As a political junky first, and then an HP freak second, I got to say, there was one thing that bothered me at first about this, but in the end, that one thing is what made me like it. What I'm referring to is the fact that this is not specific. You don't reference anything in the books, there are no blatantly obvious allusions or hints that jump out and say, "Hey, I'm referring to this scene or that scene in canon."
The end result is that in so doing, you have taken a poem that could be applied to the Harry Potter universe, but have made it in and of itself universal. In the current events of today it applies ever so much particularly with the iraq war. But even here the vagueness of the subject transcends ideology, or perhaps conforms to many differing brands of ideology.
You could be speaking about those who have fallen in a war, unborn children lost during abortions, people who have unfortunately succumbed to a persistent vegitative state, etc.
And in so doing you make one point clear and that death is in and of itself universal, transcending the boundaries of ideological thought, and even in some way moral belief. You broaden the subject, and at once make it very personal so that anyone who reads this can apply it to themselves and their own feelings.
It certainly does what you wanted. It's a nice poem by my rating standards, and a great poem by my writing standards!
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch! It's really great to know that people are reading the stuff I've written. Get some posts up, I'd like to read yours.
Good question in the poem... and the question is are the ones who died in the war remember as heroes and patriots or as people who failed to pull through.
Author's Response: You nailed it!! That is exactly the question that this poem asks. Thank you for reviewing. (~_0)
Eerie. I really loved it though. I hate to think of the people dying in the war and then being forgotten, or thought of as weak. This was really well done.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I don't like to think of it either, but it does happen sometimes. Ideally, they would be remembered in the annals of history; however, all too often time fades perspective. This is a theme that I will focus on in some of my future posts: Idealism vs. Realism.