


Author's Response: Nope.. Sorry, that was the end. I don't know if I lived up the the Gauntlet's standards, but I hope I ended it well.

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 11/20/06 14:29
Chapter: The Betrayal

This story was very different from most of the other stories! I really enjoyed how you worked the rest of the Order in and the hinted romance between Ginny and Neville. I would have never suspected Kingsley of being a double agent, but that was a great surprise. Great Job!
Cyns

Author's Response: I honestly didn't plan on making Kingsley a double agent, but when I got the last prompt I just figured it would throw some people off. It did, too, didn't it? hehe..

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: NikkiSue
Date: 11/18/06 0:23
Chapter: The Betrayal

Fabulous job, Jace. Kept me at the edge of my seat and the end totally threw me off. I am SO doing the Gauntlet next time! See you in the SCR.

Author's Response: You should! It was a lot more fun than I thought it would be. I thought it was going to be really difficult, but it was really fun just making things up as I went along as opposed to having a structured plotline. It makes even yourself wonder where the story's going to go next!

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: tickled_pink
Date: 11/17/06 18:03
Chapter: The Betrayal

I loved the way that you kept me guessing throughout the whole story, and how it was a Neville/Ginny just as much as it was about Neville and the Death Eaters!!! Brilliant story!!!
~Tickled Pink~

Author's Response: At first it wasn't a N/G story, but it just fit as the prompts were handed out to me. Thank you so much for your reviews!

- Jacie teh Cat

Reviewer: tickled_pink
Date: 11/17/06 17:51
Chapter: The Glasses

Ooh, the suspence!! How long did you take trying to think of Ravenclaw's item? It really works! I know for my story I spent bloody ages trying to think of something that was feasible. Well done!!
~Tickled Pink~

Author's Response: It didn't take me that long to figure out a Ravenclaw horcrux. I just thought of the few things that would be important to someone studious, then what would most likely hold up over that amount of time. I picked what made the most sense after that.

- Jacie teh Cat

Reviewer: tickled_pink
Date: 11/17/06 17:34
Chapter: The Inside

Great chapter!!! I was just thinking about how Neville would ahve been rejected by Ginny actually, when you brought it up - I love all the explanation for Ginny, and her being portrayed in a less-than-perfect light!!!
~Tickled Pink~

Author's Response: I see too many Ginny's out there that seem too perfect to even exist. I wanted to show her character for who she is. She has her flaws, just like all of us.
- Jacie teh Cat

Reviewer: tickled_pink
Date: 11/17/06 17:25
Chapter: The Spy

Wow, I really liked the room puzzle, the clues were very well thought out!!!
~Tickled Pink~

Author's Response: Hey, thanks!
- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 11/13/06 15:55
Chapter: The Spy

Wow. This is really amazing. I know I never would have been able to wite Neville as a Death Eater, but you've done something truly amazing here. The riddle was also very well-done.

Author's Response: I knew that I'd give up if I tried to write him becoming a DE for real, so I decided to make him a nice little spy.
The riddle took a few hours of brainstorming before I could even try and write it out, though. I'm glad, though, because now I know for sure that if I need a riddle in an upcoming fic, I can do it.

- Jacie the Cat

Reviewer: Mind_Over_Matter
Date: 11/11/06 22:38
Chapter: The Spy

^^ Hola.

I think the initial premise of this story is divine - the timing, along with the Order's plan. Look, I'm not usually nit-picky, but something's come over me today. Thus, I have this:
To think, he, Neville Longbottom, the song of Frank and Alice Longbottom, would have a dark mark on his arm that night.

I’m pretty sure ‘song’ is meant to be ‘son’. And Dark Mark is capitalised. O_O Just to me irritatingly thorough.

But yeah - I thing you're characterising everyone really well - Neville and Harry, as well as the others when they come. I know there's not much time for a lot of dialogue, but I think you did a brilliant job with it anyway.
*Hangs around to find out what happens next*

Author's Response:

Author's Response: Oh, thank you for pointing that out! Yeah, only so much gets by when your beta's 'spell check'. I decided to leave "dark mark" without capitalization because I was using it in the same way as "A beetle on his arm," or "A bracelet on his wrist." But that's debatable, anyways.

I'm really happy with what you said about the characters. If more dialogue is needed, then don't worry - the next chapter has much more "dialogue" seeing as I'm actually including the humor challenge.

Thanks for the review!
- Jacie the Cat

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