Wicked. Oh, but poor Tom...
Author's Response: thanks for reviewing. And also thanks for saying you like myiste....I gotta update it. Yet again I suffer from lazysitus
Wow. It started out so innocent, and ended... eerily.
This was very effective. You got into his head and made the reader both sympathise with him and connect this confused little boy with the monster he became.
Extremely thought-provoking and left me blinking at the screen like a deranged fish.
Author's Response: Thank you! Tthat's what I was trying to do! Deranged fish are cool! I recently sent in another peom but its not like this...a little humorous maybe. Yet again, THANKS!
Really you good i love it i love your poems....P.S. TOM RIDDLES EViL :-)
Author's Response: No really!! Thanks 0 : )
Aren't ya glad?!? *you: shifty eyes* jk!
I really, really loved this one too! It was really awesome! I really hope you keep writing! These were all great!
Author's Response: WEEEELLLLCCCOOOOMMMMEEEE BBBAAACCCKKK!!! LOL! Yes I'm so glad! Thank you for being such a great reviewer.
There were many unnecessary words that could have been cut out and improved the overall flow of the lyrics. Such as, "but there is" in the second stanza, "and" in the third, the second "things" and "suprisingly" in the fifth, and "just" in the last stanza.
Grr! Fear the harshness!
And happy writing. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll fix these. Hope you liked it.