Wow. Can't believe I didn't review/see this before now. 'tis amazing. I loved the "My vengeance, it's the rain" bit. Very powerful. I also liked your use of spacing and pauses. Very nice feel to the poem and a very powerful one. Thanks for the lovely read!
Author's Response: Thank you Mithril, this poem is definately "different" from what I usually write so I'm very glad it was met with applause.
As I believe I've already said (although a lot deeper and thought-proviking than now), I loved this poem: the prose, the diction, that metaphor that, as if to show or as if by showing that shared parallell on Harry's vengenance and the rain, how it is at first caught in the clouds or, more correctly, supressed in his mind, then to just to be released and comes flowing out / down to whatever catches it, or gets it ("you").
Well done as always, mcclure. Best regards, James.
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
This is a great poem. The wet and sharp imagery is wonderful and I can really picture everything you've written. The line 'the lightning sculpts a path' is particularily well-written, I think, because I can just see the lightning stiking the ground and cutting a path. Great job. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I see you've discovered some of my poems, and I'm very glad you enjoyed them.