Reviewer: heartachin4harry
Date: 12/08/06 23:00
Chapter: Ready or Not

I really liked this one. I can't wait to see what happens with Amber and Sirius. Update soon!

Author's Response: The unexpected happens...oopsy..I've said too much...=)

Reviewer: California
Date: 12/08/06 22:37
Chapter: Ready or Not

i like the whole poster idea!!! cant wait 4 the next chapter..

Author's Response: Thanks, I was inspired by a real-life occurence =)

Reviewer: deepdesire23
Date: 12/08/06 22:07
Chapter: Ready or Not

hey just started this story, and i must say its pretty wicked so far. hah, i love all JL stories although you chose a cruel place to end this one:P haha so once again awsome writing and update in the near future

Author's Response: Thanks!! I know I did, I'm sorry =P hehe, but how would I get people to continue reading if they didnt want to know what happens next?? I will, I promise. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: ginny_weasly123890
Date: 12/08/06 22:06
Chapter: Ready or Not

I NEED MORE FLUFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please?

Reviewer: ginny_weasly123890
Date: 12/08/06 22:06
Chapter: Ready or Not

I NEED MORE FLUFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please?

Author's Response: Hmm....okay..I'll call in the fluff machine and we'll see if I can't make the next chapter more cotton candy-like, k? =)

Reviewer: potter_fun_addict
Date: 12/08/06 10:27
Chapter: Ready or Not

Some one Please validate this chapter!!!

Author's Response: Haha, i know!! Come on, listen to them please!!! Hopefully it will be validated soon though =)

Reviewer: pilosus_vis
Date: 12/07/06 16:10
Chapter: Dream Detention

Yes! I like it SO much! I just love the Lily/James stuff! AHHH!!! I'm jealous of them.

Everything was good, but I would have made the fact that she was dreaming a little more subtle. Like work it in more than just saying "Dream" and "End Dream". Either way, it was very good. And I can't wait till the next one is validated!

Reviewer: pilosus_vis
Date: 12/07/06 16:10
Chapter: Dream Detention

Yes! I like it SO much! I just love the Lily/James stuff! AHHH!!! I'm jealous of them.

Everything was good, but I would have made the fact that she was dreaming a little more subtle. Like work it in more than just saying "Dream" and "End Dream". Either way, it was very good. And I can't wait till the next one is validated!

Reviewer: California
Date: 12/04/06 14:16
Chapter: Dream Detention

aw i luv how they r teasing her at the end. i cant wait 4 the party/dance thing. update soon!

Author's Response: hehe, real life experience there =P thanks!

Reviewer: ahtram93
Date: 12/03/06 19:59
Chapter: Dream Detention

Very well written, almost to where I can see the "movie" running in my head. Can't wait for the next chappie!

Author's Response: Oh sweet!! I wish their was a movie...i love to act..it would be great. Anyway thanks for the R&R. =)

Reviewer: heartachin4harry
Date: 12/03/06 17:30
Chapter: Dream Detention

This is soooo good! I love it! THe end of this chapter was great! UPdate soon!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you like it! I've already updated, it just needs to be validated =)

Reviewer: RupertsPheonix
Date: 12/03/06 9:11
Chapter: Why Can't I Breathe?

Love it so far! I just read the first few chapters today and it's a really good start. I think you've given yourself a lot to work with--a nice plot, good characters... Keep up the good work!! =) --RP

Author's Response: Thanks so much! =) Glad you like it so far!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 12/02/06 3:59
Chapter: First Times

Hey, I've read your chapters, and can I ask, is this your first story? I don't know, but I just get that feeling.
Anyway, I don't want to be horrible at all, because you do have a good plot line so far, but I think there is something about the story that seems a little cliched. I mean, don't get me wrong, it's really good, but I get the impression Amber and Sirius will date soon, and May and Remus, and I haven't heard any piece of dialouge from Peter yet. I really hope I don't sound horrible, but yeah, that's just my opinion.
I also think that Slughorn seems a little too strict for his normal character (I actually teach about character development on the forums here so I'm very picky). Slughorn is a very easy-going man and yes, he is fair in the fact that people need to be punished if they do the wrong thing, but I think in this part here he'd be very laughable at them and sort of go soft in the way he say's it, I just get the impression he's strict like McGonagall.
I really hope I haven't offended you, like I said you've got a great plot running and I can see this story going far, I just think there are a few things you might want to consider. If you want to contact me about it, feel free to, I'm willing to help if you want it.
Good luck and Well Done!
babekitty_92 :)

Author's Response: Omgosh I'm not offended at all!! I love constructive criticism almost as much as I like positive review! Yes, it's my first fanfic, though definately not my last. Hmm...I think I'll look into the character development thing, and yes, I know Slughorn is more..jolly...but I needed Lily to go to detention and I didnt think she'd be caught setting off Dungbombs =P I might just take you up on that offer, thanks! =D

Reviewer: magicpolarpotterfan
Date: 12/02/06 3:48
Chapter: First Times

I reAlly like your story so far! I glad the next chapter will be coming soon. Thank YOu. Keep Writing!

Author's Response: YaY!! Music to my ears! You're very welcome =)

Reviewer: magicpolarpotterfan
Date: 12/02/06 3:45
Chapter: Dream Detention

Why isn't this chapter there? Why can't i read it?

Author's Response: Because it needs to be validated. If you add this story to your favorites than when it gets updated you'll get an email telling you =)

Reviewer: magicpolarpotterfan
Date: 12/01/06 16:36
Chapter: Cackling Dingbats

I actually really liked this chapter. I love thwe sound of the Heads quarters. v. cool.

Author's Response: Thanks. Yeah, I wish my room was like theirs..*sigh*

Reviewer: IS bookworm
Date: 11/29/06 19:43
Chapter: First Times

I can't wait for the next chapter. Great story=D

Reviewer: IS bookworm
Date: 11/29/06 19:43
Chapter: First Times

I can't wait for the next chapter. Great story=D


Author's Response: Thanks you, thank you =)

Reviewer: potters angel
Date: 11/29/06 17:02
Chapter: First Times

Can't wait until the next chpter's out!
It's really good so far!

Author's Response: Thanks! It should be out soon, I submitted it as soon as I saw the 3rd one got approved. =) keep reading!

Reviewer: pilosus_vis
Date: 11/29/06 16:38
Chapter: First Times

Dammit!!! Give me more! I hate this, the whole waiting process. I keep reading it and it's just awesome that you can write so well. I want to eat at Hogwarts now! Even with just that one line! Steaming eggs and fluffy pancakes. Good stuff.

Anyway, keep it up!

Author's Response: As before, thanks, and read below vvv

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