Reviewer: LilyDaae
Date: 11/27/06 20:12
Chapter: 6. Crossing Paths - Autumn 1975 – 6th Year

really great chapter! I feel so bad for James...and Lily too. I also love how you portray Lucius. He's cruel - look at how he treated poor Dobby - but still has that charm aobut him when he was talking to Snape. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for leaving a comment, Lily! Yes, Lucius is a particularly nasty piece of work, isn't he? Cobras are charming too!

Reviewer: LilyDaae
Date: 11/20/06 20:52
Chapter: 4. Lessons Learned - Spring 1975 5th Year

ooo, really great chapter! can't wait for the next!!

Author's Response: Thanks, LilyD! The next chapter is in the queue. I look forward to your thoughts and comments! starmom

Reviewer: Hatusu
Date: 11/18/06 17:30
Chapter: 1. What the Future Beholds - 1978

Hello there -- interesting story you've got here! I really like the way you've organized it, into different sections for different people; I think it gives the flow a nice continuity. I saw some typos and grammatical mistakes, but that's no big deal. If you don't already have a beta, getting one would probably help you out a lot. :)

Seems you have a good handle on everyone's character, especially Peter's, as he seems to want to spy both out of fear and a tiny little bit of pride/ambition. Good start, and I wonder what's in the vial Dumbledore gave to his brother?

I'm going to keep reading this; you keep writing, great job! :D


Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you have found your way here. Yes.. those pesky typos, etc. They have been looked over, but some seem to creep back in there. How do they do that? ;)

Reviewer: Sekhmet
Date: 11/16/06 5:20
Chapter: Prologue: November 1, 1981

What an excellent and curiousity piquing start to a story! You word choice is diverse and your imagery is wonderful. I also thought you captured the known character of Dumbledore very well, and gave more life to a character we don't know that well. I'm dying of curiousity to know what the 'truth' is in the phial. What a great cliff-hanger of sorts.

Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you Sekhmet! So glad you have you here and I look forward to hearing your thoughts on this story!

Reviewer: MaraudersAffair
Date: 11/10/06 17:31
Chapter: 2. Friends and Empathy: 1970 - 1972

But he was - different from the others. She didn’t know how she knew this, but she did. He was thin, and his light brown hair often fell over his eyes. Many of the boys in her year had started to grow tall, but Remus wasn’t yet one of them.

What a great description of Remus - I adore your Remus and Snape.

He was transfixed by another one of Lily’s beaming smiles. He really didn’t like this feeling and decided it would be best to discourage her.

Exactly how I see Snape thinking. The nice feeling in his stomach makes him vulnerable - of course he would want to stop it.

I don't know why I'm quoting this story, but, damn, I really, really like it.

Please continue it!

Author's Response: I love writing Snape.... I'm thrilled you're enjoying it!! Please tell your friends!

Reviewer: MaraudersAffair
Date: 11/10/06 17:17
Chapter: 1. What the Future Beholds - 1978

Oh, wow - I really like this. I love, love your portrayal of Snape.

Snape believed he was destined for greatness - for something important; for the rest of the wizarding world to finally recognize and acknowledge his unique abilities.

That line says it all about his character, especially when Snape was younger. We see it later as well - in his desire for the Order of Merlin.

But I don't understand why Snape didn't recognize Lily when she walked into the shop - and I'm really excited to find out why she started to cry. Oh, and baby Harry! :D

Poor Peter. I never thought of him being forced into joining Voldemort, like the Death Eaters kidnapping him and bonding him so he couldn't escape. It really makes me think differently about Peter's whole character.

I can't wait to read the next chapter!

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Author's Response: Ah... it wasn't Lily... just someone who reminded him of her. Peter - there is so much we have yet to learn about the little worm... ;)

Reviewer: MaraudersAffair
Date: 11/10/06 15:31
Chapter: Prologue: November 1, 1981

Oh, I'm so incredibly happy that you wrote Aberforth into the story. I've always been very curious about him. Great start! : D

Author's Response: Marauder: And I'm incredibly happy you thought to leave a comment!!! I don't know how much more of Aberforth will make an appearance, but his character is so intriguing!! I hope you enjoy the rest!

Reviewer: Starmom
Date: 11/08/06 19:36
Chapter: Prologue: November 1, 1981

Trust and Betrayal

Reviewer: Starmom
Date: 11/08/06 19:34
Chapter: Prologue: November 1, 1981

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Reviewer: wyowerewolf
Date: 11/05/06 18:17
Chapter: 1. What the Future Beholds - 1978

oh, wow, what a plot!

Author's Response: It's just much more to come! Thanks for commenting! It means a lot!

Reviewer: wyowerewolf
Date: 11/05/06 18:11
Chapter: Prologue: November 1, 1981

i love it! can't wait 2 read the next 1!

Author's Response: The next one is up!

Reviewer: EtherealElation
Date: 11/04/06 20:26
Chapter: Prologue: November 1, 1981

Oooh... The intrigue here is absolutely superb. Wonderful start to what looks to be an amazing tale - I was just re-reading the Sorcerer's Stone last night, and the celebration stuff was one of my favorite lines, so I'm glad to see it included here. Very nice - very good with the characterization, and please, keep it up!


Author's Response: Thanks! Congrats on being my very first reviewer!!! I have several chapters completed, so look for more coming soon!

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