Reviewer: lilykins123
Date: 10/01/07 11:23
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh


Reviewer: ILuvSirius01
Date: 07/01/07 16:14
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

Oh, this is a really cool story. UPDATE PLEASE!!

Author's Response: Sorry. -hides- Terrible writers' block and a crazy summer! I promise by the end of summer I'll update :D.

Reviewer: ILuvSirius01
Date: 07/01/07 16:14
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

Oh, this is a really cool story. UPDATE PLEASE!!

Reviewer: ILuvSirius01
Date: 07/01/07 16:07
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

At first it sounded kind of boring, no offense, but it started to get really good, I like the insight you give Lily in her POV I can totally see Lils in rhe common room writing. KEEP Writing, =)

Author's Response: Thank you so much. Please watch the double posting.

Reviewer: ILuvSirius01
Date: 07/01/07 16:06
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

At first it sounded kind of boring, no offense, but it started to get really good, I like the insight you give Lily in her POV I can totally see Lils in rhe common room writing. KEEP Writing, =)

Reviewer: hpluver365
Date: 05/02/07 16:34
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

*tackles fellow Toaster and TWS mate*

Wow! I'm impressed! I think you did an amazing job of writing this from a first years POV, especially a first year that we really don't know much about. I love the personality you choose for her, the nicknames with her friends, the way she treats Potter, etc. I also think that the diary format is adorable. It's also very canon, since we know that Ginny had Voldys diary during CoS when she was a first year.

One thing: You said Professor Binns drowned on but it should be droned instead of drowned.

Overall, great job. Unique idea and awesome piece of work. I hope to see more from my fellow Gryff's!

PS This is your Gryff Review Circle review. You recieved this review because you submitted to a challenge. Keep submitting! We need house points so we can win the cup again!

Author's Response: -bows- Thankee! Should I curtsy instead? -curtsies also- Anyways, yeah, I have typos like that, but I'll go fix that! Thank you, and I'm working on chapter 3, but I have terrible writer's block about Quidditch. -sigh- Thankee again, fellow Toaster! ~Kathy

Reviewer: Banana Shroogle
Date: 04/07/07 18:46
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

I forgot to reply ^^

Sorry if I sounded rude earlier, with my other review. It was constructive criticism, something I don't really do unless I like the story (which makes absolutely no sense, but whatever ^^).

It really is a cool story :D

Author's Response: Thank you very much, Banana Shroogle. Now if I could just get chapter 3 up soon... ~Kathy

Reviewer: BookWorm77
Date: 04/06/07 10:17
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

Great story! I like how you made everything from Lily's view! Somehow, even though I must have millions of diaries and journals stacked around my house, I never get to write in them! How in the world do people find time for them?!?!?!

Author's Response: I really don't know. I'm trying to keep the diary entries spaced apart, without putting the date in the chapter title (that's horrible, by me). Just as a little spoiler, since this chapter obviously takes place in the beginning of the year, chapter 3 is set in October/November (which month?) on the day of the first Quidditch match of the season.

Reviewer: joybelle423
Date: 04/03/07 4:37
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

Hi, Kathy! Wow, nice job here. It reads very much like a diary – I can totally see myself in Lily’s thoughts. There’s a nice flow-of-consciousness feel about it, which makes it relatable and believable. I liked the Transfiguration trauma – hee, that was so funny!

A note of caution, though – the whole having two best friends who fall in love with James’s best friends is a tad cliché and overdone. I suggest changing that up in the near future! Also, as enjoyable as the randomness is, try to focus your plot a little more. I realise this is only the second chapter, but I can’t really tell where this is going (except that Lily and James will get together, obviously). Try sketching out your plot before you start to write, maybe. That definitely helped me with my chaptered fic!

Again, Kathy, this is a very cute, sweet chapter from Lily’s POV. Nice job! I like that Lily is a different girl than either Ginny or Hermione, and I like that she isn’t acting too old. Both are difficult to do, and you’ve pulled it off! Keep it up!

Abigail, Knight of the Turnip Table

Author's Response: Haha, thanks Abigail. And don't worry, I'll change up the little cliche in there after a little while. I need some sort of drama of some sort, and then I'll have her two friends sort of...I suppose, drop their crushes? Well, thanks again! -runs off to work on chapter 3- ~Kathy

Reviewer: cAughtonFire
Date: 04/01/07 13:49
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

I really like this story. It's funny, but not corny. Keep up the good work :)


Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad it's funny, but not corny. I try not to be overly corny funny, but I hope it does make people laugh. ~Kathy

Reviewer: Gin_PotterGirl
Date: 04/01/07 7:54
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

Hi Kathy! I like your story so far! The way you write Lily is great! How do you do it? Well, anyway, this is a nice story! Please keep updating!

PS: Happy April Fools Day!

♥ GinnyPotter

Author's Response: The way I write Lily? Well, to tell you the truth, I just basically mold Beautiful-and-Perfect Lily with a couple of my traits (complaining, being sarcastic), and wallah!, you get a rather complex character. Happy April Fools' Day to you, too! ~Kathy

Reviewer: Banana Shroogle
Date: 03/18/07 23:54
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

It's awsome, I always love Lily diary stories. the other person said- I don't think the Marauders would be so well worshipped from the start. And, wouldn't James be too young to really like Lily like he does now? I mean, sure, he might have had a crush, but threatening other students to stay away from her ( is this the right fic? I read too much of them ^^) would be a little extreme for an 11 year old.

Author's Response: Eh...well, the Marauder were a bit over the edge, and I don't believe it was his OFFICIAL title for her, however, it's probably what some people would automatically assume, due to the fact of how, you know, all ruling the Marauders tended to be. Thanks anyways! ~Kathy

Reviewer: Crows
Date: 03/18/07 12:04
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

Lol, this is entertaining. But I'm just trying to figure out how many of Lily's diary's have been spouted here (Not to be mean or anything) coz it's, quite frankly, getting out of control! But this is lovely and funny. I can remember doing these sort of things when I was eleven (God, how long ago was that?) I especially like the whole parrot thing. That's a riot.

Author's Response: Thank you. I thought it was rather random, but rather funny, as I think that Lily would only document the most important/embaressing moments of the day, and I sort of have a random sense of yea...~Kathy

Reviewer: HJPCATI
Date: 03/17/07 23:17
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

I like this. The feelings are realistic. But don't you think she's talking more like a third year than a first year? I mean, they haven't been there very long, how can the Marauders be so well known and "worshipped" already?

Author's Response: Well...use your imagination. If you think about it, the Marauders probably pulled a prank on someone on the train, and likely it was some girl, or at least some girl was watching, and that girl told her friends and acquaintances, who told all of her other friends and acquaintances, etc. ~Kathy

Reviewer: MJ_Padfoot
Date: 03/17/07 19:32
Chapter: Parrots Do Not Make Me Laugh

Wow! This is totally funny! I love it! Keep up the good work and I can't wait for an update! MJ

Author's Response: Am I really that funny? Thank you so much for the self-esteem boost! ~Kathy

Reviewer: MJ_Padfoot
Date: 03/17/07 19:27
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

This is absoultly totally great! I love the detail and everything! Great job! Can't wait to read more! MJ

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm so glad that you've reviewed every single one of my fics! Thank you, thank you, thank you! ~Kathy

Reviewer: Jules_411
Date: 12/21/06 8:51
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

Very cute first chapter! I love reading about Lily's first years at Hogwarts since we mostly just get her later years in the series. My advice would be to work hard and try not to get into the typical cliches of the Marauders and Lily. I think it'll be a fresh look on the Maruader's Era if you put in original thoughts. Good luck with your next chapter, and if you need an extra boost from a beta just let me know! Now that I'm on break I have some free time...

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I made an advertisement for a beta for this fic, but if you are willing, I could send you chapter 2 for you to look over. PM me if you are interested (my forum username is also SnowyHedwig112).

Reviewer: Malika Potter
Date: 12/20/06 22:22
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

This story is really great. I can't wait to read the next chapter when it is up!

~Malika Potter

Author's Response: Thank you all so much (And you Malika) for the positive reviews!!!! I'll try to submit chapter 2 before the queue closes, but I have a poem in the queue right now, and you may have to wait till 2007 to read Chapter 2!!!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 12/11/06 1:04
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

great start! I love it!well done, 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter 2 was rejected :(, but I'll be trying to re-write and submit chapter 2 and write chapter 3 over the holidays!

Reviewer: Horax
Date: 11/19/06 0:08
Chapter: Who am I? Lily Evans.

The Diary opens much room. Very well done. I look farword to the next chapter. I like lily's look at the world.

Author's Response: I'm going to submit the second chapter real soon. soon as my brother will let me on the main computer at my house, which is the computer chapter 2 is saved on. I also need to work on chapter 3...

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